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Review #1, by PaulaTheProkaryote Quitting Quidditch

16th April 2016:
Hi again! :)

For starters, I love this universe you've created and I really like your characters. I can't decide if I like Pandora or Lily better. I think the best part about this story though is how much it can stand alone. Really all three of them (that I've might have more and I'll check after I finish this one) can stand alone. It's almost like we are getting sweet little snapshots into their life.

I think there's plenty of reasons why she left quidditch. I don't think it would be just one reason, but several compounding factors. One thing I like is how different the twins seem to be. I think Lily quitting gives Pandora a chance to shine at quidditch.

"I don't think either of us could disappoint Dad. He's got his head screwed on pretty good now." I like this line keeping Waning in mind. I was so worried about Harry and his little broken heart. I know you said he would be okay, but I was skeptical and now I feel a lot better about it. He seems like he's become a top-notch dad and sorted his emotional problems out. I hope he finds love again (subtle hint that this could be the next in the saga...probably set up by the girls).

I understand that teams are very different than what I'm used to (everyone woman for herself), but I feel stressed for Lily. I hate that she has to explain herself to anyone. If she doesn't want to play, she doesn't want to play.

Sally is an awesome roommate. I wish I had been stuck with someone more like her when I went off to college. WHOOP! It was to let Pandora shine. Called it! It's just that Lily seems to be such a kind character like that. It's something she'd do.

Nguyen and the emergency practice was hilarious. She reminds me a lot of Oliver. Sacrifice whatever to win! I think Pandora would probably rather win the spot over than know that she only got it because her sister forfeited. I'm glad that in the end she stayed true to herself.

Overall, I think the story was a really good way to develop Lily's character. She's so interesting and dynamic and sweet and caring. People like that don't tend to put themselves first so it was very realistic in my mind for her to have to be convinced to take care of herself and her goals. I'm excited to see what the characters have in store for the future! Excellent story!

Author's Response: It's funny, I never intended to go beyond 'Waxing' and 'Waning,' but now I have definite ideas about how it all plays out and want to write it. I've got three challenges to finish up before I get back to it, though. I'm glad you like the Harry/Lunaverse that I've made here. It feels like growth to me to kill my OTP and go a new direction.

I knew I wanted to expand on the twins's differences from the original stories and to show more of their individual personalities. I feel that Lily is a prototypical Hufflepuff with wanting to always help and do everything right, and Pandora is much more driven to show herself. I picture Pandora as very like James (I) or Harry and Lily is much more a combo of Harry and Luna.

Yeah, I think that while Luna eventually left, her relationship with Harry really put his head together and having the Weasleys to lean on as 'adoptive' parents would make all the world of difference to Harry. He won't ever fall back into the black pit of despair again.

Glad you enjoyed the minor characters and their interactions with Lily too, like Sally and Nguyen. Thanks again for the kind words and the review.

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Review #2, by Claire Evergreen Quitting Quidditch

3rd April 2016:
Hey! Here for our swap :)

So I haven't read the story that these characters are originally from, but I love that this can stand on its own as well as it does. I'm going to admit that I'm not usually one for stories that break canon, but I really really like this one. It's just such an adorable one-shot. I love the set up and the characters are really well done.

To me, this reads as almost like a character study? In a good way, of course. I love that with this we get to really get inside who Lily is as a person. She cares extremely deeply for her sister and her family as a whole, so much so that she is willing to put her own dreams on the back burner just so her sister could live hers. It's amazingly selfless for someone her age, but you wrote it really well.

I love her friends and her girlfriend as well. I know that Lily's personality lends itself to putting others first, but they're right to try to talk her into doing what she loves. It's not fair to her or her sister if she's quitting just so Pandora gets spot on the team. I'm really glad that they were able to get her to see that she wants the spot as badly as her sister and she should go for it.

This is a really great one-shot, I'm so glad that I got to read it! Thank for the swap!


Author's Response: Thanks for the nice review. Thanks so much for the comments on the set-up and characterization. Yeah, I agree it's mostly a character study rather than a complete short story. It came into my head fully formed one night after finishing 'Waxing' and 'Waning' and kind of took on a life of its own.

I hadn't expected Lily to have a girlfriend, Justine just came to life some on the page. She's the one who tries to keep it all together, so I'm glad you could get that from her even though you haven't read the other two stories. Lily is selfless, truly.

It took the talk from her friend to realize that the Hufflepuff way of fair play didn't mean to let someone else win. They'll win if they're good enough, if not then you deserved it. That was the hard lesson that Lily had to learn.

Thanks again for the review swap, and I really enjoyed your Scoral, too!

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