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Reading Reviews for Upside Down
  
2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by blackzero Falling, making friends and falling some more

5th March 2016:
Very good Update soon My favourite parts was the dialogue relating to Daisy

Author's Response: Hello blackzero!
I am glad you like my story and I hope you will stay with me :) I will definitely keep writing!
Wish you all the best!


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Review #2, by adluvshp Falling, making friends and falling some more

5th March 2016:
Hey there!

This is a very good start to your story! I like your characters and plot already, and you've an interesting summary. Your main character - Ellie - is a Hufflepuff which is pretty cool. It'd be nice to see things from a Puff's point of view. You've given a nice glimpse into her personality and life so far such as her relationship with her brother and her warm attitude towards strangers.

There's an air of suspense around the fact that Elle has left her best friends behind, and that her dorm mates etc are "in the past". I wonder what happened there for her to come to this situation. Good point of interest, and I hope you build on the backstory in the future chapters =)

I enjoyed your dialogue too. It was light and very realistic. The interaction between James and Elle/Nora was nicely written. Your narrative style has a certain cheek to it which brings a smile to my face. And overall, your hold on descriptions is good. For advice, I'd only suggest polishing your sentence structure and grammar a little bit to make the story flow even more smoothly. Besides that, you are a good writer and I'm excited to read more of this story. Do keep writing!

Cheers
Angie
(Lost Muse from the Forums)

For the HPFF Review-A-Thon

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much for writing my first review ever :D I am glad you like it so far!

I will definitely polish my grammar and sentence structure, thank you! It is extremely helpful with a bit of constructive criticism, as english is not my native language.

And yes, there will be some backstory to what happened between Eleonora and her friends in the later chapters :)


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