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Review #1, by TreacleTart The Letter

21st December 2015:
Advent Calendar - Day 21

Hi there!

I was scanning through the new one-shots and I noticed this didn't have any reviews yet, so I thought I'd stop by and check it out.

First of all, I was so excited to see that his was a Sirius/Remus story. They are one of my absolute favorite pairings and I think they just go so well together.

I thought you did a lovely job of showing how anxious Remus is about expressing his feelings. In cannon, he seems to be the type who is very shy and reserved, so it was nice that you kept that tone here as well.

I think it was so sad that when Remus and Sirius both felt it was time to finally admit their feelings, Sirius goes and gets falsely accused of a crime. And then Remus finding out about it because of a newspaper article. That somehow makes this even worse.

Now I do always try to leave at least a little bit of constructive criticism in my reviews, so here it goes.

I did notice that you tend to repeat words a bit in certain areas. Here's an example.

spent years dancing around this for years, and after all our years of schooling

Maybe switching one or two of the years to something like "in quite a while" or "in a long time" would help the flow of the sentence?

All in all, I do think this was a lovely one-shot, even though it made me want to cry for poor Sirius and Remus. Good work!

Hope you have happy holidays!


Author's Response: Thanks for your review. Constructive criticism is always welcome, and I'm glad that you enjoyed the story. Happy holidays to you too

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