I'm writing to disagree with the previous review, that nothing happened in this story. The action was in Remus' attitude, and that is a valid topic to write about. In fact, it made me stop and think how much impact this death must have had on him. Very touching. Report Review
Nice story!! I liked it! As soon as I saw it was about Remus, I clicked to read it. You know, I feel even worst for him than for Harry sometimes... I\'ve just uploaded a fic about Remus, so please tell what what you think about it if you\'ve got the time!
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Lovely. Sad. A beutiful piece. Report Review
You\'ll never know if people liked what you wrote if no one reviews it.
The truth is, it seems like it might be a good setting for part of a story, but it has no real appeal on its own. It\'s only a short conversation in a sad setting. You didn\'t build up to anything, and you didn\'t ask or answer questions. Stories (even short ones) have a dilemma that builds up to a climax which is usually the end or solution to the dilemma. I\'m sorry. I just don\'t see the point in what you wrote. It began where it ended, with very little in between. Writing is supposed to take the reader somewhere and make them experience something, all I did was read it and wonder why it said \"The End\" at the bottom of the page. I\'m sorry, but you cannot end if there is no beginning.
You appear to have the ability to write well. There were no errors for the most part and your language useage is pretty good, but you should consider writing something that has real significance or purpose. You might do well if you can do just those things. :)
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