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Review #1, by Ron 4 Hermione The Key Doesn't Work

4th April 2017:
Hey there, here for CTF!

Wow, this is one great start. It just opens up so many questions, what did Pansy do? How did they get together? What’s Daphne and Pansy’s history? I’m a bit concerned that the fact this is a one shot is going to leave me wanting to find out more.

Oh wow, I feel so sorry for Pansy, but also a little annoyed. I know it must be so hard for her to love Daphne that much and not have her feel the same way, and worse do something to humiliate her, but she’s still pining over her and I just want to shake her and tell her she can do so much better. But oh well, fanfic doesn’t work like that lol. It is an interesting pairing though, definitely random, but I like how you’ve portrayed the two girls and their ‘relationship’.

Okay so that description fits perfectly into this story, and although Daphne means it in a nasty way, at least it might give Pansy a wake up call. Ah, so that’s what happened between them.It must have been hard for Pansy not to say anything though, especially since she loved Daphne, although I can see why Daphne would be annoyed too.

This is a great piece, and a really well written story, even if it is sad to read!

-Shaza :)

Author's Response: Here I am, almost two months later! So sorry about that. Thanks for coming to review. I'm glad you're interested in what happens next.

Yeah, I definitely feel the same. Oh, thank you. I certainly wouldn't call it a relationship, haha.

Daphne is just naturally mean like that in the fic I guess. I didn't really go deep with my planning for this story, I kind of just went with the flow.

Thanks so much! Have a lovely day.


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Review #2, by MuggleMaybe The Key Doesn't Work

4th April 2017:
Hello dear! I'm here reviewing for Hufflepuff CTF Game 3 =)

Your AP has many exciting choices, but I HAD to pick this one because femslash! Thank you for writing femslash. ♥

The language and description you use in this fic really stands out, so that is the first thing I want to talk about. The first sentences is especially strong because of all those verbs that pack a descriptive punch. I really think verbs are the key to description. You seem to always use color in exactly the right place. "Daphne would not press her soft pink lips into Pansy’s hair." Ugh. BEAUTIFUL.

It's quite a heartbreaking story. You capture that sense of longing that's tinged with guilt of knowing who shouldn't want what you want. And, in this case, the reason she shouldn't want it is that while Pansy still loves her, she knows Daphne doesn't want her anymore, and she wants Daphne to have what she wants. And so it's her love against her love, so to speak. What a wretched situation to be in. To me, this isn't a love story. It's more about obsession and desperation. Like the part about Pansy's love being enough for both of them. No, honey, no. Poor Pansy.

And, poor Daphne too. My interpretation is that Pansy told Theodore that Daphne is queer. Is that right? Well, if so, I do understand why Daphne is so cold and unforgiving, even if I wish she wouldn't be.

The quote you borrowed works so well in this, what a great line! And, I really like the key and lock metaphor. Sometimes the things that used to open use up don't anymore. It's a sad truth, and you captured it nicely (if sadly)

Thank you for writing such a thought provoking story!

xoxo Renee

Author's Response: Oh hello, here I am responding to your delightful review (one month late, as usual). Yes, this is one of the little amount of femslash fics I have, and I swear I will write more.

Awww thank you Renee!

It is a bad situation to be in, isn't it?

Yes that is right. Pansy trusted Theo because he's her best friend, and Daphne'd had a crush on him forever.

I'm really glad you liked the story, come back soon.

-Lily Xx x

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