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Reading Reviews for Blind Sided
  
2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Marshal What The Hell.

6th March 2016:
For the HPFF Review-A-Thon

Hi, I'm Marshal (obviously). I'm here leaving you a review as part of the review-a-thon as you can see. Some super generous people are donating to keep the site alive for reviews left this weekend. Also, as a member of the Slytherin house on the forums we are doing an in house competition leaving reviews to spread the love of the Slytherin house.

Anyway, this story has a nice start. You have set things up nicely. I love how Scorpius up and mentioned kissing Rose and how shocked she was about it all. You have some rather good interactions going on between the characters giving them a unique voice and perspective. I love how Rose isn't what everyone likes to make of her. She isn't the golden girls and studious like her mum but rather a bit of a trouble maker. That is a very refreshing change. I am also intrigued by the fact that you sorted Scorpius into Gryffindor. What house do you have Albus? Gryffindor? It would be so interesting and weird if he were in Slytherin after all while Scorpius was in Gryffindor. While that is cool to me, don't think I would dislike your story if you have Albus in a house other than Slytherin. That is just my mind running away from me.

Over all you did a nice job with this. Is this your first story on the archives? I ask as I haven't really seen your name around much before. Also as a minor critique I wanted to let you know that for for short span you ended up slipping from third person to first person. Easy enough fix though. It's this line:

The group in the compartment, which consisted of Albus, Lily, and James Potter, Hugo (my brother), Dominique and Louis, and Roxy and Fred. It was a rather tight fit, but a tradition that we all sat together on the way to School every year.

Still good work and keep writing!


- Marshal
Team Ouroboros
"The end is only the beginning"

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Review #2, by Avanell 2 What The Hell.

6th March 2016:
Surprised that Hermione is against Scorpius, too. She should always be more logical and care for how people change. But that's just me, and it is YOUR story :) Other than that, loved the opening! Yes, a kiss will do...hopefully next? Or soon? :D

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