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Reading Reviews for Lucky Penny
  
3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by adluvshp The Woman out of Time

4th March 2016:
Hey there! I'm here as part of the Team Sassy Seven from the Slytherin house at the HPFF forums to paint your story green with a review.

This was a very, very interesting story! I loved how this was not in chronological order and yet made perfect sense. Your style of writing was impeccable. I think the way you portrayed Albus and Penny was very good. I really connected with Penny. I really enjoyed both your descriptions and dialogue. The way you explored their relationship through the years in different ages was very nicely done.

"For the very first time, I am just a girl, perhaps a lovely one, that wants to buy a book." - I really loved this line. It resonated with me. So simple and yet conveys so much.

The whole concept of Penny being a time-traveller was very unique - one that I've not come across on HPFF - and I loved the way you executed it into narrative. Seeing Albus through the years like that was awesome. And I really liked the section when Penny was age 4 and Albus 62. It was strange but in a good way.

All in all, great one-shot. I really liked reading it and I'm in awe of the coherency with which your ideas translate into narrative, because often the ideas are great but the story reads as confusing, but that didn't happen here. Lovely job.

~RENCALM~
Angie
(A friendly Slytherin)

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Review #2, by The Masked Marauder The Woman out of Time

4th March 2016:
It is I, the Masked Marauder.

Firstly, I loved The Time Traveler's Wife - what a great book! When I saw that you'd written something inspired by it, I HAD to give it a read.

Second of all, this is BRILLIANTLY done! Penny is a fascinating character, Albus is so charming I'm swooning - even Rose has nuance in her brief appearance. I am truly so impressed!

I know from your A/N that you're concerned abut clarity. I can see why you would be, given how challenging a set up this uses, but for the most part I could follow it without trouble. (Admittedly, it might help that I've read The Time Traveler's Wife.) There was only one place where I was confused, and that was this transition:


“You’re Albus?” I finally reply in shock.

It feels as though time is stretching. I blink, and find myself in an entirely different time and place, though the green eyes of the man in front me stay the same.

“Merlin’s beard,” my real Albus exclaims, dropping the cup of tea in his hand.

I didn't catch that she'd traveled - I though she was just referring to the realization of how far in the past she was. So maybe clarify that one a bit.

You took on quite a challenge with this story - I commend you for that! Moreover, you've done an absolutely /stellar/ job so far! I really, REALLY want to read more of this! I think if it was finished, I'd stay up all night reading. I'm sad I can't.

Please, by all means, write more soon (if you have the time ;) )

Mischief Managed.
~Masked Marauder

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Review #3, by PaulaTheProkaryote The Woman out of Time

4th March 2016:
Hi! I saw your post on the forum and got curious. First of all, I just want to say that I'm glad your headings have the age information because it makes it easily navigable despite not being in chronological order. I absolutely loved the story. It reminded me a bit of Amy Pond and the Doctor if you happen to follow Doctor Who. Absolutely fantastic story line. My favorite line of the entire story is “I like sour. It’s like the wittier version of sweet.” I like that Albus was always the thing she needed, one way or another. This intricately weaved story will definitely be joining my favorites list.

Author's Response: I'm glad you thought doctor who, but I was going more for river/11 than Amy. Not that she isn't awesome. I fashioned the headings after the time travelers wife by Audrey neffineiger. Great book! Thank you so much for this review, I really appreciate the feedback.

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