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Review #1, by DEAL WITH IT The Confession Part II

31st March 2017:
Your author's note was HILARIOUS!

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Review #2, by Dirigible_Plums The Letter

6th February 2017:
Hello again, ichigo!


I did not expect that bombshell. Maybe you've mentioned it in an earlier fic set in this universe but the revelation that Lexi had a son fathered by Draco Malfoy literally had my jaw drop. Like. What a secret to keep. And here I was thinking that she must be awfully lonely in her life. Clearly not.

Taka seems like a nice kid. Cheeky and determined (do you think he'd be in Slytherin or Gryffindor?) but ultimately he has a good head on his shoulders. How old is he, by the way? I'm not sure whether you mentioned or I just missed it.

I'm really curious about the merge between Muggle technology and magic. How did wizards get it to work around their magic? How advanced has the wizarding world become? I'm very intrigued.

That's it for now. Interesting chapter!

Plums xo

Author's Response: Hello lo, dearest Plums!

I thought I was seeing things when there were new reviews! Thank you very much for stopping by to read "Slivers."

Since I usually start most of my stories with a slow introduction of characters and what not; I figured why not start it off with a bombshell. In this case, a bastard ^_^;

Taka is the duality of Lexi and Draco's persona combined, but a bit more sane and emotionally stable. His age is revealed in chapter 6. If you don't feel like reading ahead, he'll be turning 15.

So when Taka called in, he used a pay phone a few miles out of campus by hitchhiking xD But his mom doesn't have to know that ^_^; Since he's schooling in Ilvermorny, they decided certain No-Maj technology is necessary in their lives because of concerned/overprotective parents. But with every advancement, there are always those who decide to speed things up by going the roundabout way i.e. hacking their way to use No-Maj technology under the nose of authority.

Thank you for the lovely review :D

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Review #3, by Daphne brown The Letter

26th January 2017:
ok fine, when's Delphi riddle coming into the picture (spoiler alert)

Author's Response: Delphi will not be making an appearance. I couldn't squeeze her in :(

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Review #4, by lia_2390 The Meeting

14th November 2016:
Hi there! I'm ailhsa23 from the Ravenclaw Tower here with your review.

I loved HP and the Cursed Child, especially the Albus + Scorpius relationship. I often got the inkling that it was more than just platonic.

Anyway, I really liked where you're going with this. The exploration of the relationships Draco and Astoria might have had beyond their families and friends at Hogwarts, especially after the war.

A few things I would caution you on is introducing so many characters at once. You did make Lexi's linkage to the Potters, Granger-Weasley clan known and all of a sudden, Teddy appears and we've barely gotten to know your main characters. Speaking of which, I really like Lexi. It seems as though she had her son at a young age, and I'm interested in reading more about how she came to be where she is.

Perspective is important here too. I feel like if you're going to interchange them, perhaps allow one of them to have their voice heard for more than one scene. I noticed in both chapters, you jump around a bit. Since you are using third person, you'll have to decide whose eyes your audience reads from. Taka, for instance, his POV would have been great throughout this chapter - one: he never saw Malfoy Manor before, so he could describe it for us, and his thoughts of his mother's reaction to being there again. On the flip-side, writing it from Lexi's perspective - this is important, her narrative reveals her own apprehension of being at the Manor, and certainly about seeing Draco again. If you choose to continue the omniscient POV, then each person should have at least a scene and carefully flow between each others. (I hope that makes sense - basically, if you write Lexi's, it should flow nicely into Taka's.)

Another thing about perspective here is you can alternate chapters, so Lexi's is the first, Taka is the next.

Okay, then there is dialogue vs description. I found this chapter to be leaning more on the dialogue side. A healthy balance can work well. here to appeal to both sides of the audience.

I hope this was helpful. I already want to see where these characters go, and I'm already shipping Draco/Lexi with all my heart and soul.

If you have any questions, don't hesitate to drop me a PM.

- Lia

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