So give me my bloody cookies already , I've been giving you reviews :) Report Review
Short chapters are ok . Im in the procress of writing my own story and some chapters are 300 words others are over 2000 when the spirt moves you it will happen. One tip i can give you is try to be more discriptive when you change locations. It gives the reader more into and helps fillt he page good luck. Still enjoying hte story Report Review
Yes you did spell Diagon Alley Right :) Good story so far. Report Review
wonderfull, you DIDNT kill harry good *eye twitches* Report Review
HARRY POTTER KILLER
*freaks out* are you gonna bring em back?? Report Review
(chapter six )this makes me think of a ping pong ball "back and forth" Report Review
yay- little horney though but yay Report Review
tis' wonderful Report Review
It's a really good story line. I found a few spelling mistakes though.
In Chp. 1 and 6 you spelt weather which I am under the impression is meant to be wither.
In Chp 6 you wrote ascended as accended.
In Chp. 7 you said dought which is meant to be spelt doubt.
In Chp. 7 you spelt the name Fuge vrs. Fudge.
In Chp.8 you spelt Griffindor with an 'e' at the end.
In Chp. 9 you spelt apology as apolegy.
In the same chapter there was se which is meant to be see, thoes which is meant to be those, and wisper which is meant to be whisper. In Chp 10 you spelt conscious as concience.
In many of the chapters you spelt tomorrow as tomarrow.
Also, I think that this story is not necessarily mature prehaps one down, 15+ I believe. Suicide and Rape are common subjects, but that is just my view. For me mature is heavy drug content, abuse, alot of sexual content, heavy language, and detailed murder. Author's Response: Yes, I type far too fast for my own good. Furthermore, not to be a bitch, you also spelled conscience incorrectly. It was not meant as mature...I suppose I forgot I put it under that...*thinks* I don't remember. Yes, your description definantly would be placed under mature. I'm glad you liked the plot and I'm grateful for your review. Love, -FAD- Report Review
WOW!!!! An ending!!!! lol j/k. freakin awesome dude!!!!!! @_@ (yes i am a little looney....*Looks over shoulder.....*Screams* No not the white jacket again!!! it itches!!!!!
Much Love,GothicTemptress_627Author's Response: Yes!! I've finally completed it...and someday, I'll complete Tears of Illusison! Thanks, I'm glad somebody liked it because I DIDN'T!!! Rock on! -FAD- Report Review
do you know why this has no reviews brittany??? cause its QUEER!!! lol why'd you have to fricken kill me again!!! i had already committed suicide!!! and wheres eric ripley, eh???lol well at least i no it has an ending! granted a crap endin lol but maybe thats just cause i DIE!!! AGAIN!!! ahhh well lol c ya gurl!!!! luv, cass the ditzAuthor's Response: You're an idiot cassie...and you know that! Eric Ripley should've been in there so I could kill him off!!! 'Sides, his new haircut makes him look like Josh Abbot. You're QUEER! blah blah blah!! luv ya! luv, Bloody Wearwolf who very much wants to smack you! Report Review
umm..im scared.Author's Response: Don't be scared!! Muhahahahaha...I only bite hard enough to draw blood, Miss Bunny Person. -FAD- Report Review
killed everyone.........Author's Response: Not yet.... Report Review
you wil??? oh babe youve made my day......u r so lovable......hahaha! Report Review
hey its cass i like this name better! hey britt britt looks like u got an admirer! lol......if u dont respond to me im not talking to u ever again! so there! luv, cass the ditz Report Review
oooh baby do me hard-core!......ha. Author's Response: yeah, I'll do that...*sarcasm* Report Review
oh and that gives u the right to tell me to shut up??? eh??? *tear* u just wait till break is over britt britt! grrrrr.....im gonna hug u and hug u and hug u!!!!! muhehehehe! why not tho eric ripley is so goddam sexy! and justin is so goddam sweet! u r so annoying! and so impossible! i cant beleve in the story u wrote for me with eric ripley in it u sent him into a vortex of no return or something like that! how RUDE! well i thot this weekend was fun! hehe! well gots ta go! byezz! Report Review
gurl u know i will get it out of u SOMEHOW!!!! muheheeheheheh!!! or ill ask my precious justin to get it out of u!!!! oh he is so....sweet! well ne wayz i cant beleve u objeted my idea i think u need to burn!!!! in helll!!!!! muhehehehe! well ne wayz at least ure making that story with eric in it!!!! eric ripleys so HOTT!!!! oh yea!!! hellz yea! ooo baby!!! well ne wayz, u update soon, and if i find out u killed harry, u r not gonna live to finish the story!!!!! evil me!!! too bad so sad!!!! i luv u britt britt, and i do wish u would put justin or eric in there!!!! luv ya! luv, ditzy cassie!Author's Response: Cassie...SHUT UP SHUT UP SHUT UP SHUT UUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUPPPPPPPPPPPP!...you know I'm just picking...I even let you HUG me this weekend...NO TOUCHING!!! Report Review
Such a sad chapter but was good none the less!!! It's a shame, mostly everyone is dead. But anyway on a brighter note, i happy you updated since i like this story so much!!! Update soon!!!!
P.S. Did you know you were spelling avada kedavra wrong?? Just wanted to point that out in case you didn't know.........
Much Love, gothic TemptressAuthor's Response: Yeah, I caught the misspell after I posted it and reread it...I haven't had the time to fix it...there's a lot of stuff going on right now. Thanks for the Reveiw! Report Review
HOLY SHT!!!! oh my god oh my god oh my god!!!!!!! u did not just do that britt britt!!!! u didnt make the story happier! u made it very sad! u just killed the-boy-who-was-supposed-to-live!!!!!!! he cant die..oh and neither can ron...or neville...or anyone else...espiecially harry and draco! no siree! do i have to hurt ya britt britt??!! bring them BACK! pleeeez! luv, yuzzz! seriusly! make ME happy, ferget about YOU!!! well i still luv u tho! but hurry and update ma'am! bye!
luv, ditzy cassie who might just have to kick ure but!Author's Response: erm...yeah i did just do that. erm...cassie...YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW IF HARRY KILLED HIMSELF YET IT WAS A CLIFFHANGER!!! Maybe he will die maybe he wont...I've decided how the story should end and I'm not telling you!!!!!!!!!! ^_^! Report Review
Wow, that was extreamly deep but short! I like it!Author's Response: Thanks... Report Review
Nice part about about the ambush taking place ahead of time. Good thinking with Draco dieing; Sounds like a ruthless Dark Lord. all over good job!!Author's Response: Thnx!!!!!! Report Review
love the pic update soon!^_^Author's Response: thanx...erm...i've just updated Report Review
but but but......ERIC RIPLEYS SIZZLEN!!!!! u cant denie it brittany that boy is so goddam sexy it hurtz!! well actually when and IF u bring me back to life this hott eric ripley can come strolling along and take me away!!!! muhehehehe! oh and how dare u call him ugly....ure a psycho!!! i no i have proof! lol, well ill cya l8r, PS. im positive u can squeeze him in there!!!! luv, cass!Author's Response: ERIC RIPLEY MUST DIE AND SO MUST U IF U DON'T STOP!!!!!!!!!!! Report Review
I really really really really really really really really really really really really really like this fic!Author's Response: ^_^! Report Review
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