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Review #1, by Marshal The Department (Thanks, Arthur) Gets Drenched

5th March 2016:
For the HPFF Review-A-Thon

So I had the time to read the next chapter of your story sooner than I thought. Honestly, I'm enjoying the story. I'm not typically into next gen and OC characters much but this story kind of has my attention. I love the issues that everyone is having and the reality of the characters how they interact with one another. The little interview breaks with Arthur I had wondered about with your AN because POV changed can disrupt a story a lot but it worked very nicely. Nice little breaks from the main story kind of like in a sitcom where there are little confession moments from various characters only different.

I have to say I am wondering why Sharon is doing an interview with everyone and I also like how you are setting things up with Lucy and Lysander. You have created a very real worlld here and I look forward to what more you have to produce in this story as it amuses me. Great work!


- Marshal
Team Ouroboros
"The end is only the beginning"

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Review #2, by Marshal The Department (Lucy) Says Hello

5th March 2016:
For the HPFF Review-A-Thon

Hi, I'm Marshal (obviously) I come from the forums. I don't think I've seen you around there, we have a few fun activities going on there such as the review-a-thon mentioned above and the Slytherin house is hosting a in house reviewing challenge. So I saw your story figured I hadn't see you around before and figured your story could do with some love.

Anyway the story is cute. Lucy sounds like a fun character. She's sort of my type of person. I get the natural inclination to smile. I haven't quite smiled at a bad thing though people have asked me why I'm smiling at something when I'm not. (Guess my face just naturally smiles.)

Anyway I love the humor and wit this story has presented so far. I love how the quick quills quote insults Lucy and she more upset that Lemon Sherbert is marked at tasteless.

You have formed together an interesting and dare I say motley crew. The should make for some interesting times in Magical Maintenance. I also love Lucy's reaction at the end of the story was very amusing as well cursing level five for always being on fire. I like it, and it made me smile. I'll have to look into the next chapter when I get a chance. I like how you title your chapters also with the parentheses in the middle as well. Anyway, till next time.

- Marshal
Team Ouroboros
"The end is only the beginning"

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Review #3, by princesslily_36 The Department (Thanks, Arthur) Gets Drenched

5th March 2016:
Hello!

This is Ysh again from the forums here for the HPFF Review-a-thon.

The chapter title itself had such a fun ring to it, I was excited to read this chapter.

6 in the morning? No wonder they're all grouchy, and craving coffee and bagels :D But still, what a cool job! They just get to decide what kind of day it should be - windy or sunny or rainy! I mean, being paid for such a job, that's the dream!

The workplace banter was so much fun to read, your dialogues are really good - they flow naturally and there's nothing forced about them! I liked the little detail about incinerating the cup as a magical parallel to throwing it in the bin. Nice touch there!

Ohh, I especially liked how you gave each person in the department a speciality which reflected their personalities. I think, by seeing that Lucy was good at sunlight (and by her narrative of course) we can safely assume that she's such a positive, bright person. The best kind there is :D

Ahh... Lucy - Lysander sparks. I'm loving it. The son of Luna Lovegood and a Magizoologist must be quite something, huh? Wait, do I sense a hint of something between Lucy and Trevor?

Poor Old Arthur!

Do post the next chapter soon :) Waiting for it.

XOXO
~Ysh

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Review #4, by princesslily_36 The Department (Lucy) Says Hello

5th March 2016:
Hello!

This is Ysh from the forums here for the HPFF Review-a-thon.

Your summary sounded like so much fun, and you had a fun banner up, which made me click in :D

I have to say, I love the narrative. It seemed so... chick-lit and feel good you know, of the best kind! Lucy has an amazing voice, I love how she rambles on at times and then turns back to focus on the present, and Sharon Baron, and her reactions to the lemon-sherbet.

Poor Percy, I can only imagine his face when he realized none of his daughter's NEWTS were going to ensure a rocketing career at the Ministry!

Merlin face-palmed - this bit was excellent :)

Just a small CC though, your punctuation at the ends of dialogues should be commas when followed by XYZ said/did rather than full stops.

The ending just lifts up your tale. You have made Magical Maintence seem like such a wonderfully fun place to work, and it has just become my new headcanon! Kudos to you!

Loving this story, and adding it to my reading list :)

XOXO
~Ysh

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