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Review #1, by MargaretLane The Hoary and Haughty Halls of Hogwarts

15th December 2017:
If he's not yet nine, he should have two to three years before he can start Hogwarts, since he needs to be eleven.

Hmm, I'm looking forward to meeting this friend of Lockhart's and seeing what impact he will have on things.

I like the variations of bubbles.

I really like the way he automatically assumes people who don't even know him must be jealous of him. It is so characteristic.

You've written "Quittich" instead of "Quidditch".

I'd actually like to read a bit more about this student newspaper. Sounds like it could be really interesting.

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Review #2, by MargaretLane The Once and Future Me

15th December 2017:
*laughs at his insistence that there is nothing wrong with his sisters being Squibs* It is quite clear he DOES think there is something wrong with it and being Lockhart, no doubt sees himself as infinitely superior to them.

It should be "Beedle the Bard," not "Beetle the Bard."

In a way, he really is just a stage magician, isn't he? I LOVE the way you have him fascinated by them and probably learning from them, how sleight of hand can fool people into believing what you want them to believe.

I LOVE your mention of the Fluke.

You've written "the others witches" when it should be "the other witches."

I love the puns on "He Who Must Not be Named" and "You Know Who."

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Review #3, by MargaretLane Author's Preface

15th December 2017:
This is a really brilliant idea for a story. And should be HILARIOUS.

LOVE the first paragraph. It is so typical of Lockhart's arrogance.

*laughs at him encouraging the reader to buy all his other works*

Oh, you've written "anniversary's" when it should be "anniversaries."

LOVE the simile about the "hungry dementor" and his implication that he is greater and more interesting than Harry.

You capture the essence of Lockhart really well.

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