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Review #1, by LadyL8 FEAR...

6th March 2016:
Hello There. I'm Lotte, and I'm also leaving a review for the HPFF Review-A-Thon. I am however glad I got to read this. I always try to find new authors and read some of their work. You never know if you'll find a diamond somewhere in the mass group of stories you've never read, so it's a good goal to have :)

This is an interesting story. Before I comment on it, I hope you don't mind me asking, but is this one of your first stories? I'm just asking because I don't remembering seeing you name around before, but I might've overlooked you of course. And I'm just curious, too curious for my own good really. So yeah, if you don't want to, you don't have to answer that. Feel free to ignore it completely really.

Anyway, the reason why I think this is an interesting story is because it's really just about one event. Normally the fics here, even the really short ones, focus on several events or one big event. Yours is just about a class where your character came up with something clever, and it makes it stick out a little, but in a good way of course. I love just seeing like one small almost everyday-like event in character's life, because even that small thing really tell us a lot about the character. Here for example I can tell that Schuyler is a clever girl, creative even. She loves her country (I'm taking a stab in the dark and saying you're American too. This is an amazing way to show your love for your own country), and she kind of reminds me of Hermione. Just totally planning everything out beforehand, reading herself up on a class before she's had it. So yeah, you tell us a lot about your character in just this small scene.

I also love the way your worked in the quote. I'm not American. I've never been to America, and I know very little about America, so the quote was actually new to me, but it makes sense. Fear really is the scariest thing out there, and I think that quote not only showed her love for America, but also inspired her classmates. It must've been comforting to see that before you're about to take on a boggart. So yeah, she is a clever one, that Schuyler.

I always try to give authors a little bit feedback on what they improve, and I think description is that thing for you. While I love this "telling the story-style" you're working (as if the narrator is actually telling us the story of what happened), I do wish we had a little bit more description so I could imagine the scene in my head. The description you did have was so good, so it's just about adding a little bit more. It's often hard to see that yourself, so I thought I could mention it.

But that's it really. The rest of this story is so good. I love the small, subtle characterisation. Like you're giving us small hints as to what kind of person Schuyler is, and it's just such a clever way to do it. So I'm impressed, and especially if it is actually one of your first stories. Also, I love the quote, and I think it was so interesting that Schuyler's fear is actually like "fear itself", so the change is kind of like saying "I'm scared of you yes, but you're also the only thing I should be scared of". Did that make sense? I feel like that might've been confusing. Sorry if it was. I tend to ramble way too much, and then I make no sense whatsoever. Yeah, it's been known to happen :P

Anyway, I hope you have an amazing day. Thanks for sharing the story. I hope to see more of your work again sometime in the future.

Lots of Love


Author's Response: Thank you! Also this is my second story, which is probably why you haven't seen much of me.

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Review #2, by ScorpiusRose17 FEAR...

6th March 2016:

I am here to review this lovely One-shot for you! :)

I was really intrigued by the way that this started. I love the way that you introduce Schuyler and I love her name! It's not common in stories that I read and it was nice to see an American at a British school! :)

I really enjoyed how you picked a commonly known moment in Wizard Education to show us a little more about Schuyler. Our fears are all unique and different. No one is exactly the same and I was exceedingly happy that she didn't fall into a "common fear".

I thought you did a great job of really combining Roosevelt's Quote to this. And I liked how she explained a little bit about him to the other third years. It's clever to match his famous quote to dealing with a boggart or having it change into a quote rather than a creature or object.

I also really like her eagerness to try and that she has a difficult time being American among the her British classmates. It's hard to fit in and I think that is something that everyone would be able to relate to.

Keep up the good work! :)


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Author's Response: I am so glad you like it! I was a little worried about how people would review it, but it's all good now!

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Review #3, by TreacleTart FEAR...

6th March 2016:
For The HPFF Review-A-Thon

Hey there!

I was looking through the recently added stories list and this was at the very top, so I thought I'd drop by and take a look.

Schuyler seems like a very clever witch. In a way she sort of reminds me of Hermoine because she went to the library and learned everything about a subject so she would be ready for class the next day. One can never go wrong with proper preparation.

I like the unique way that you worked in Roosevelts quote. I never really thought of a quote or an old President being something that someone would hold onto so tightly, but it does fit with the story. It's interesting that it worked since it isn't exactly a happy memory, but more just a happy reminder of home.

I always try to leave just a little bit of constructive criticism in my reviews, so here it goes. I do wish there was a bit more detail or description, particularly when she's fighting the boggart. I really like to be able to visualize a scene clearly and adding a bit more description would help.

All in all, this was a really cool idea! Good job!


Author's Response: Good to know.
Thanks a ton,

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Review #4, by Aphoride FEAR...

6th March 2016:
Hey there - dropping by for the HPFF review-a-thon! :)

So I was looking through the newly updated stories and this came up so I thought I'd stop by! :) I love the whole idea of having a story set around a class against boggarts - it's a very telling thing about a person, what their deepest fear is, and how they choose to/can deal with it, too. Gives so much potential for angst or issues to come out of it ;)

I love how Schuyler's fear is kinda like fear itself (I think that was what it meant?), and how it contrasts with her incredible confidence at dealing with the boggart - it makes a lot of sense, rather than simply being 'oh my character isn't afraid of anything'. She actually isn't - but that only kinda makes it a bigger flaw, if that makes sense. It's almost as though she's never been afraid, which is a kinda cool character trait to give someone :)

Ofc, that quote is gold - it's one of those ones I think most people know, whether they're American or not. But it's so good, and so true, I think :)

I liked how Schuyler was so unimpressed with how the Ravenclaws from wizarding families had no idea about muggle history - but I guess they'd know about stuff she didn't, wizarding history and so on? But it still made me laugh - it's so weird to think of these things happening and people not knowing about it :P

Anyway, this was a lovely little one-shot! :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: Thanks. The wizard brought up kids not knowing is one of my favorite bits too!

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