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Review #1, by Pookha Rest In Peace

24th April 2016:
Here for the review exchange from TGS. I'm always glad to read a great, moving, atmospheric piece with little or no dialogue. I think a lot of people automatically assume such a thing is boring, but when it's well written, as it is here, it is a thing of almost poetry.

Your descriptions and the way that you are able to show not only his thoughts, but the atmosphere surrounding his thoughts is clear and precise. This is probably the best story that I've read since returning to the site in force.

I also like the 'girls are lithe, boys are..' line. We don't often see fics with Tom having sexual thoughts and I definitely think that he would have, especially when he was a teenager. This line says it all and doesn't need adding to.

Beautiful and evocative. Well-crafted and technically well-written. Clear and precise. Emotional and fulfiling.

A very nice 10/10 from me and a kudos for one of the best fics I've read on the site.

Author's Response: Hey there, Carl! :) Thank you so much for the exchange :)

Ahhh thank you - I'm so glad you liked it! I know it's the kind of style which doesn't always work for everyone, but it's the only style I can write, so it's always lovely to hear from people who like it :)

Thank you! :) I love doing description - there's something fun and kinda natural about it for me; I struggle so much with dialogue, which is why I avoid it so much :P

And Tom was such a great character to do with description, because I hadn't really done darker, edgier kind of stuff for a while before this, so it was so fun being able to return to it. That line was something I really wanted to include with Tom, because while I do like the idea of ace!Tom, I did like the idea of bi!Tom equally, and it was something interesting to explore, which I hadn't seen done often, so I enjoyed doing it :) I'm glad you liked it - I wasn't sure it would work too well, so I'm happy it seemed to work :)

I loved writing this fic - it was so fun to do and I'm so grateful to Kevin for the prompt because I would never have had the idea without it and the Knockout Challenge, and it always means so much to hear that other people enjoyed stuff - especially this because it was a return to something I hadn't done for so long, so thank you :)

Aph xx


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Review #2, by TidalDragon Rest In Peace

10th April 2016:
Howdy Laura! I am dropping by to review this for the Knockout Challenge and I will start by saying that this piece is simply transcendent. As you may or may not know, I don't use the favorite button lightly, but I did here.

Why? Let's begin with your descriptions. In the beginning I wondered about their length and the comma usage in particular because they seemed to run on while shifting suddenly from one object or building to the next, but it actually ended up coming together quite nicely when I saw Tom's thoughts expressed in much the same fashion along with the descriptions of his appearance, often in tandem with the environment. Despite being third-person it managed to give him this incredibly unique, penetrating voice/aura even without having him speak which I thought was so critical for such a unique character.

The ominous tone of the entire piece was also fed by the confluence of the above with the snapshots in the story. Even at this stage in his life you truly showed us Tom's disconnectedness and disaffection and how it coupled with his own perceived absolute superiority (the Bible verses did a good job reinforcing that, lending the idea that he truly viewed himself as a God).

Sadly, I fear I'm rambling and this review isn't honestly doing the story true justice, but you deserve knowing that I though it was 100 percent brilliant!

Thanks so much for participating!

Author's Response: Hi there, Kevin! :) Thank you so so much for hosting the Knockout Challenge - I honestly loved the idea and loved participating in it, it was so much fun to do! And without it, this story would never have existed, so I owe it to you ;)

Ahh thank you so much! :) I love writing description and I know I'm bad at comma usage and have a habit of letting sentences run on for far too long (case in point: this sentence :P), and those things aren't for everyone, so it always means so much to hear that other people liked it - especially someone like you, because you're an amazing author yourself, so I'm always nervous what you think :) It was strange writing Tom because I'd written him before so I was kinda trying to get back into the voice, but it had been a while so it had changed, you know, and I really wanted it to be him talking about himself, because he considers himself to be so important, and with it tackling something he would never talk about - his relationship with his family - it seemed kinda private. So I wanted to kinda limit it to him and his world-view :) Which was fun, but intimidating :P

I really loved writing Tom's disconnectedness, I can't lie about that :P There was just something so fascinating about how selfish and self-centered his worldview is, particularly with how he considers people: he craves affection and love and praise, but doesn't really enjoy it or know how to get it or how to give it. He just thinks he deserves it, which is a strange way of thinking to most people, I think. But it makes for a lot of fun writing, and I liked playing with such sheer confidence to believe in his own ability :) The Bible verses were originally for the funeral service, to reinforce the background Christianity of it and the presence of the vicar and the church as the setting. I actually wasn't sure about including them originally, but they suited Tom too well with their allusions to immortality and ultimate power.

Thank you so so much for running the challenge and for the wonderful review - it was so lovely to get and I'm just so glad you liked the story! Thank you so much! :)

Aph xx


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Review #3, by filledwithwonder Rest In Peace

8th April 2016:
Hey there! Rach here with your review :)

Wow, that was intense (in a good way)! I think you captured Tom and the inner workings of his mind perfectly. I love how he struggled with somehow wanting (and trying not to want) that familial love, while simultaneously resenting it. You have so many good lines that really get Tom's hostile creepiness, like when he wanted to collect people, or murder the whole church. This is pretty much exactly how I would expect Tom to be characterized. I've never written Tom before as he is such a hard character to write, and you really did him justice.

Your writing style is really lovely. Your descriptions, combined with the pace, made the story feel almost like a slow and haunting melody. That line about the storm brewing inside of him just blew me away.

As for your prompt, the end of a connection between two characters, I think you excelled! There was such a natural progression throughout the whole story, of Tom feeling like this: "It feels strange, so very foreign, losing something he never had losing something he had thought he hed given up wanting so many years ago" to severing that feeling and embracing his madness.

I also loved the subtle horcrux references!

Overall, this is a really great piece of work. It really gave me the shivers, and made me understand Voldemort's motives better.

-R

Author's Response: Hi there, Rach! :) Thank you so so much for stopping by! :)

Ah thank you so much! I love writing Tom, but it had been a while since I wrote him when I wrote this, so it felt a bit rusty getting back into his voice and character, so I'm so glad you liked it :) He's definitely super creepy and I really wanted him to come across as so fixated on himself and what people do for him, you know? So a lot of how he views his parents and thinks about them are in relation to him - he wants other people to love him; he doesn't want to love them. It's a very self-centered kind of world-view, which was very strange but very fun to write :) I'm just so glad you liked him, though, because he's one of those characters who's always been fairly well-developed in my head, so it's a little nervous getting him down on the page :)

Thank you! :) I really love writing description - it comes easier to me than other things - but I know a heavily-descriptive style isn't for everyone, so I'm always so happy that other people like it :) I do have a problem with storm metaphors and atmospheric rain... :P

Ahh thank you! :) I was so nervous about that, because I wasn't sure how it would work, developing a relationship between two people who technically only ever meet once, and never really talk or share anything, so it was a challenge, but I'm glad you think it worked :) I really wanted to show him progressing to the idea of cutting ties, because it's kinda symbolic of that - murdering your past - especially given that he always hated his name because of his father. It seemed to fit to me, so I'm so glad you think it worked :)

Haha, well, it wouldn't have been a Tom Riddle story without Horcrux references :P

Thank you so so much for the lovely review - I'm so glad you liked it, and thank you so much for all the lovely compliments :)

Aph xx


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Review #4, by victoria_anne Rest In Peace

2nd April 2016:
Hellooo! ♥

I just want to start off by saying I'm sorry I forgot to check this out when (I think) I said I would, because I like Tom Riddle and I like dark (hehe) so I'm glad you requested it and reminded me!

Okay, anyway.

Um, excuse me, I have a hard enough time writing Tom without you having to come in here and be so awesome at it!!!

And ohhh, your descriptions! I could just melt into the screen!

Your Tom is to die for (bad word choice? :P) (knew he would be, curses). Like this: "He imagines this would be what it would be like if everyone in it was dead" - creepy, sinister, perfect, amazeballs.

AND THIS: "He wants to collect people, but he cant bring himself to be patient enough." YOU GIVING ME GOOSEBUMPS

One more because it's just perf: "His mother gave her life so he could live, now his father has done the same."

Oooh, you are good.

Argh all of this is just so perfect you've made me gush and spew words into this review (and half of them are yours anyway, oops) but honestly, you have just blown me away with your writing! I don't know how you managed to get such a haunting, distant POV across that is spot on for Voldemort, but you did. You've made him cold and unfeeling, that creepy calm. *bows down*

For Tom Riddle, for darkness, I am satisfied. (Also glad I've finished writing for the night so I don't screw up my work after reading this :P)

♥ Bianca

Author's Response: Hey Bianca! :) Thank you so so much for stopping by! :) And no worries about anything - it's totally fine and normal to forget about these things ;)

Ahhh thank you! :) I'm so glad you like it - I know you write him a lot, so it means so much for you to say something like that! Thank you!

Thank you so much! (Though don't melt into the screen - I imagine it would be painful and confusing and very difficult to explain to people :P) I love writing description so it comes kinda easier for me than other parts of writing so I'm so glad you liked it :)

Hahaha, thank you so much! I love writing Tom - there's something so fun and fascinating about him, being so handsome and so clever and seemingly so perfect but with this dark past and dark self and so detached from everything, you know? And how he keeps so much of himself hidden So it was so fun getting to explore that kinda hidden side of him in this, especially coz it's his family and I had a lot of headcanons about his family and his feelings towards them. It seemed a bit far-fetched, at times for me, so I'm glad you liked it and thought it worked :)

Thank you so so much for the lovely review - it means so much that you liked it and that you enjoyed it; thank you so much! :)

Aph xx


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Review #5, by alicia and anne Rest In Peace

31st March 2016:
I really like rain like that, and I don't know why. I could just imagine myself in that rain whilst you were describing it.

It was a really great way to set the mood for this chapter, and you wrote it fantastically well.

Seriously! Your descriptions are so beautiful and vivid, and you're so amazing at writing them. They seem to flow with such ease, and you have a real talent right here. I could read your work all day every day and just get lost in the world that you're creating.

I'm torn, between feeling for Tom, and for being a bit wary. He seems to flip easily from a normal 'mourner' to someone that should definitely be watched. Especially collecting people. You've done such a superb job at capturing his haunting characteristics. He's so creepy and I love it!

Can you just write Tom all the time? You're so amazing at writing him!

I have no words to even begin to describe just how much I love this. I'm still thinking about it, and I know that I'm going to think of the way that you wrote Tom for a while. It's really stuck with me, and I'm going to have to come back and reread this because I'm just in awe.

Fantastic work, my lovely!

Author's Response: Hey Tammi - thank you so so much for dropping by! :)

I actually love writing rain, haha - it's so fun, even if it's probably a huge cliche :P My only defence is that it does rain a lot in the UK, so it's in line with the form of the setting? :P Or something like that anyway... but I'm so glad you liked it - it was super fun to write, cliches aside :P

Ahhh thank you so so much! :) I have to admit that I do love writing description - there's something about it which works more easily for me than other elements of writing, so I tend to stick to it :P I use a lot of pictures for settings when writing, which helps, so I can't take all the credit, but thank you :)

I love writing creepy Tom, tbh :P There's something so strange and so fascinating about the way he looks at things, which makes him interesting to me. And I loved the idea of his relationship with his parents and other people too being almost entirely self-serving and so the collecting thing came from that - for him, they're just like interesting insects, things he can put in jars and which he can look at occasionally. Which is super creepy, but fun to write :P

Haha, I wish I could, but alas, ideas and muse :P Though I do love writing Tom, so maybe in the future I'll write more of him - who knows? :)

Thank you so so much for the lovely review - it was honestly so great to get and so kind and I'm just really so so glad that you liked this, because I really enjoyed writing it :)

Aph xx


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