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Review #1, by Maya M.

24th July 2010:

I got two sentences in and stopped. You did everything wrong, no offence, in terms of grammar. You never write "Maya, an eleven year old girl, starred up at her ceiling, wandering if she’d ever leave St. Mary’s Orphanage." you've just given away half the chapter in a sentence. Kudos on giving everything away and holding nothing back.
i read a bit further, nothing was held to mystery, and she got her letter like five lines in. It was, no offence, completely wrong in every way.
But hey, i used to do the exact same thing. Keep writing and i'm sure you'll get better.

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Review #2, by jjj

The Train Ride

6th April 2005:

keep writin im readin

Author's Response: LOL!!! I have another fan (I think.) Thanks for the review and I'll try to update soon.

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Review #3, by jjj

The Kirby's

5th April 2005:

tis reminds me of Harry Potter's backround

Author's Response: Maybe a little....or a lot.....lol......

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Review #4, by jjj

Maya's Letter

5th April 2005:

interesting story line-try to make it a little more creative

Author's Response: Lol. Yeah, I'm still not sure about the plot yet. Thanks for the advice.

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Review #5, by Pippinluver

The Kirby's

15th November 2004:

Awesome story so far. Update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

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Review #6, by Trey

Maya's Letter

28th June 2004:

Nice first chapter! I really felt sorry for her. update it soon.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

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