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Reading Reviews for Harry Potter and the Coma
2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by The Basilisk The Coma

20th December 2015:
Hiss Hiss, Guess Who? The Basilisk, with a review.

Ooh, I had a great time reading thisss. Very interesting idea. I love the ambitious ending - you don't know which was the reality. But either way, I felt for Harry.

The characterisssation was very good and Harry's confusion was spot on. Your dialogue flowed naturally and I liked the dessscriptions too. Nothing over the top, and yet enough to keep the reader engaged.

I liked how the characters in Harry's dream resemble his real world too. And Ron/Hermione's relationship ssstayed true too. His family was obviously very loving and if that bit was a dream, I feel sad Harry couldn't ever have that.

Made me question my existence. Am I real or am I fictional? ;)

Great story! Loved it!

Hiss Hiss,
The Basilisk

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Review #2, by AngelEyez3954 The Coma

18th December 2015:
Hi Elisabeth,

This is a really interesting concept for a story! I particularly like the ending where Harry is unsure of which reality is true. It's kind of like those dreams when you wake up the next morning and think it was real.

Overall, the story was well-written, but I think it could use a bit more description - particularly in regards to how Harry feels when he first wakes up from the coma. While you tell us about how his heart is pounding, I think you could show his confusion a bit more. I also think he would be a little less willing to believe their story at first, and might think it was the work of dark magic, causing more a scene.

Otherwise, I really like your story, and can't wait to see what else you come up with!
Happy Holidays!
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