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Reading Reviews for Green With Envy
  
7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Marshal To Plug A Leak

3rd April 2017:
So interesting having the head of the Aurors have it out for Harry and Ron. I get it in some respects but in others I'm like how bone headed can you be? Sure you don't want them to become hotshots and taking stupid risks and you want them well trained but to be prejudiced against them simply because they accomplished much already is silly. Rhodes is silly, a believable character but even if real I'd call his actions silly. (Not the ha ha kind just more of the stupid kind of silly).

Also you make for an interesting use of Rita in this story - funny how she found her way in with the Death Eaters becoming one herself (if I read that right). I wouldn't have expected it of her to be honest. She seems like the one looking for a good scoop not to cause chaos, mischief and breaking the law (beyond being unregistered as an animagius) Still it makes a lot of sense her ability in the situation you have. A death eater with her skills is practically invaluable.

Also I must agree with Harry that the uniform picked out for them to wear is over the top and not convenient! Not sure I'd go with Harry's pick for Aurors but a compromise between the two would do well. Anyway great story!

Author's Response: Hey, Marshal!
Nice to see you! Thanks for the review!

I've seen Robards' attitude like this before, so I thought I would use that characterization for this one-shot. I agree...stupid kind of silly, but a nice motivator for Harry and Ron.

Also, I thought the characterization of Rita as a Death-Eater was a natural turn of events, especially with her and Harry's previous relationship and, as you observed, her particular talents.

Harry and Ron's choice of clothing for this particular mission seemed appropriate. In my other 2 novels I have an even better idea for their uniforms, but I don't think I had thought of it when I wrote this story.

Again, thanks for the review, comments and compliments!

P.S. Check out my other two novels, if you haven't already! :)


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Review #2, by adluvshp To Plug A Leak

3rd April 2017:
Hey there, here on behalf of Slytherin.

Wow, what a cool one-shot! The use of the Ninja techniques is so awesome - I can imagine the amount of research that would have gone here. You were amazing with the little details you have put in, like when describing the action here: "He set the tip of his tongue to the roof of his mouth, he breathed deeply and slowly, stoking his Chi (3) like a blacksmith’s kiln". They really helped me picture the entire scene and brought colour to the narrative of the events.

The plot point itself is interesting. I like how you have shown Gawain to be this irritating ruthless boss-auror, and how he stays true to his character throughout, even at the end when Kingsley tells him off. Ron, Harry, and Neville are also very well-characterised. Their personalities line up with canon but at the same time you feel they have grown up. The way you broke up the segments, like Neville separate then Harry then Ron... was a great touch. It allowed each to have their limelight and give a perspective on what's happening. The descriptions also managed to build an urgency to the entire thing and gave it the right feel.

Overall, I loved all the action, and the way these guys made the death eaters bite the dust. The fighting was pretty cool and the use of martial arts was superb. Quick thinking on Neville's part too to go and get Kingsley and that also lined up with the characterisation. Oh and I loved how Rita Skeeter was also one of the opponents, made sense and enjoyed that tidbit a lot.

Great job!
9/10
cheers
Angie

Author's Response: Hello Angie and thanks for reviewing!!!

Having a martial arts background helped with the research into Ninjutsu. If you liked this one-shot, you should (if you haven't already) check out my 2 novels. They have more martial arts in them...and in another unique way!! (That's called a "teaser"!! :D )

I'm glad you liked the plot - it was written for an Auror Challenge and is kind of an extension of my two novels.

Also, the "split scenes" of Harry, Ron and Neville was my first attempt at that, so I'm thrilled you found them effective and enjoyable!

I'm curious how you liked the numbered notes. Did they add to or distract from the story?

I must admit that I'm disappointed I only got a 9 out of 10, so I'll try harder on my next attempt...it gives me a goal to shoot for!! ;)

Again, thanks for the great review! I love the nice, long ones like you posted!!


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Review #3, by Debvfr To Plug A Leak

21st June 2016:
Loved it up to your usual amazing standard.
Waiting for my next have no fear instalment

Author's Response: Hey, Debvfr,
Thanks for the great review!

Sorry for the delay...I have been super busy, but I will make every effort to get the next chapter posted in an expedient manner!

Stay tuned!!


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Review #4, by Dinthemidwest To Plug A Leak

9th May 2016:
Very good story-lots of action!!

Author's Response: Thanks D!

It was written for an Auror Challenge, so I tried to pack as much action as I could into a one-shot. This is my first attempt at a one-shot, so I'm glad you liked it!


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Review #5, by SJB To Plug A Leak

2nd May 2016:
Nice and crisp. A very well thought plot and of course you are as usual wonderful when it comes to detailing
I really am impressed with the way you have incorporated martial arts into channeling of magical energy. It is really ingenious.
Keep writing

Author's Response: Thanks, SJB!

I appreciate your great reviews and am glad that you like my writing style!

I have had fun with the martial arts aspect and will continue with it in my sequel, which I will begin posting very soon!

I hope you like it as much as you have this first story.


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Review #6, by Zinn To Plug A Leak

8th March 2016:
Nicely done, and thanks for Ron some credit.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Zinn!

I've always thought that Ron didn't get as much credit as he should have. In my opinion, he is a real strategist and his loyalty to his family and Harry is beyond reproach.

Glad you enjoyed my first one-shot!


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Review #7, by Beckb4 To Plug A Leak

7th March 2016:
(SPOILER ALERT PLEASE READ THE STORY BEFORE MY REVIEW)
Well first of all after Harry took down his portion of the death eaters, I was sitting up in bed clapping like a happy three year old. The description of their uniforms had me laughing totally stupid...loved loved loved the fighting moves my heart was racing and when nev went and got Kingsley I was hopping up and down With excitement. I hope this is the first of many short stories your planning on righting. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks, Beckb4!

I'm thrilled you enjoyed my first one-shot! I have a feeling I may do more of these...it stretched my comfort zone but was fun at the same time!

Thanks for the review, too!!!


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