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2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by hpdavis2011 Chapter 6

6th January 2016:
I like it! You're writing from the first chapter has really improved. The first chapter really needs some punctuation separating things. I agree some things would be a lot easier to grasp with some more information added, I'm sure it's in your head and has just been lost in translation! I'm enjoying reading it though, very much. I really like that Hermione doesn't just suddenly think she loves Draco, so many make the jump too quickly. Good work and thanks for the good read this far!

Author's Response: I'm glad you've enjoyed it so far, and so happy that you took the time to comment! I'm hoping I'll have sorted it out so that it makes a little more sense (and reads better) soon, then I'll get back to updating. Thanks so much for reading, and for the review!

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Review #2, by Sarah Chapter 6

10th December 2015:
Hi! Your writing is very good. But as you have pointed out yourself, there a few plot holes. In your editing, I would focus more on explaining the reasoning behind the suspicion of Shakelbolt and other members of the Order. I feel like that needs to be explained better and worked into the story more. It just seemed so sudden. Things in general seem to happen very suddenly, which can work for certain instances, such as an ambush by death eaters, but things like McGonagal out of the blue showing up to offer positions as professors at Hogwarts needs a little more planning. In that case, I feel like McGonagall would have set up an official meeting with Hermione rather than just dropping in at the burrow. Other than the plot holes and some more organizing of the story itself, your writing is very good and your story line is very interesting. I do hope you continue with it and get a chance for some editing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the feedback! I'm hoping to get lots of time to work on it over the winter break, although I'm a little torn between editing the (numerous) plot holes right away or plowing through while making notes of them and going back at the end to do a rewrite. I'll keep in mind what you've said about the organization and things seeming too sudden. Again, I'm thrilled you took the time to leave a review, it means a lot to me.

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