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Review #1, by MrsJaydeMalfoy The Order of The Phoenix

20th July 2016:
Nope, still not done! :P

I TOLD you I'm on a 'not frequently written-about characters' thing. :P

And this says it's going to be a short story, but there's only one chapter so far and um.. I'm going to need another chapter now please. XD Sorry, I'm not trying to be pushy or anything but I needz moar! (Even though I kind of feel like this fic could potentially/probably break my heart).

I love the way Alice is scolding Frank here, and how they're both determined to help with the Order, despite putting themselves in harm's way. Reading this honestly made me feel very nostalgic for Neville's parents, even though we really didn't get to see them in the series, this makes it feel like I know them very well, and that's saying something since it's only the first chapter!

I think my favorite part of the whole chapter though was the description of Augusta - she's ferocious! I kind of want to read a fic about her now, also! *Cough WRITE ONE cough* :P

This is another fantastic piece, and it's just been added to my 'Currently Reading' list - please update soon!

Well done, and thank you again for donating to HPFF!

Author's Response: Hi Jayde!

Thank you so much for dropping by to read this and for continuing on with the hotseat reviews. It means a lot to me. :)

This does follow along with cannon, so I can't say it will exactly have a happy arc in terms of Neville's parents, but Neville's story won't be entirely dark. So maybe bittersweet is the right word?

Glad you liked the characterizations. I thought Alice might be a stronger woman, sort of like Augusta...and that Frank might be more mellow.

*cough* I have a fic about Augusta called Determination where she's the first female auror ever. *cough*

I'm so glad you liked it and I hope to update fairly soon. (I'm the worst with WIPs, please don't hate me)


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Review #2, by PaulaTheProkaryote The Order of The Phoenix

20th June 2016:
If its a complete secret, naturally the whole school know! And it must be true! All of it! I bet Dumbledore loves the rumors that swirl through Hogwarts.

I think it makes sense that he would recruit students like Alice and Frank, future aurors, while they are young and impressionable and he has full access to them. I think youre more likely to do something if you see someone every day anyway.

I like cautious Alice. I like her being suspicious of everyone. I bet Mad Eye Moody will absolutely love her. She's brilliant and fierce. You write really amazing female characters.

This seems straight out of the books: Ah, young love, Dumbledore said, dabbing at his eyes with a handkerchief, A magic above all that we teach here. Like you just wrote Dumbledore exactly the way Id expect for JKR.

I love the bit about Augusta and turning the death eater into a ferret locking him in the trash bin. She's another amazing female character. Nan is a total bad mamajama.

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Review #3, by MargaretLane The Order of The Phoenix

1st May 2016:
My thought when including this quote was James and Lily, but of course it works equally well for Alice and Frank. I'm guessing this story is going to be heartbreaking.

I really like the way you show the differences in personality between Frank and Alice here. We don't know much about them and they are always sort of referenced as a pair so it's good to see them portrayed as individuals.

It's interesting that rumours are going around Hogwarts about Dumbledore leading the Order of the Phoenix and makes sense that they WOULD.

ACTUALLY, Dumbledore recruiting students into the Order is a pretty apt story to go with a quote from Padraig Pearse since Pearse was a headmaster and his school was something of a recruiting ground as well. Some of the older boys helped in the Rising.

Oh, I have to laugh at your comment about Augusta locking a Death Eater in a trash bin, since there is an Irish rebel song called "Lid of Me Granny's Bin" and it has always struck me that it fits well with Augusta's escape from the Aurors in Deathly Hallows.

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