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Reading Reviews for Loving Lily
4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by dinthemidwest Loving Lily

15th May 2016:
This was a terrific one-shot! Maybe more?? The characters were great-fun dialog & action... Sirius & James; what a combo!

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Review #2, by SilverMoonFairy Loving Lily

3rd May 2016:
I'm sorry I do not have a longer review than... Wow... Lily is now living my fantasy. ;)

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Review #3, by Ignis the Imp Loving Lily

12th February 2016:
Iggy Imp here for a mischievous review!! Mwaaaheeeheheheehe...

Let me just say, the was definitely the most mischievous and risque story I've read, though I can't say it's outside the realm of possibility for these three. Especially since it was their last night at Hogwarts. I have to say that when Lily asked if James was ready to go and he said "For you, always" was such a nice touch... no pun intended. It inadvertently bridged the gap between him and Snape. Also, it made sense for Snape to have actually tried to kiss Lily.
I would recommend you to read this out loud (you know, by yourself lol) just because there are quite a few times where you miss or add a letter or a word that either needs to be there or isn't. I'd point them out, but that's how you become a better writer, by finding them the best you can yourself!
Congrats getting an honorable mention :)
This was Ignis the Imp! Have a mischievous day!

Author's Response: Whoot whoot! Hi there! Thank you for your review! I am so happy to hear you enjoyed the story and especially that interaction between Lily and James, as much as I love Sirius/Lily that's definetly my favorite part of the story. Also, I thought that it just wouldn't be complete without at least mentioning Snape once.
Also thank you for your advice. I know the story still needs (quite a bit) of polishing and I think the reading out loud can definetly help me there since I am usually writing in the early hours when I should be in bed haha so focus can be hard to come by at those times.

You have a wonderful mischievous day too and thanks again for your lovely review!

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Review #4, by ABlack Loving Lily

5th February 2016:
Loving Lily by DragonPoxPixie

Salazar's Knobby Wand … a ménage à trois in the Shrieking Shack with one of the parties being Sirius Black. What more could one ask for (except maybe for Severus)? But seriously, you can make a person dizzy with the heat radiating from the latter part of this tale. You build it up well, with Lily admitting to herself she has a thing for Sirius and her lack of drinking experience. Then you go for the pay-off big time as she goes from kissing James to Sirius to back to James. Whew! I think I need to adjust the AC in here. You included your items in such a way as not to seem out of place in the tale (location and ring), and even managed a third (firewhisky).

Overall, you did a great job dancing around what would be acceptable and what would cross the line. Great job!


Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed reading the story, seeing the challenge it was just too hard to resist not using just one but two of some of the sexiest canon-characters! Looking forward to see what challenge you come up with next and once more good luck with the judging, so many steamy stories have been submitted, you really brought out people's smutty-side here!

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