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Reading Reviews for The After Before
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Annie Chapter Two

8th November 2017:
Amazing story!😊

Author's Response: Thank you so much and thank you for reviewing!! I really appreciate it!

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Review #2, by daylight Chapter Two

7th November 2017:
This is so good! Honestly, I'm having a hard time wrapping my head around how good this is.

Your characters are insanely well-developed, like, impossibly so for just two chapters, and I adore their dynamic. You've managed to totally respect the universe JK Rowling created, and also managed to populate it with enough of your own original characters, and the two seem to meld seamlessly. SO impressive, I'm obsessed, clearly.

I also really appreciate Nellie's relationship with everyone - it's clear each dynamic is developed in its own way, just like real friendships, and I'm also really pleased that Nellie is sometimes teased or makes mistakes - so often writers end up writing their OCs as this perfect creature, but the way you've written her is so realistic! Everyone is witty and amazing, very Ravenclaw - it can be hard to capture the balance between being a normal teenager and a 'nerdy' Ravenclaw, sometimes people go too far in one direction, but you've balanced it so well!!

Anyway, gushing over, well done, can't wait to read more!!

Author's Response: Oh, my God. THANK YOU for such a kind review!! I've worked hard on developing my characters and establishing a dynamic early, and I'm so happy you've noticed it and liked it. Thank you so much for taking the time to write this, and I really hope you give me more commentary for upcoming chapters!!

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Review #3, by BBHP Chapter Two

5th November 2017:
I'm okay with another James Potter romance, especially since yours is set up so nicely. I like your descriptions of your characters, and how you showed the little differences between James and Albus. It had me thinking back to how the Weasley boys were described and comparing them. Cornelia seems funny and witty, especially with her frequent Shakespeare quotes, and I like her friendship with Albus and Scorpius and that whole dynamic.

I love the little details like Slughorn asking James if his mother ever told him how she got into the club. Things like that that directly link back to the original characters make me so happy! I'm so looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I'm glad you like the hidden details, there will be a lot more of them coming! Thank you so much for reviewing, I really appreciate it!

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Review #4, by Lizzie Chapter Two

4th November 2017:
This is a really good start, but since Iím a stickler for canon I canít help to point out that if Al is in his sixth year than James should have already left Hogwarts since heís two years above him. But I donít think you write what year Al was in, it was just the fact of him being a prefect for another year that got me. Also, since Iím a staunch James Potter supporter I canít say Iím a fan of how fanon makes him into a bad boy and manages to put him down by making him shorter than his little brother. Like, if heís going to be rude, arrogant and obnoxious, at least give him something good, like not having his much nicer two years younger brother taller than him... personal pet peeve lol, so Iím just ignoring that you wrote it and going to appreciate that at least you didnít make James a red head hehee

Nellie is an intriguing character, quick to feel slighted but itís clear she really cares about her friends. Canít wait to learn more about her!

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for reviewing! With the short thing, I only made James a smidge shorter. However, if you remember from the books Al looks exactly like Harry, who is rather tall and lanky (maybe 6' 2"). I wanted to make James slightly shorter (maybe 6' 1") and more muscularly defined to balance that out, since he is more traditionally attractive than Al. Hope this helps, thanks again for reviewing!

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Review #5, by NH Stadler Chapter One

1st November 2017:
Hi there! So I've read this first chapter two days ago but didn't have time to leave a review... and it bugged me that I didn't, because it really deserves more reviews.

I really loved the setting of the chapter and your descriptions made the scene come to live very nicely. Cornelia is a likeable protagonist and I rooted for her from the very beginning. I do have a soft spot for reluctant pureblood characters with complicated family backgrounds so I was instantly hooked :).

Congratualtions on a great first chapter! I will definitely come back for the next one :) Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for the kind review!! It certainly gives me all the encouragement I need to keep writing. Thank you so much for reviewing!

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Review #6, by Ohpl Chapter One

25th October 2017:
I really enjoyed your first chapter. I am looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Thank you so much and thank you for taking the time to review! Every comment helps :)

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