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Reading Reviews for With Love & Hope
  
5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Lostmyheart Chapter 1

30th April 2016:
Hi!

I saw on the new edition of the Parseltongue Prophet that you've recently posted this story, so I wanted to drop by and say hello.

I actually felt lucky, because I looove Dramione, so it was interesting to see where you'd go with this. Especially since it was so short. I really liked the way you wrote it, it felt like the most important parts of their relationships were highlighted, those that showed us where they were in that particular time of their relationship.

It was short, maybe too short for my taste, because I really liked it! I hope you'll write another one like this, just longer, because you do it so well. I really liked the ending, where he finally asks her to marry her and that he does it with a trembling voice. It really shows that he cares for her, and he was definitely nervous for her answer. So sweet.

- Avi

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Review #2, by Felpata Lupin Chapter 1

3rd April 2016:
Wow! This was really beautiful!
I loved the style and the word choosing. Almost poetic. Really, this was so brilliant!

I loved all the emotions in here and how you retraced their relationship as it changed with time, from that first time and the head/heart fight, to the hesitancy when they meet again years later, to growing close and sharing the hardest moments of life, to marriage... All this in such a little space and with such a beautiful writing.

I particularly loved the bit when he holds her while she has nightmares about the war, how you hinted at how much it affected the both of them, priving them of the innocence of their too young age... Really, that was so sad, but also so lovely!

I do have a CC. I feel like the break from one paragraph to the other lacked a bit of smoothness. I think a few more words could make this sound more cohesive and flash it out better. It seemed a bit a list of events in some passages...

But otherwise, this was seriously brilliant! You are truly talented, and I can't wait to see more of your writing! Great job, and welcome in our beautiful HPFF family!!!

Much love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Thank you so much, love!

I really wanted to show, in as few words as possible, the changes in their relationship throughout time and how much the war affected them, so I'm glad you like those parts.

Thanks for the CC; I've read the piece back and I totally get what you mean, I'll definitely keep it in mind for the future.

Thanks again, I'm working on something just now, so hopefully you'll see more of my writing soon!

Love
Lexa :)


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Review #3, by adluvshp Chapter 1

30th March 2016:
Hey there =) Welcome to HPFF and a very warm welcome to Slytherin! I saw your post in the new story thread in the Pit (Slytherin Common Room) and decided to check out your one-shot. Definitely not a bad decision as I loved reading this so much!

You convey so much in such few words, it's amazing. Your writing style is brilliant with such lovely descriptions. This is wonderful for your first fic, especially since you've not written in years. The way you show the development of Draco and Hermione's relationship with short yet touching descriptions is great. The imagery painted is beautiful.

For CC, I'd only say to watch out for typos - I noticed a misplaced comma here and there. If you smooth over the grammar structure, this one-shot wouldn't be short of perfect. Besides that, it's very very good even right now and as I said earlier, I really liked it. You have a knack for writing so do write more in the future!

Love and Hugs
Angie (Lost Muse from the forums)

Author's Response: Hi Angie! Thank you so much for your lovely review, it was a great surprise to come home from work to!

I'm still working on my style as it's been so many years since I've written, I'm basically just starting over. So, I'm glad you like it.

I'm really glad the imagery and descriptions were read in the same way I wanted them to be. I knew that with a short fic with no dialogue, it was really important to get that right, so it's nice to know it worked!

I didn't really comb this fic for any typo's or anything, so I guess that's expected haha!

I'll definitely be writing more in the future! I've got a few things I'm working on, so hopefully they'll be something new soon.

Again, thank you so much love


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Review #4, by dreamgazer220 Chapter 1

29th March 2016:
Hi there, here for our review swap! Welcome to the forums and to HPFF!

For your first fic, you've done a really great job here. Your style is very unique, but you did a fantastic job of covering a lot of time in a few hundred words.

You have some fantastic language here, and the overall piece was very beautiful. I liked how you started most of the sentences with "When" to help with the transition of time.

I would love to see you explore this, but otherwise it's great on its own too.

Great job, and welcome again to the family :)

~Jill

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Jill!

I'm glad you liked it. The style of this pieces was something I was quite apprehensive about; I really wanted to convey a progressive relationship in as little words as possible, snapshots of a relationship, really. I'm happy you think I've managed that!

I'm not sure if I'll write more Dramione, perhaps one day?

Thanks again, and I'm really glad to be a part of this wonderful family :)

- Lexa :)


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Review #5, by victoria_anne Chapter 1

28th March 2016:
HELLO AND A BIG WARM WELCOME TO YOU! *hugs*

Cookies all round!

So your first fic! This is so exciting - how could I not come and check it out?!

Short and sweet. I love it! I rarely read Dramione but I really like this one. Your writing style is gorgeous and unique but still captures emotions and feelings and descriptions. Very well done.

I see you're on the forums too, another big welcome there! You're going to absolutely love it here, we're a jolly bunch if I do say so myself. If you see me around the forums, don't hesitate to say hi!

Can't wait to read more from you either! Welcome again to the family :)

♥ B

Author's Response: Hiya love!

Thank you so much - everyone is so welcoming here, I love it!

I'm glad you liked it. I was nervous about the length, but when I came to writing it, it felt like a good length for the style.

Again, thank you so much! :)


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