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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Ron 4 Hermione Baby Weasley

14th April 2017:
Hey there, here for CTF!

I canít believe I havenít read this before, I (Itís probably too morbid to say I love these kinds of stories) but I enjoy reading them and seeing how the writer portrays them and the emotions in them.

I think youíve done an amazing job here, I especially loved how the first part seemed to contrast with the second part. The first part is so chill, and just about Ron waiting around and then even when Hermione is in labour itís still fairly calm and then after the labour itís all soft and quiet. Then you hit the second part and itís a lot more emotional and fast paced. Healers running all over the place, screaming, crying, itís very intense and I think it really captures the emotion of the subject and what has happened.

I think my favourite part of the whole thing is Ronís reaction to it all. Itís saw raw and I just feel for him so badly. Especially at the end with all the Ďhe would neverÖí as it really emphasise all that he could have had and all he has lost.

This is such a moving one shot, youíve written it beautifully!

- Shaza :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for the kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed this story. I wrote this a few years ago when I was just starting to experiment with writing outside of the humor genre. It was extremely difficult to write something like this and it's still pretty short. A lot of sweat went into it. Also, i think I was able to connect a bit better to my writing because my sister was pregnant at the time and the pregnancy at first wasn't going well. So I poured all the emotion I felt into this because there was a possibility that hey, we wouldn't have this little baby that we do now.

Thanks so much for the review!


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Review #2, by MuggleMaybe Baby Weasley

14th April 2017:
I'm here for Hufflepuff CTF

Oh, well. Okay then. Just go ahead and tear my heart out with your first three sentences. Poor Fred. Poor Ron for losing Fred. *hugs everyone*

There are so many different kinds of fear. I really think that word is inadequate to apply to the human condition =P

"Ron had spent most of his life waiting" --> what a great sentence

It's interesting that even in the wizarding world, having a baby is so painful. I guess some things just can't be helped by magic. I feels really bad for Hermione right now though.

DUDE. You are not pulling any punches. I like that you give as a glimpse in the moment, and then afterwards have Ron look back on the labor and give a clear explanation. I think that's how these sorts of moments *feel*

for god's sake. this is just. ugh. you are KILLING ME. Ron clearly loved his daughter SO MUCH immediately and why did this have to happen?? *SOBS*

okay, i've finished it. That was probably the saddest story I've ever read. Which brings me to why I read it - I love this Taylor Swift song! Such a sweet, pretty song. But not one I've previously thought of as sad. It's definitely going to have a different tone now =P

Your language and narrative style in this works so well. I like that you kept the dialogue to a minimum. I have a real sense of how Ron feels and how these memories ply out in his mind. And in memory, there isn't as much dialogue, expect for when the words are particularly striking. Which certainly applies to a loved one crying out in pain, so it was a nice compliment that you gave as a little dialogue there.

This is beautiful and heartbreaking in the extreme. Wonderfully done.

Author's Response: THAT SONG IS SO SAD! ARE YOU KIDDING ME? I can't listen to it. It never fails to make a little tear fall from my eye. I think the song is actually about a little boy, a fan of hers I think, who had cancer. Don't quote me on that though.

Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. This story does mean a lot to me. It was hard to write and though it is short it really packed an emotional punch.

Sometimes things just happens. That's what I wanted to get across here. You can love someone before they're even born. Pregnancy is such a beautiful thing but sometimes the worse can happen when you least expect it. Ron had already fallen in love with his daughter before she was conceived. He's that kind of dad. You know what I mean? So it comes off just 10x worse that this happened to him and Hermione. It's just so sad but it does happen. I don't think magic would have done anything differently to prevent a stillbirth or a miscarriage or anything. It's just this innate human thing that is beyond the scope of magic and beyond the scope of just about anything. In my thoughts anyway.

Thank you again for the wonderful review!


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Review #3, by Marshal Baby Weasley

8th April 2017:
You had to go off and make me cry! Like seriously tears! That is very unfair of you! Okay I know that was the emotion I am sure that you were going for an a still birth wow not something I would have thought of or see with Ron and Hermione but at the same time it fits for them on some levels as their canon first is the same age and Ginny and Harry's second child.

Still while not experiencing something as heart breaking as this first hand, My aunt and Uncle had this happen to them so I have a bit of understanding of the pain experienced here and it just it so pulls at the heart strings. You did an amazing job of incorporating the song as well and you wrote the emotions well too.

I know it is heart breaking and devastating to loose a child. I can't even imagine where life will go next for these two in the future. You are making at loss for words here the emotion is so gripping and I can't get the image of Ron's finger under his angel's hand and then the image of them at the funeral too I can't get the images out of my head and am still tearing up! Seriously an amazing job even if I'm complaining about being heart broken by your words here.

Author's Response: I'm so sorry for making you tear up and I am extremely sorry for your Aunt and Uncle. I wrote this at a time when my sister was pregnant and things were not going well. We weren't sure there was going to be a baby. So when I was given this prompt for a challenge based on Taylor Swift's song I was in a dark head space and needed some clarity. So this happened. I'm glad you enjoyed the story though. Thanks so much for the review.

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Review #4, by ABlack Baby Weasley

8th April 2017:
Oh how heart-wrenchingly poignant! To go from the excitement and anxiety of birth to such stark bleakness. I love how you alternated the hospital scene with getting ready for the funeral.

You deftly handle the incredible emotional rollercoaster that parents go through during labor. The worry, the pain and even Hermione shouting curses. Having been through the process twice, I can say you nailed it. It also says something that even with all the magic at their disposal, birth is still painful for Hermione. That the mediwitches/wizards couldnít save the baby just makes this worse.

And that moment when the child grasps your finger? Itís one that never fades from your memory. It makes so much sense that Ron was fixed on that moment, that he focused on the fact she had red hair, that for an instant he didnít want to think about Hermione screaming Ďnoí, or the staff trying to take the child away.

You never mention why the child passed away Ė the medical reason. I think I prefer it this way. Sometimes things go wrong and itís nobodyís fault.

As for the funeral, so bleak! The line, ĎRon had laughed bitterly when someone asked him earlier if he needed anything.í This got me. It sums up all the empty bitterness that has engulfed Ron.

Overall, you did a fantastic job.

Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review. I am glad you enjoyed the story. I never considered it was anything more than a stillbirth. At least that's what I had been going for in the story but I also never wanted to pick a reason why. Sometimes, as you said, things just happen. One minute everything is fine and then the next your entire world has been torn apart. I really just wanted to focus on Ron, his pain and his story. Hermione's too but I think Ron's is so prominent because good fathers (and he would have been a good one) feel this instant connection to their children. She would have essentially been Daddy's little girl. It's just sad. This is why I don't write sad stories! Too painful to read.

Thank you again for the review!


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Review #5, by lovegood27 Baby Weasley

7th April 2017:
Hi Deeds! I'm here for our review swap! :)

OMG, I can't deal with this, this was too sad. Agh, I think I'm going to cry *runs away to the bathroom and sobs* This was absolutely heart wrenching but still so beautiful. My heart broke for Ron when he thought of all the possibilities that could have happened if his daughter had died, especially your last line "He would never get to watch his daughter grow up" It was very effective and a brilliant end to the story.

I'm guessing his daughter was Rose? It's classified as an AU, so that's what I would assume. I wished it was some unknown child who died before Rose was born for Ron and Hermione's sake. Then they would still have a daughter...AND WHAT ABOUT HUGO? Oh God, I just want things to turn out alright for them; I was screaming inside when you wrote about Hermione crying hysterically :(

Seriously, this was a wonderful piece. I enjoyed it (in a sad way), and I think you've done a really great job here conveying Ron's feelings. This is definitely going on my favourites ;)

Author's Response: A part of me is glad that you enjoyed the story but then I also feel bad because this is a hard story to read. It was a hard story to write!

I actually don't consider the baby they lost to be Rose, which is why it's AU. I never considered who it could be. Probably a child before Rose because she could have been their rainbow baby in this and then Hugo would have been the 'oops' baby. Yeah, I like to think things would have worked out for them and they would have gotten another chance at having a child but I just focused on one aspect, one possible 'what if.'

Thank you so much for the review!


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Review #6, by Dobby Baby Weasley

23rd March 2016:
Very beautiful... it's a tear jerker.

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed the story.

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