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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Lady Asphodel Feelings

21st January 2017:
Beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time - especially written in 2nd pov. I am a sucker for these ever since I written one myself.


This really is a resonating piece here. The war has changed Harry and not for the best. It is like Harry to spare Ginny for going down - without a doubt in this story - a rough path. I can feel that Harry feels lost and that he lost something inside.


Overall, sad, beautiful, touching. Amazing job with the writing!


- LA

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Review #2, by PaulaTheProkaryote Feelings

20th June 2016:
I successfully avoided all of the I donít love you challenge stories because I canít face heartbreak as well as fluff but Iím curious as to how Ginny and Harry fell out of love so here I am despite my better judgment!

This was as heart breaking as I had expected it to be, but more so for Harry in my mind than Ginny. Ginny will be okay eventually. She could find love again, she could move on and be happy and whole again. Harry, it seems, is to be the shattered shell for the rest of his life. That cannot be and will not do for me. I want healing! I want happiness! I do like that he decided to spare her all the agony that would have been left if he just up and disappeared in the middle of the night though. At least he was honest with her and considering her through all of this.

I mean death does seem like it would change someone. That was the biggest problem with the resurrection stone in the lore right? The bride didn't feel right anymore, didn't feel like she belonged.

This destruction of their relationship was done in a manner that I find much more believable than anything I thought I was going to have to face.

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Review #3, by NPE Feelings

1st February 2016:
Hi Kaitlin,

Drifting through and came across this. I had a half-hour window to read and write a review so I took it ;)

This was tragic. Not Harry!

Obviously one has to get over the fact that all of this from a plot perspective can be remotely consistent with canon. Harry would never do that.

After you do - it is an appropriately sombre read that accurately depicts his type of flakiness.

You touch on a really interesting idea of a romance for war, and then how after it doesn't feel the same and people are different.

The stuff with Voldemort, I think was sort of meant to portray the cost and the galling nature of the man. My CC there would be is I am not sure it is necessary for the drifting apart of love.

I really like your descriptive terms. With the exception "tear-streaked" and "cold, hard darkness" which were a little conventional, I think you did a very good job at keeping them authentic and identifying them with Harry.

Nick

Author's Response: Hey Nick!

Thanks for another lovely review!

I actually don't see this as breaking from cannon. I can imagine Harry falling out of love with Ginny. I mean, they start dating as teens. Romances started at that age rarely ever last.

Ah. Romance for war and it's after effects. I have quite a bit of first hand experience with that.

You know I love to write description.

Thank you for this review (and for the many others)!

~Kaitlin


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Review #4, by Unwritten Curse Feelings

28th January 2016:
TEAM GOLD

Oh my god.



Kaitlin, this is stunning.

I really, really mean it.

I love the use of second person here. You write it beautifully and you drop just enough hints that this is Harry, summoning images of the war and of Voldemort killing him.

What a clever, clever idea. That he didn't physically die, but something inside of him did die. That something is gone and won't ever come back.

I felt this piece so strongly. The idea that he wants to flee to the far corners of the earthÖ that really struck me.

Every single word is useful in this piece. You use your words economically so that 500 words pack the punch of a whole freaking novel. You do that through concrete images and through handling time so brilliantly--with flashbacks and flash forwards and ponderings.

I'm so impressed by this piece. This is definitely in my top three favorites of yours.

--Gina

Author's Response: Hey Gina!

Thank you so much!

I really enjoy playing with 2nd person and I've been trying my best to use it in different ways.

War tends to do that to people in real life, so I thought it might be realistic for Harry as well.

Sometimes I feel that way myself.

I've been trying to work on being a bit more concise with description at times, hence the short length.

Thank you so much! Your encouragement and kind words keep me motivated to write!

~Kaitlin


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Review #5, by mymischiefmanaged Feelings

21st January 2016:
Hi Kaitlin! Here (belatedly - sorry!) for our swap. I hope it's okay I chose this one. I saw that you're editing it but wanted to have a look because it had less reviews than some of your other stories.

Ah I kind of don't even want to give this review because I'm so gutted that you've done this to Harry and Ginny, but also WELL DONE for breaking them up in such a convincing way.

I really like the opening, with Harry initially trying to blame his discomfort on something physical, like food or alcohol. It fits in with the Harry we see at Hogwarts, who's just completely incapable of understanding his own feelings. Although I'm not sure about him thinking it's the longest day of his life - seems a little unlikely after gringotts and the battle of hogwarts?

The bit about Voldemort taking away a part of Harry is heartbreaking, especially because he so clearly understands what's happened to him and what he's lost. The first time I read this I didn't know we were talking about Harry yet, but when I came back to read it again this section had even more poignancy. People have always told Harry how wonderful it is that he can love so much, so the fact it's him makes this loss of love even worse.

And then when he's thinking about Ginny and remembering how much he cared...it makes me want to cry. He hasn't become cold and hardened, he still understands what it meant to love but now he can't do it. It's beautifully written.

I'm not a huge fan of second person but you've definitely pulled it off. It flows wonderfully and in this case I think second person is a good choice because you can keep it anonymous (without repeating 'him' all the time) but still from an outsider's point of view.

As always, I really enjoyed your wonderful writing.

Emma xx

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Review #6, by fwoopersong8 Feelings

20th January 2016:
Alright, that's just cruel.

Songs here from the Totally Platonic challenge. This is a reward review, but really...how could you?

I like what you did with second person, though. When it's really well done, I get to then end of a story, read "you" and realize "wait, this was in second person the whole time?" And that's what happened with this one. The narration is seamless.

But I mean... I get it was for a challenge and everything, but Harry can't love anymore? Because Voldemort killed the horcrux? Wouldn't that kill the part of him that was averse to love?

Perhaps he's suffering trauma and that's what has killed the love, but he thinks it's Voldemort. Hmm.

You did a really good job communicating how hollow Harry (and in this case, the reader, thanks to second person) is feeling. Good job, even though you are evil. ;)

~Songs

Author's Response: Hi Songs!

I'm sorry.

Ah. I'm so happy that you didn't notice it was 2nd person until the end. I always try my best to make it blend in.

I see the killing of the horcrux as sort of a metaphor of what's happening inside Harry. I don't think his love has literally been killed. I think it's more that he's been damaged to the point where he's struggling to love.

I'm glad that the hollowness came across!

Thanks for the review!

~Kaitlin


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