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Review #1, by TidalDragon The Inevitable Argument

7th September 2016:
Well...I am going to begin with my guesses about the characters - Roxanne Weasley and...JSP?

The reason I led with that is because I also really like the ambiguity about the narrator. In the instant sense, it kept me intrigued as a reader trying to figure out as the story progressed WHO the narrator was. In the broader sense, it allows the story to serve as a kind of metaphor for this type of relationship, where who the narrator is doesn't so much matter as their conduct and its impact on the other party. I like it.

Mechanically, I thought it was sound and enjoyed the simplicity of the language and description which allowed the theme to rise more to the fore than the details themselves.

Thanks for participating!

Author's Response: I must say, that's a perfectly valid pairing, but not the one I picture. The clue for me is that he's not much like his parents. But it could be James, or any of the next-gen men

Thanks for the review and for running this challenge. I appreciate the amount of work it took to organize this and how the collapse of the forums took the wind out of it.

Simplicity of language and spareness is something that I usually strive for unless I have a reason not to, so I take that as a compliment.

I must admit that I wrote this in a rush to meet the timeline for the challenge, and I think it shows some in the writing, but I'm glad you enjoyed it overall.

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