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Reading Reviews for A Marauders' Tale
  
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by InLoveWithTheNotion Hogwarts

30th April 2017:
Wow. Absolutely brilliant!!

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Review #2, by InLoveWithTheNotion September 1, 1971

30th April 2017:
Really good read this so far!!

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Review #3, by Lostmyheart September 1, 1971

5th March 2016:
Hi there! I'm Avi, and I'm Lostmyheart in the Forums as well.

This was such a lovely start to your story. I liked the different POVs, all the Marauders were included and getting to see how they were before starting their first day at Hogwarts :)
They all come from different households and it was odd to see Peter as a half-blood. I had to go check but I couldn't find anything about his relatives. And poor Remus, it must've been hard to start a new life at Hogwarts and having to hide such a huge part of himself (the lycanthropy).

I like how you portrayed their thoughts and feelings, it's their first time leaving home, of course they'd look at their homes and think of their families. Though Reg was only a year older than Sirius was, he'd leave for Hogwarts as well on that same day :) And I was a little surprised by the fact that James is related to the Blacks? Though distant, as you wrote. I wonder how... So I look forward to see what you'll come up with there :)

I'm excited to see where this goes and what you'll come up with!

- Avi

Team Ouroboros
"The End is only the beginning"

Author's Response: Thank you! I love the Marauders so much and I feel like we are missing a huge chunk of the story not knowing what happened while they were at school and not knowing HOW/WHY the things that we do know happened came about. They are definitely my favorite characters to write about. However, I do have to politely disagree about Regulus being older than Sirius, he's a year younger than Sirius and would start Hogwarts during the Marauders second year. I did double check before replying to you though in case I was remembering the information incorrectly and needed to change it. Again, thank you for your review and the current plan it to submit a new chapter every Tuesday.

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Review #4, by SiriusAura92 September 1, 1971

5th March 2016:
Hey there,

You've got a really nice intro here! Great detail, nice character intros AND JANIS JOPLIN! XD
You wouldn't have known you been away for so long from this.

A few minor things though: When introducing a new character, it's best to call introduce him by his actual name as opposed to a shortened down nickname (As with 'Reg'; who I adored in this btw). I can see why you did it, as it's from Sirius' POV, but it does give your reader a sprinkle more insight into a character.

The second is just a bit of miss-wording;
"He couldn't help but thinking about..." Should be "He couldn't help but think about..."

And "The car needs packed..."

But this is me being really picky as the majority of your writing is very clear and error free.

Well done and I can't wait to read where you take this! :)

SiriusAura92

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm currently writing from my tablet and we fight, a lot! I'm really surprised those are the only errors. I plan on going over everything when my laptop is back up and running properly and fixing the formatting (for some reason it won't let me indent using tab or the space key on here with the tablet) which drives me insane lol. Thank you for your kind words and I plan on submitting new chapters every Tuesday!

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Review #5, by Dinthemidwest September 1, 1971

1st March 2016:
You've got a great start-I hope you will continue this!

Author's Response: Thank you! I plan on updating every Wednesday!

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Review #6, by Amanda September 1, 1971

27th February 2016:
This story gives me all the feels, even just being an intro piece. My only suggestion (aside from a banner), is to break up the length of the parapgraphs. Other than that, very well-written. Your characterizations were fleshy and wonderful. 11 year old Sirius is just as I imagined him! And, although Peter turns out to be a traitor, people tend to forget that at one point he was one of the Marauders. I despise him but enjoyed your backstory and cannot wait to see what you do with this! Happy writing!!

Best wishes--

Xx,
Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you! Paragraph length is always something I struggle with, I either think they're too short or too long.

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