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2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Dojh167 Sin

24th April 2017:
Hufflepuff CtF Review

Hello! I’m not sure whether or not I need to have read the other stories in this universe for this one to make sense, but I’m going to jump right in and find out. I definitely want to give this story some love, since it doesn’t have many reviews on here. Hopefully it does on other sites, and if not I’m happy to help grow the love here.

Right off the bat you do a great job of being true to the “internal monologue” part of your story. I really feel like I’m within the main character’s mind, just as well as really well written second person narrative. Also, you do a good job of keeping his thoughts a perfect balance of to the point and believably wandering, without distracting from the narrative.

I really relate to the frustration of not being able to get my mind to track where I need to, and I think you captured that well here.

I don’t know who these characters is or the background of what’s going on, but that is okay with how you have written the story. While I may know more about the characters if I had read the other installments in the series, the fact that your MC is trying to put pieces together as well makes me feel right at home in my uncertainty.

I like how you characterize Annet. She is very sharp, reading into the questions her father asks, and as you say she doesn’t ask herself, she demands/interrogates.

Woah, weird. How could they create a human from thestrals? Were people who had not seen death able to see her when she was alive? Or did that only come into effect when she died?

Wow, there’s a lot going on here and I don’t quite understand what it all means, but at least Wolfgang doesn’t seem to either!

Oh wow, but what happened at the end? Did Wolgang try to kill himself? And then get his memories removed? So I don’t imagine we’ll understand what happened there for a while. I am curious whether the next chapters will take place after that last section, or portray what happened in between the sections.

I see you have this listed as a next gen story including Teddy/Victoire and I am interested to see how they come into play.

Interesting start!

Sam.

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Review #2, by Felpata Lupin Sin

24th April 2017:
Hello, Em! Here for CTF (and because I love your writing)

A new perspective in the Kluge family, this is fascinating. I'm curious to learn more about Annett's dad.

And apparently there is quite an intriguing backstory here... who is Sinclair Amelio? And those other people? What happened 27 years ago? Why was Wolfgang Obliviated and by whom? So many questions.

I loved the tone of the chapter, dark and misterious. I loved the way you wrote the sensation of something missing, the thought that there is something you are supposed to know but can't focus on it, I can understand the frustration, it was very palpable.

Okay, you know me, I'm a hopeless romantic, so I really enjoyed that, amidst the angst, you gave us a glimpse of Annett and Albus. You know how much I love those two, don't you? :)

I'm still wondering what's going on. "Faustina here, as a child, was abused by scientists—they created her, well, they created us. Her with the genes of thestrals and me with. . . I am still not quite sure." Does it mean that Annett's father was involved in some sort of experiment, and Sin is seeking revenge or something like that?

Also, the second section... what was going on? Did he attempt suicide? Why?

I guess I'll need to read on, but I will leave for now. Wonderful job as usual, anyway! ;)

Much love, darling.
Chiara

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