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Reading Reviews for My Jumbled Family
  
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Review #1, by Marshal My Jumbled Family

30th March 2016:
Hey,
Iím Marshal (obviously)I decided to stop by your story because I havenít seen you around on the forums. Presently there are two competitions going on for the house of Slytherin (of which I am a member). We have a review a thon going competition against the other houses to see who can review the most and spread awareness of donation month here at HPFF. The site is asking for donations so that it can stay alive. So if you can spare a bit to help keep here alive that is awesome if not, we understand. Just so you know that for every $5 from a new donator another dollar will be donated by another individual. The other competition going on in Slytherin has been going all month long. We are competing amongst ourselves and working to spread the house love. With that said, onto the actual review!

So, I'm not big into next generation stories in a lot of ways or rather they aren't my favorite, but a very strong exception would be Teddy Lupin. I absolutely adore him, so seeing that you did a story focused on him I had to see what it was about.

Honestly I loved this, you created such vibrant details that if I hadn't seen that this was a one shot I would be asking you if there was more to the story, such as Vic being his best friend now indicating that romance is yet to some. James being a chatter box, and other small details. That isn't to say I'm upset that this is a one shot because this story works very well as a one shot, it has a very clear end and it is well written.

To me you got Teddy spot on, you captured his young seventeen year old voice and you wrote him well. I love how you explained his childhood logic and painted a clean picture of what life is and was like for him. Also it is adorable that the potter kids were up to shenanigans causing Teddy to land on his back.

Really this story was quite good and I fear I may now be gushing a bit because I liked the story that much! Great work!

- Marshal
Team Ouroboros
ďThe end is only the beginningĒ

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