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5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by nott theodore in the meadows

18th June 2016:
Hi again!

This was another lovely chapter! I'm really enjoying this story so far, and I'd be excited to read more of it in the future. I really want to find out more about Dom and her girlfriend and their lives together. One thing I'd like to know (I mentioned this in the last review too) is the OC's name - I think that it helps us anchor into a story when we know a little more about the protagonist.

The description and imagery was beautiful here, as well! I loved the opening lines when you described the meadow, and the way that it reacted to Dom's presence. It really seemed like Dom was a force of nature and the environment around them responded to that. I think that helped to emphasise how powerful the feelings in this relationship are, and the way that the narrator is pulled towards Dominique. Your imagery just adds even more to that.

Just a quick correction on the French - a better way to say it would be Ce sont tous les lieux ou (with the accent) je veux tomber amoureuse de toi (it's just more natural). It would also be better to include a translation for people who don't speak it. I liked the inclusion of it, though, connecting to Dominique and her family, and the idea of Paris too.

I loved the way that you captured the relationship between the narrator and Dominique in this chapter, though. The scene was just so cute and they seemed so much at ease with each other that we got a great insight into their relationship. I'm looking forward to finding out more about them!

Sian :)
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Author's Response: Hi, I'm glad you're enjoying it! In this next chapter, I'm going to reveal much more about the narrator, so I think you'll be pleased for what I have in store! I was really hoping someone would tweak my French, so thank you for being so helpful. I added a translation, too, which I can't believe I forgot! Thank you so much again, your feedback has been incredible. x

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Review #2, by nott theodore in the mornings

18th June 2016:
Hi there!

I really enjoyed this story! As a start it was really unusual and different to other stories that I've read about Dominique. I've not seen many romances that begin in the middle of a relationship, either, so that was a really refreshing change to other stories that I've read. I'm looking forward to what else is going to happen in this story, because so far it's a really great start!

I think my favourite thing about this chapter was the description in it. You included some really lovely imagery and the whole chapter felt like it had a lyrical, almost poetic feel to it. That made it have a really dreamlike quality and I think that just added to the whole effect that you were trying to create here. That style definitely helped to emphasise the love that the OC felt for Dominique here.

Another aspect I really liked is the way that the narrator listed the different things that she loved most about Dominique. All of the little details showed how well she really knows her and help to build a picture of the relationship between the two of them. The narrator clearly loves taking care of Dominique because she loves all those things about her. The detail about the pancakes was great, too, because it was a little quirk that added to the bigger picture.

I think I'd have liked to know more about the OC here, but I'm sure there's more coming, and I'm looking forward to finding out more about their relationship. This was a really cute story!

Sian :)
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Author's Response: Hi, and thank you so much for this kind review! That is exactly what I was going for in terms of their relationship, so I'm glad it was well-received. I have plans for the narrator, so no worries there! Thank you again! :-) x

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Review #3, by TreacleTart in the meadows

18th June 2016:
Hello again!

Here to leave another review for the LGBTQA+ review event.

After the stunning first chapter, I was really curious to see where you would take this next. I liked that you continued on in a similar format. Your writing is just as lovely here as it was in the first chapter.

The scene in the meadow is really vivid. I thought you used your description really well. I could feel the anticipation building as the characters enjoyed each other's company.

In terms of the romance scene, I liked how you chose to describe it. Enough hints for the reader to know what's going on, but without going over board describing the nitty gritty of things. Very tasteful.

Now, I always try to leave a small amount of CC in my reviews, so here it goes. The couple lines in French are a bit jarring because you offer no translation of them anywhere. If you don't speak/read French you completely lose the meaning. I would suggest offering a translation of the two lines down by your author's notes.

Also, for your direct quote of that poem, the site rules are only 4 lines of copyrighted material. You have 6. I only mention it because I'd hate to see such a lovely piece be taken down over something so simple.

All in all, I really loved this story and am excited to see where you take it from here. In fact, I'm going to add it to my favorites so I can keep up with updates. :) Keep up the good work!

-Kaitlin

Author's Response: Hi, and thank you again! I'm glad that you enjoyed this chapter as much as the first. I realized that I forgot the translation as soon as I published it; my mistake! It should be fixed now! Oh dear, thank you so much for the heads up on copyrighted material, I added an ellipsis so the problem should be taken care of now. Thank you so much for the support, I really appreciate it! :-)

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Review #4, by TreacleTart in the mornings

18th June 2016:
Hi there!

For the LGBTQA+ Review event.

I just happened across your story in the newly posted stories section and thought it sounded interesting, so here I am. I don't see a whole ton of stories about Dominique, so it was nice that you chose to write about her.

I love how you've chosen to narrate this story with the character describing Dominique and all of the reasons she loves her. I particularly enjoyed that you picked unique things about her like the pancakes and the way the syrup drops onto her lips. It really added a nice layer to the story and made it feel like this character really, truly knows her.

The flow of this story was lovely too. You paced the words just right, giving this an almost poetic sound. It was truly a beautiful read. It was an interesting choice every once in awhile to mix in more scientific terms like cerebellum and REM. Sometimes that can be a bit jarring in a soft piece like this, but you handled it well here.

Great job on chapter one! I'm off to go read chapter 2 now!

-Kaitlin

Author's Response: Hi! Wow, thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoy reading this as much as I enjoy writing it. I didn't even think about the addition of scientific terms being jarring; that is something I will definitely pay close attention in the future although I'm relieved to hear that it did not overpower the piece. Thank you so much for your insight! :-)

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Review #5, by magnifique11 in the meadows

3rd June 2016:
I really love the poetic style you're employing here. It's really got the romantic aesthetic to it but without feeling trite or cliched - so that's awesome! Good for you. And as a queer wlw reading this, I'm always here for more women-loving-women romance in fanfiction and I think you're really hitting it out of the park. I love how soft everything it is because that's just, it's so real and beautiful and I'm excited to read more, (hopefully soon). :3

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I'm also queer, and I haven't seen a lot of non-cliched queer romances, so I really wanted to bring one to life that just popped into my head. I'm really, really glad you're enjoying it so far! I apologize for keeping you waiting so long for more, I'm usually quick, but I've had a lot of family stuff going on this past few weeks but I promise the next bit will be up as soon as possible! :-)

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