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Reading Reviews for One Last Victory
  
5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Marshal Doubt

8th April 2017:
Huh, this was interesting. I have seen a lot of stories with Neville as a professor and that works so prefectly for him and I think is canon but Hannah as a professor as well that is different and new. I've never seen that before. I like it.

Also you did a very nice job with Minerva. I am guessing she is one of your favorite characters based on your SN? Still it is sweet and endearing how she wants so much to protect her students. It so incredibly speaks of Minerva's love for her students the one who became her children as I believe on Pottermore it was stated that she never had children of her own.

Also the way you dropped her end and death was a bit of a shock but at the same time wow, so pretty so to speak that Elf was there for her at the end and was like time to go. Though it is a little sad that her last words to the world are her anger and frustration to those around her that she wasn't ready for the end and didn't appreciate how they had been trying to help her.

Still over all I like how in the end she finally accepted her fate. Very poignant.

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Review #2, by adluvshp Doubt

8th April 2017:
Aww poor McGonagall is dead, I can't believe it. This was oh so sad but at the same time very touching as well because it showed Minerva's spirit. It made sense that she was ageing and dying and yet she did not want to leave hogwarts because she loved her students and the castle so much. I really enjoyed reading her conversation with the portrait of Dumbledore - he is her only friend and it made sense that she would talk to him about her problems even though he is only a shadow of his living self. Her frustration was very evident and I also felt bad for her. I did not like how neville and hannah and all were talking about her though. I am sure they meant well but it gave off a negative vibe and I would think they respected, valued and loved Minerva more. The ending would have been nicer if there were slightly more description as I did not quite understand who had come to take her. I am guessing it was her husband but it was not very clear (was his name Elf)? I would have also perhaps liked to see more of the letter she wrote, the last thing or her last words to the living world. Besides that though, this was an interesting one-shot and an ode to Minerva and her spirit and I really liked it. Great work!

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Review #3, by velajune Doubt

14th April 2016:
Hi,

So, here again to read through two or three before getting to the actually story I'm supposed to be looking into.

Minerva's one of my favorite characters to read about. It's always interesting what kind of direction the writer will take. I liked this story. It felt very human to me.

Every bit of this story was heartbreaking, from the small details of having a cane, not recognizing the gates, or students simply looking at her.

I had to set aside the thought that I grew up loving this woman's strength and love towards her students because this was a different era. Those students have long gone. It truly broke my heart when she said she was the last left. Even Pomona and Flitwick are no longer there.

I think you did such a great job in building up for the last scene.

At first, I thought, the conversation between Nev and Hannah were unbelievable. I'd like to think it's all in Minerva's head as she was feeling alone. Everything seemed unfamiliar and because of that, it caused her to feel like people around her were unfamiliar too. Lol But I have a feeling that's not what it is.

It's funny though, I had just gotten done writing a scene with a Headmistress McGonagall, also (almost) 20 years after the war. Coincidence!

Anyway, great one-shot. Totally teared up.
June

Author's Response: Thank you June. I was feeling really really bad about having to write McGonagall this way. I always saw her as Hogwart's rock during the books. She genuinely cared about the school and all of their students, and it broke my heart to have to write her as a broken, lonely old Headmistress.

I think that it's a combination of what you said and what I thought. McGonagall knows that she's the last one and she feels utterly alone so she's bound to be paranoid that people want her gone. At the same time, people actually do want her to leave, but for her. Feeling out of touch, especially for someone as dedicated as McGonagall, is humiliating and incredibly sad to watch for her former students and colleagues.
She knows that. She just wants to be relevant when people feel that she has to move on, and she doesn't want to move on because she doesn't want to let down her colleagues and students.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was hard to write one of my favorite characters like this.

Happy writing,
Professor McGonagall


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Review #4, by MrsJaydeMalfoy Doubt

14th March 2016:
Hi there dear! I'm here with your prize for winning a round of Pass the Parcel! First off, let me just say 'Congratulations' - and thank you SO much for helping us celebrate HPFF's birthday! And now, on to your review! :P I'm reviewing as I read, so if this seems to change topics kind of suddenly, that's why.

I was immediately intrigued by the story summary and chapter summary, and I was SO curious to find out who I'd be reading about - and then when I saw it was Minerva I was pleasantly surprised! I haven't started reading yet but I'm definitely excited to see where this is going!

Okay, I'm not going to lie. I thought this was going to be about the battle of Hogwarts, and I was just SO ready to see Minerva's iron will against all the death eaters. And then I knew it was a little different when she mentioned seeing the gates differently - and then I read 'her cane' and I was just like AWW Minerva! :(

Waiting for her to die?! That's awful!! And I mean I love Neville and Hannah, but hearing their conversation from Minerva's point of view just makes me feel so angry with them! But, deep down I know that they're only saying what they think is best for her. So let me keep reading before I make any judgements. :P

okay, now I'm at the conversation with Albus and I just don't think I'm emotionally prepared for this. Albus, who's already gone, talking to Minerva about dying, when she seems to almost be gone, it's breaking my heart :(

Awww! She just wants to keep everyone safe! That is SO like Minerva and you've characterized her really well here!

And leave it to Albus to tell Minerva like it is, even though she doesn't want to hear it. :P He's definitely right though, and it broke my heart to hear how she thought she had failed during the battle - it wasn't her fault, but leave it to her to take on so much guilt and responsibility.

*Gasps* Her husband?! :O And now he's there? Aw!! A part of me feels like "Noo don't let her go" and another part of me feels like "She needs to rest, to be at peace" . :( But the fact that it took him saying "They're safe" for her to agree really says a lot.

This is a very well-written and emotional piece, lovely, it really pulled at my heartstrings! It flowed very well and I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, either. Well done! I definitely enjoyed it! And congratulations again on winning pass the parcel!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!

McGonagall is always a favorite to write. She's always so strict yet cares deeply about what she does. She cares deeply about her students and I think that is an admirable trait.

So when I saw the challenge, I immediately looked up old Renaissance masters. I came upon a few of Queen Elizabeth I. That's when the plunny hit. I immediately could picture Minerva in a similar situation: Both grew old in positions of power and tried to keep on going even if the people that they trusted worked against them to get someone else in their seats when they die.

So I wrote that. It made Minerva seem overtly cynical and cranky. I suppose that's what I was going for, but I wanted her to feel something. Something more of what Minerva would feel and not when Elizabeth would feel as much: regret.

And that's how it came into being. I was curious on what the mystery prize was for the pass the parcel. Now that I've found out, thank you for hosting a delightful game and may HPFF see the next 15 years!

Happy Writing!
Professor McGonagall


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Review #5, by Lady Asphodel Doubt

9th March 2016:
What an excellent, beautiful, bittersweet story this is!

Professor McGonagall has always been one of my favorite characters, and to see how you wrote the end for her, really broke my heart here.


It's incredibly to see treat her differently due to her aging and dying. I do understand (and if I am right), they're not trying to do it on purpose, but it's just how things happen when it comes to elderly, and you just expect their time will come soon. It's just a matter of when.


Anyways, I love the strength and the fight you expressed through Minvera, even though she's tired, and she still feels guilt over the loss of her students years ago.


The ending was definitely beautifully sad, almost teared up. Incredible job for writing this! Thanks for sharing! Just had to review this after reading it. ^_^


-LA

Author's Response: Oh thank you, thank you, thank you!

I am fascinated by the Elizabethan period and a plunny just came to me when I saw the challenge. I was watching a stuffy drama about Elizabeth the First while I was watching it, so that's where that came from.

I'm glad you liked it :D


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