Reading Reviews for Hollow Hearts
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Review #1, by TidalDragon The Scamanders

10th April 2016:
We meet again!

The reunion conclusion is what I imagined from chapter titles despite the story's darker beginnings, but believe it or not, yours is the first reviewed to use the breaking of a connection to have a positive twist vis-a-vis other future connections.

Though it's unclear how long Rolf was actually away (and accordingly I did feel that the Rolf/Luna reunification was a little rushed) I definitely enjoyed this last installment for its earnestness about the moment of becoming (and being) a parent - especially under their circumstances. The experience is anxiety-inducing enough without the fear that something will go wrong, but given their history, Rolf's specialized form appeared particularly appropriate and it was delightful how the simple sounds of healthy babies put the worry aside.

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Review #2, by TidalDragon Rolf

10th April 2016:
Hello again!

I want to first commend you on Rolf's voice. Though I've never attempted to write him, he comes across exactly as I'd imagine - being the descendant of an adventurer AND writer has clearly had an impact on him and like Luna he is thoughtful and, when it matters most, well-spoken. I thought you used those aspects of him to make the ending of this chapter all the better because it showed such a resigned contrast - so resigned he is deprived of his natural voice.

In re: Luna, his observations all also quite interesting. You do a great job of making clear that he doesn't see her as others do: what others may call her eccentricity is whimsical to him for example. And you also make clear the depth of their previous love, at least from his perspective - she is, quite literally, his music and when silent, his world is not just darker, it isn't the same.

I look forward to the conclusion in Chapter 3!

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Review #3, by TidalDragon Luna

10th April 2016:
Howdy! I am working fervently to complete the process of R&R-ing all the first-round entries today and I have made it to your story. Since it's a multi-chapter entry, I will leave shorter reviews that are directed at each chapter on all three rather than one summative one that may miss something. Full disclosure, I may try to be summative in number three and get rambly - hope you don't mind. :p

The thing that intrigued me most about this chapter was the characterization of Luna. Her vocabulary, on the whole, seemed quite accurate, but what made her unique was her lack of hope. Undoubtedly, Luna is one of the most optimistic, untainted canon characters and so to see her like this is jarring. However, it stands as a testament to your work that she is still recognizable and feels genuine despite the change. I'm intrigued to see what happens next.

See you in Chapter 2!

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