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Review #1, by marauderfan Are you sure?

27th August 2016:

I've never seen anything like this story before so I had to read this one! No one ever writes 11-year-old Dumbledore.

Omg, I am an idiot. Confession: when you mentioned the strange boy with auburn hair I was like "oh, I wonder who that is?" ... I forgot he had auburn hair. I forgot that he didn't have white hair when he was 11. XD *dies*

Hahaha, the lies about the sorting test (from siblings, etc) seems to be a tradition through the ages!

Albus is so entitled and sure of himself even at that age! Ha, of course he wants to show off his magical skill :P I honestly love reading Dumbledore like this, so incredibly different from the one we know from the books, but it's also possible to see how this bright, arrogant kid ended up as the wise, regretful old man of the books.

I love that you wrote a sorting hat song! I liked it. And I find it easy to believe that the sorting hat would re-use an occasional line from time to time. After 1000 years of coming up with songs it probably struggles to come up with totally original ones, so the reused last line absolutely fits :D

I love your reasoning as to why Albus ended up in Gryffindor, and I can absolutely see that being the case, especially that he had done enough introspection by that point to see that about himself. He would have been a really good Ravenclaw or Slytherin, for sure.

Aww, and I love that you included his friendship with Elphias Doge at the end (and a hint that Albus displayed characteristics of Hufflepuff as well).

This was so great! I would never have expected to find a story like this and it was such a joy to read. :)

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Review #2, by MrsJaydeMalfoy Are you sure?

19th July 2016:
Hi there Kaitlin! I haven't talked to you in a while, I hope you're doing well! I'm here with a few slightly belated hot seat reviews for you! Thank you SO much for donating to keep HPFF alive, I can't tell you how much it's appreciated!

So, as soon as I saw this, I HAD to read it. I mean, come on, the sorting of Albus Dumbledore?! Everyone's debated for so long over which house he was sorted into, I couldn't resist! And I have to admit it was very hard to keep myself from scrolling down the page early to see which house he was sorted into! :P

I think Gryffindor is a good choice, and I like the reasoning here! Of course he had the traits of Ravenclaw and Slytherin to, but I think wanting to learn to be brave is quite brave of itself, if that makes any sense.

It was a little awkward seeing young Albus - I mean, he must have been a bit strange for his age, you know? For some reason I kept picturing him as an old man in this, even though he's only 11. :P

One thing that definitely caught my attention here was your description - especially of the Hogwarts ceiling changing colors! It was so beautifully described!

This was a wonderful piece and I really enjoyed it! Well done!

Author's Response: Hey Jayde!

It's been entirely too long. I miss seeing your lovely face/screen name around.

Thank you so much for following through with the hotseat reviews!

The reason I thought he might be a Gryffindor is because he talks about our actions defining us far more than our words. I think like you said, choosing to be brave is in essence bravery.

I have the same problem. I can't not picture him as an old man.

Description is always my favorite part!

Thanks again!


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Review #3, by PaulaTheProkaryote Are you sure?

20th June 2016:
I’m so intimidated by writing Dumbledore, but I think you really nailed him. You definitely wrote him as the unusual boy that I think he must have been.

What a cruel/hilarious headmaster! Terrorizing the ickle firsties like that! Do you think Albus took part of his humor influence when he became headmaster himself?

Albus really wants to be a little show off. I could see him being in Slytherin very easily. Or perhaps Ravenclaw. I think we all wonder how exactly the hat can be sure about the traits being perceived. I'd like to think formula but probably not so much. The only one I couldn’t see him in would be Hufflepuff. Only for the fact that I think his other characteristics seem to outweigh the loyalty/friendliness aspect at this age. I mean he’s obviously very friendly (see his first conversation with Elphias), but the other traits seem so dominant in comparison.

I like that Albus decided he'd like to be Gryffindor despite the recommendation of the hat. I think it takes bravery simply to pick a house based on skill you need to work at. I love meeting Elphias Doge at the end there. It reminded me of Harry meeting his friends at the table.

Overall, I think like all your stories this one was absolutely lovely!

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Review #4, by dreamgazer220 Are you sure?

10th May 2016:
Swap 2/2!

Hello again!

So I poked around your AP to find something else to read, and I decided to pick this. I agree with you, I always thought that Dumbledore would've had a challenging sorting, and I tend to forget that he would have had a sorting ceremony himself too.

It's interesting, really, that the hat was going to put him in either Ravenclaw or Slytherin, but not Hufflepuff or Gryffindor. It actually makes a lot of sense, as most of your writing does, that these would be the houses they would be torn from.

I liked though, that like Harry, it was Dumbledore's choice to be in Gryffindor so he could improve on being brave.

And you also did a great job of writing Dumbledore as a kid. He's still incredibly intelligent, but I liked that he was able to get Trimble's sense of humor, and you did a great job of showing the other student's anxiety of the sorting ceremony. It actually reminded me quite a bit of Harry's ceremony in general, with the way it was written and everything.

I really enjoyed this! Good luck with the challenge, and thanks for the swap!

♥ Jill

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Review #5, by Penelope Inkwell Are you sure?

30th April 2016:
Hey Kaitlin! I had a minute, so I thought I'd come and give your incredible AP some well-deserved love, since you've met your incredible goal.

What a great idea for a one-shot!

Gravely, the Headmaster nodded, the edges of his mouth bent downwards in a deep frown. “Yes, my dear. I’m afraid so.”
--BAhaha! The headmaster's a jokester. I love it! I wonder if Dumbledore modeled himself a bit on that in later years. Now he seems so severe, but down the line, when he isn't taking himself too seriously, I can imagine him thinking back to good old Headmaster Trimble and deciding that humor was an excellent quality to bring to the job.

He’d always imagined it sounding differently in his own mind and wondered if it was like that for anyone else.
--I like this detail

I'm always so amazed by the way you're able to come up with so many ideas so quickly, and I really loved this one. I don't think I ever thought about Albus Dumbledore, but it's true--we see so many different house qualities in him. He was obviously brilliant, with a thirst for knowledge, and could have fit well in Ravenclaw. He was ambitious and superior, so he could've easily been sorted into Slytherin. And we know he was also compassionate, which is a Hufflepuff trait. So, where did the Gryffindor element come in? I mean, we see him being quite brave later in life--taking on Grindelwald despite all the underlying emotions (and potentially having to face the truth about who killed Ariana); facing down Voldemort; choosing to die earlier than he might have, so that Draco could be spared. He *was* brave. But it seems like a lot of that came out later in life, and it makes me wonder if Dumbledore was always brave. So I love the idea that he chose Gryffindor to learn how to be brave. It seemed very Albus Dumbledore, and it also warmed my heart.

I also really enjoyed the way you painted his character as an 11 year old. He does come across as very cerebral, and initially you almost expect him to be cold. You really bring that air of superiority across. But you also have him show kindness to Elphias, which rounds his character out. Still, that pervasive superiority is great, because I definitely got the feeling in the books that Dumbledore's humility was a developed trait, something he got through the wisdom of age.


Although he simply introduce himself as Albus when asked,
--introduce = introduced

Once all of the students were properly sorted, they filed quietly into the hall.
--it might be better to avoid the word "sorted" here, since in this context that means something different. At first I was confused, like, wait, they've all been sorted into their houses already? "Organized" might be a good alternative.

firey orange color
--firey = fiery

“Albus Dumbledore,”
--this is nitpicky, but the only other student was mentioned with her last name preceding her first, and we know that's how they usually call out names for the sorting, so this broke the pattern.

Names Elphias, by the way,”
Names = Name's

This was a cute little glimpse into Albus' life! I've never read a one-shot about him being sorted before, and I think it was an excellent idea. And it was adorable to see Dumbledore and his future lifelong friend meet and just be casually discussing Dragon Pox cures during their first year Welcome Feast :D I can see why they were friends for so long. Oh, and I loved that he wore purple robes. It just made me think of the school supply list in Harry's day where it specifies "Three sets of plain work robes (Black)". I wonder if Hogwarts made that rule after Dumbledore--they just couldn't handle his fashion! ;)

I enjoyed this, and once again I'm so proud of all you've accomplished! You're phenomenal!


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Review #6, by spike Are you sure?

21st April 2016:
Enjoyable write about other characters. I likes how you worked in the school song. 😀

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