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3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Crumple-Horned Snorkac A constant

12th October 2016:
Greetings my friend and happy birthday. I am the Crumple-Horned Snorkack, who ordinarily dwells far away hidden in the northern woods but today I decided to come out and leave a review for you before retreating back to my cave.

Aw, this story is quite sad. I've never seen such a melancholy side to either Luna or her father before, and it what makes this story truly stand out. Poor Xeno Lovegood, trying to hide the reminders of the wife he loved and lost, when his daughter looks just like her. That's such a heartbreaking image. But I love that even as a small child, Luna contributed to the Quibbler - she writes her own column! It's very cute. I once an article for the Quibbler and sent it in under a pseudonym, just to see if it would get published. (It was about a sighting of Bigfoot.) I don't think Xeno ever found out it was me. Although sometimes I wonder what he would say if he knew.

But I digress. It makes me sad to think of all the kids who don't appreciate the Quibbler. I have found it to be much more factual - or at least much more open minded - than most of the other publications humans like to read. I browsed through the Daily Prophet once and found not a single conspiracy theory, it was quite dull. But these kids, I can't believe how cruel they are to Luna, bullying her and telling her to leave, just because she's a bit different. And all this on her first day of school! Humans can be so mean. I was glad when she ended up in a more friendly compartment at the end with people who were nice to her.

For just a quick story about the Hogwarts Express, there is a lot of emotion in this! It's very well written, you did a great job with it.

I hope you enjoy your birthday! As for me, I'm late to meet the Loch Ness Monster for tea. Cheerio!

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Review #2, by victoria_anne A constant

17th February 2016:
Hey there!

What a cute insight to Luna's little mind! I don't think I ever thought of how Luna would have first interacted with children her age, especially given the way she probably grew up!

It was a bit sad to see Luna teased when she genuinely didn't understand why. It kind of sets up her character for when we officially meet her in OotP - it makes sense for her to be acting like that, so good characterisation.

Good chapter in general!

Author's Response: Hi Bianca!
Thanks so much for dropping by! I'm glad that you liked this and that you thought that her characterization matched cannon. That was something I was a little worried about, so it was really good to know that it matched. Anyway, thanks for dropping by and for the kind words, and I hope to get to know you a little better in the future. :)

-Jayna


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Review #3, by Felpata Lupin A constant

4th January 2016:
Hi, Jayna!
Here for a very late Hot Seat review! :)

I decided to stop by here, even if I haven't read Sunflower yet, because you had no reviews here yet and this sounded interesting!

This was really cute! Poor Luna... Children can be really nasty at times... The way you wrote her hurt and confusion while the other kids made fun of her was so well done and real. And it also made me so sad, because I really can't stand people being so judgemental and cruel without reason.

It was good to see her meeting Ginny and be finally welcomed. I've always loved Ginny's character because she's so sweet and generous and strong, and you showed just that here, even if it is only a quick encounter.

What I felt a bit weird was the dialogue in the beginning between Luna and Xenophilius. She sounds a bit too mature in my opinion, nearly like an adult. Definitely not like a eleven-year-old... Then, again, Luna has always much more mature than her age...

What I loved about that first part was Xeno's feelings for Pandora, the way he distracts himself with work and the way he tries to forget about her. And the fact that he can't forget her because Luna reminds him of her so much... It's melancholic, but so sweet... I love it!!!

It's also very interesting how Luna finds solace in the Quibbler, like it was a long time friend. And again a bit sad when she doesn't take it out in the end because she's scared to be made fun of again...

This was a great piece that I really enjoyed reading! Great job, dear!

Lots of love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hey Chiara! Don't worry about it, these two splendid reviews more than make up for it. Besides, I had to leave some of my Hot Seat Reviews late as well because of vacation, so I totally understand. Anyway, thank you so much for reviewing this piece because I'm eager to get some feedback on it.

Children can definitely be quite nasty and just plain mean sometimes. I time, I intend to shape Verity into the OC that narrates Sunflower, which is why I had her introduce herself at the end of their encounter.

Oh yeah, I guess you're right, that does sound a little too mature for an eleven-year-old. I'll have to go back and fix that. Anyway, thank you so much for all your kind words and CC! Thank you so much for dropping by!

-Jayna


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