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Review #1, by Dojh167 Photos from life

4th April 2017:
Hufflepuff CtF review

I love that you are always giving attention to ess appreciate characters (and creatures) and Charlie is definitely a character who deserves a lot of that attention!

I was a little confused about who the narrator was in the beginning, but assumed it must be Charlie. The fact that he called the US the colonies threw me.

Snape wonít stand for that yearbook nonsense. On this I think I can say that I might agree with him ;)

Ased on your second paragraph of italics I get that the italics are Charlie in the present looking at photos, though that was not clear to me from the first italics section.

I was surprised by how much I really enjoyed the line ďall of the mud and shit onĒ XD

I like the detail that Lunaís lips always tasted of the outdoors, but the rest of her body was vanilla and lavender. Thatís a good sampling of the very different elements that make up Luna - she certainly couldnít be just all one thing.

Haha the phrase ďtasted of sweat and labourĒ made me think of this website where you can enter a personís name and it generates what two things they smell like and there are some funky combinations like that.

This was interesting, how it gave us a very quick glimpse into three different relationships of Charlieís. Heís not normally seen in relationships and itís surprising to see him in so many. We donít get much in way of details of how each of them ended, just snapshots, which fits very well with the photo theme.

I also thought it was interesting that they all had the parallel of involving a kiss. Overall this was an interesting little story!


Author's Response: Aw, thanks for reviewing this. I really like Charlie/Tonks, so this was just fun for me to write. It was written when I was just starting to feel like writing again, so it's a bit rough in spots.

I also like the idea of Charlie having had a fling with Luna, but it not lasting. I could see those two having a good time, but then Luna moving on to other adventures.

Hmm, sorry the italics were confusing. I might go back and edit that so it's a bit easier to figure out.

I'm glad you enjoyed this overall.

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