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Reading Reviews for The Queen of Carthage
  
4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by TreacleTart The Queen of Carthage

26th August 2016:
Hello again!

Back for another review for the gift thread! I'm so sorry I've been abysmally slow with this, but better late than never I suppose. :)

So Jill is one of my favorite authors on HPFF and I've really enjoyed her take on Ginny/Seamus, so I was excited to see what you would do with that pairing. I'm a pretty avid Dean/Seamus shipper, so it takes a lot of convincing for me to pair Seamus with anyone else.

Let me say that as someone who's been through a lot of what you wrote here, I thought you did a pretty accurate job of writing the feelings of divorce. Like Ginny I got married young, during a war, and my ex suffered from PTSD which lead to a lot of the hostility that Ginny talks about here. The whole hodge podge of emotions that she's experiencing and the way it's manifesting in physical behaviors like shaking hands is so spot on. The one moment that really stood out to me was Ginny sitting beside the window unable to cry. You sort of hit a point during intense periods of time that there's just nothing left for you to give. You're just completely emotionally spent, so I liked that you had a scene like that instead of her sobbing dramatically. The silent sadness is much more poignant.

I also loved your version of Seamus (even if he wasn't with Dean). I like that he's a proper gentleman and that his warmth puts Ginny at ease. He seems like just the sort of person she needed to bump into.

The ending was a bit sad. I hate to see Ginny lose it like that. I hope that it's more a temporary phase than a permanent state. I can understand the weight of a divorce and stress causing moments of confusion, but to completely mistake Seamus for Harry (I'm assuming) is a bit scary. I think that Seamus will follow her and probably make sure she gets some help. Either way, the ending was very poignant and touched at some feelings I had locked pretty deep inside of me.

Good work.

~Kaitlin

Author's Response: Hi Kaitlin,
Thank you so much for the beautiful review! I am very honored that you chose to share a little of your own experiences with me in relation to this fanfic. I was really hoping to show my respect for Ginny as a woman going through a stressful and horrendous period of time and I was actually quite worried that her mental difficulties might just be put down as something as nonsensical as “female weakness”. Your courage and candor, however, has helped me understand that I was heading in the right direction as far as her physical and emotional grieving is concerned. I myself have not yet married, nor have I been divorced, however, I am a child of divorced parents, so I did actually let my own experiences inspire me while writing this story.

The first scene by the window, in fact, that you pointed out in your review, was taken from a situation my father told me about after his divorce from my mother was official. I think, therefore, having myself lived through something that I found to be extremely emotionally traumatic gave me a sort of respect for Ginny's situation that I might not have otherwise had.

At the same time, I was sincerely glad to hear that you enjoyed the Seamus/Ginny pairing featured in this story. I'm actually not really well-versed in either the Seamus/Ginny or Seamus/Dean fandom, but I thought I might as well give S/G a try since Jill is such an avid fan of them. I also tend to not write straightforward romance fics, so the whole boy meets girl scenario was a little awkward for me. Needless to say, I definitely felt a bit clumsy when it came to Seamus and Ginny's interactions. ;)

Again, thank you for this wonderful review, Kaitlin! And thank you for sharing your own experience with me, it was truly touching to hear about. I hope you”re well!
Best,
Lee Anne


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Review #2, by victoria_anne The Queen of Carthage

26th August 2016:
THAT BANNER THOUGH.

Hello my darling one! ♥

I adore Jill, so I just had to check out this amazing story. She's extremely lucky to have something so beautiful dedicated to her! She's amazing. Senny is amazing. You're amazing. This story is amazing.

Wait. You're not going to sink this ship are you?!

Ah, it's just Harry. Cool. I mean, you're still sinking my ship, but I can handle this one. Poor Ginny though :( You write her sadness and suppressed emotions really well, I love how it shows through her hands shaking.

*SQUEE* Look at them catching up after so long. (And Seamus' son is so cute!) Ginny, you're single. Seamus, you're single. JUST KISS ALREADY.

But as he talked and she listened, she began to wonder if he was not the most beautiful man she had seen. *dies*

I love how she thinks of her children when she considers what she's doing. Say all you want about Ginny, but I think she makes a wonderful mum.

WHAT DO YOU MEAN IT MIGHT NOT HAVE BEEN HARRY?!

Oh my goodness this story has kept me on the edge of my seat! Amazing work!

You've done a fabulous job of writing Senny, especially when they're such an unusual pair. Well done!

♥ ♥ ♥

Author's Response: Hi Jill,
Oh, you don't have to thank me! I'm really the one who should be thanking you, first for reviewing and secondly (and definitely most especially) for inspiring me to write this story. This is one of the first pieces of fanfiction that I've written in about four years and I wouldn't have been able to do it if I hadn't read some of your own fics and been inspired by your love for Seamus/Ginny.

As you can probably tell, I've never written this pairing, so I just hope this story was to your satisfaction. To be honest, I've never even written Ginny or Seamus as characters before, so I had no idea how this was going to turn out. And I know it wasn't exactly a nice romantic story with a happy ending either, so I do hope that didn't disappoint you.

But really, I want you to know that it was absolutely my pleasure to write this fic for you and I enjoyed every single minute of it. Thank you again for being such an inspiration and for taking the time to read and leave such a thoughtful, kind review!

Best,
Lee Anne


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Review #3, by dreamgazer220 The Queen of Carthage

23rd August 2016:
Oh my god. You wrote me a story. You actually wrote me a story and it's AMAZING. *squishes*

Biased opinion aside, this is absolutely lovely. I love your descriptions, and the way you wrote Ginny. I absolutely adored James' concern for his mum. They're clearly very close, and I'm so glad that she took his advice and went to go see a Healer. And promptly ignored his advice, but you know, that's such a Ginny thing to do ;)

OH MY GOD SEAMUS! WITH A SON! This is the cutest thing ever, omg. I loved it. And I loved Ginny's envy of men with children; that somehow fits that bit of headcanon I have, almost like she couldn't measure up to the standards that Mrs. Weasley set for being a mum. I love that they met at a bakery and that he seemed to be the one to bring her back. And bonding over custody battles and courts, my poor babies :( :(

"She saw the people and then she saw him, rushing across the grass to grab at her arm, to pull her back.

But she was on the brink and she knew that he would realize, soon enough, as his hand made its way down her arm, past her elbow, over her bony wrists, that he would see and feel and know."
This is probably one of the most heartbreaking lines in this story, although there were many of them.

I also loved that you kept her husband's identity a secret, although in my mind, it was Harry ;)

And omg, poor Seamus in the bakery. I can't imagine how confused he must have been with what was happening, although I am super glad they met up again. You had me a bit nervous that he wasn't going to show up at first, but of course he's a man of his word :)

This was, wow. Thank you so much!!! (In case you couldn't tell, I absolutely loved this.)

♥Jill

Author's Response: Hi Jill,
Oh, you don't have to thank me! I'm really the one who should be thanking you, first for reviewing and secondly (and definitely most especially) for inspiring me to write this story. This is one of the first pieces of fanfiction that I've written in about four years and I wouldn't have been able to do it if I hadn't read some of your own fics and been inspired by your love for Seamus/Ginny.

As you can probably tell, I've never written this pairing, so I just hope this story was to your satisfaction. To be honest, I've never even written Ginny or Seamus as characters before, so I had no idea how this was going to turn out. And I know it wasn't exactly a nice romantic story with a happy ending either, so I do hope that didn't disappoint you.

But really, I want you to know that it was absolutely my pleasure to write this fic for you and I enjoyed every single minute of it. Thank you again for being such an inspiration and for taking the time to read and leave such a thoughtful, kind review!

Best,
Lee Anne


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Review #4, by pointless_proclamations The Queen of Carthage

22nd August 2016:
Hey there!

WOW this is such a fascinating story.

First of all, you have the most subtly brilliant way of setting a scene. Your descriptive abilities are fantastic: to describe regret as a 'dark and heavy, like the tremendous muscled coils of a snake' is genius.

Immediately, I felt so much sympathy for James and Ginny. Ginny because you've described her condition well enough for it to be easily empathic to, but also in a way that makes it so apparent she's trying to ignore it both to James and to herself. Oh Ginny. . . James because it is apparent that he cares so, so much for her, he stayed with her when Ginny and Harry separated, he's wanting to take care of her, but it must suck for him that she's not accepting his help and that she's not accepting that she needs help in the first place.

Fabulous, she goes to a Healer and decides to ignore the advice given. It seemed strange to me that the Healer would dismiss her as healthy, but then, how much does the Wizarding World know about--I want to say Parkinson's, but I could be wrong. Am I?

It's insane to be able to see this slowly take over her life and how differently people perceive her as a result of this. Seamus's realisation was quite something as was her acknowledgement of that realisation--reading about her watching him watching her--you write tremendously well!

THIS PARTICULAR PASSAGE, KHALESSI--
'Strangers passed her by on the street and none were him or him and she reveled in her purposelessness. The singularity of her existence. She was alone and better off? She was alone andand

Reaching for the thought, she found that it was absent. Like she was absent.'
--IS WHY YOU 100% DESERVE THAT TITLE. Khalessi, First of Her Name, The Unbelievably Awesome, Queen of Writing, Queen of the Words and the Paragraphs, Breaker of Hearts. . .

So much beautiful in this story!!

Cheers,
Em

Author's Response: Hello Em!
Aww, you're seriously making me blush here! What an amazing review. You are really too kind, Em. I'm so, so, so glad to hear that you liked this story. It's one of the first things I've seriously written in about four years so I had tons of doubts about it. There are so many new and different things in my life that I feel must have influenced my writing style, I honestly didn't know how it would turn out until I finished it.

Needless to say, I'm absolutely thrilled to hear that you enjoyed what you read, especially when it comes to my choice of imagery. Often, I find that I have to rein myself in a little when it comes to description, because I have this tendency to go a bit overboard. I'm glad you did not find my prose too heavy or flowery, which certainly is not what I wanted for this piece in the first place. My idea, actually, was to keep the scenes on the shorter side. I also intentionally wrote the story completely backwards first, with the scenes switched around to better highlight the rate of speed and disorientation of Ginny's collapse, but then I ended up completely changing my mind at the last minute, haha.

The one thing I'm thinking I should have made clearer, however, is the exact nature of Ginny's collapse. I know you mentioned in your review that you thought her breakdown was physical, although I intended it to be fully mental, which is why the healer offers her anti depression potions and tells her that she is otherwise healthy. Maybe the ending was too sudden and short? In any case, I will certainly consider revising it to make it more definite and easier to understand. Thanks for your input!

And you called me Khaleesi! *blushes again* I'm not sure I'm quite up to her standards, but it is a true compliment, nonetheless and I am so happy to receive it. Again, thank you so much, Em, for taking the time to read and review this story. Your kind words have definitely boosted my confidence immensely. I hope you are well!

Best,
Lee Anne


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