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Reading Reviews for All Right, Jinx
4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Aphoride Fowl Art

20th November 2015:
Hey there - dropping by for our review swap! :) Okay, first off, I've got to say that I adore Jeeves & Wooster - I've seen the tv series more times than I can count - so I was so so happy when I read the beginning and realised what it was.

Admittedly, it took me a paragraph or two to realise, but then that's what I get for not looking too much at the summary and things, tbh :P But, I gotta say, I'm super impressed with how you did with copying the style, and capturing the era too - as well as the whole upstairs-downstairs dynamic, and how odd the friendship aspect of Jinx and Ariel's relationship is.

First things first, though - the style is just perfect. The whole way you write this is just perfect, especially for this story, set in this era. You manage to capture so much of Wodehouse's voice in this, while still making it your own, which is pretty incredible. Not to mention I love all the little slang things you get in there - what ho and things :P - and how the voice just fits the character of Ariel so well.

Your characters are amazing, too - I love the way you've taken Jeeves & Wooster and changed them into Jinx and Ariel. Like the writing, they're noticeably parallel to J & W, but they're still so separate and there are so many differences in it. I love how Ariel is so intent on having something mauve, haha, poor man, and Jinx is just absolutely stubborn in refusing to let him :P I'm so excited to see where you take these characters - if you keep them on parallel lines to J & W, or if you take them off their own way from this point :)

I love as well how you've adapted the era from J & W into the wizarding world, with Jinx being a house-elf rather than a valet, and with Muggles being a problem for purebloods - and the robes and sudden arrival via Floo. It's just so clever and the way you included them all in - I almost forgot that it was meant to be set in the wizarding world, haha, because it was just so fluid, you know? :)

Anyway, basically, I loved this. I'm favouriting and imma be back ;)

Aph xx

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Review #2, by MuggleMaybe Fowl Art

16th November 2015:
Hi Mo! I'm here for our swap :)

First of all, I'm sorry it took me a while to leave this review. I'm a little under the weather, and I fell asleep right before I started reading this. Sorry!

This is the first fic I've read about the Fantastic Beasts era. I have to admit, it's pretty fun to imagine the wizarding world in the 20s!

The narration here is really interesting. You've used a distinct voice - it reminds me of things I've read from the late 1800s/early 1900s (The Turn of the Screw, Sherlock Holmes, etc.) It feels very affected, but in an enjoyable way. It's addictive. I'm struggling not to write with that style now! :P

The plot was engaging (not to mention unique!!!) and there was enough momentum to keep me hooked until the end. I'm very interested to see what the other stories in the collection are about!

Also - Aunt Clara really shouldn't be so judgmental when she's commissioning portraits of her dead husband's skeleton! Like... What? o.O I loved it! So funny!!!

If you're going to keep using Ariel as the narrator, one thing I'd suggest is revealing a little more about him. I felt like I got to know Aunt Clara and Nathaniel better than Ariel - but I am interested to learn more about the narrator and his astonishing elf!

WAIT. I just looked up Wodehouse because I was curious and it seems this is an adaptation of his Jeeves books? (Yes?) Well, I really enjoyed it and you should totally enter it in the Adaptation Challenge on the archives :D

Thanks so much for the swap!
xoxo Renee

p.s. I don't look very good in mauve either. Me and Ariel can start a club ;)

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Review #3, by TreacleTart Fowl Art

15th November 2015:
Hey there!

I'm here for our review swap.

This was a really unusual piece. I don't think I've ever read anything quite like it here.

I really enjoyed the concept of Jinx being this super smart House Elf and using his mental capacity to assist his less intelligent master. Usually, House elves are portrayed quite differently from that, so I honestly found this refreshing. It was nice to see a superior elf.

The whole bit with Nathaniel and the portrait was quite amusing, particularly so because it came out looking like a bird. The bit about being an art critic seemed to work though because she hung it proudly afterwards even though she hated it. I kept thinking that something would go wrong, that somehow it would all blow up in their faces, but in the end it all worked. Jinx truly is brilliant.

I would've liked to know a bit more about Jinx's history. He refers to being let go, but mever delves into much detail. Was he just let go for being a know-it-all or was there something darker?

I did notice two small typos.

Well, it loud was enough that - it was loud enough that

But that hadn't last long - lasted long.

All in all, a really intriguing start to your short story collection. I'm quite curious to see where you go with it.

Good job!


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Review #4, by Musing Fowl Art

13th November 2015:
Hi there! Reviewing for BvB. I also get to be your first review on your first story here. Yay!

The moment I read the summary, I was excited to read the story since you don't always get to read stories featuring house-elves as the central characters.

This story was fun, actually. One of the most important facts which worked for this story that it had all original characters. So I could focus on the story and flowed in the direction you wanted me to, without any pre-conceived notions about the characters or the plot.

Aunt Clara seems to be the perfect example of the woman who lives only to show off her worth to the society. The way she poses with the bones of her dead husband cracked me up.

Coming to the central character, Jinx is a pretty interesting house-elf. I liked the way you portrayed him as being a clever house-elf, but still true to his character. The relationship between Jinx and Ariel is endearing. The way he schemes a plan to save Nathaniel from his predicament is interesting. The way you described the execution of the plan felt very real.

Although this was majorly a humorous tale, I liked the way you described the traits of the house-elves. In this regard, I really liked the following lines:

'Very well, call him humble if you please, but he believes this quality is simply a part of his service, as ordinary as brushing the floor or collecting plates. Which, in a way, makes him even more extraordinary; no one appreciates arrogance.'

'“Master Buckley, I can assure you that I’ve done no leg-pulling. Unless that is your wish.” “Carry on, Jinx.” I waved him away and he disappeared, his mouth sort of curving up. Because with Jinx it’s never a smile, just a paternal twitch of the muscles in that general upward direction.'

Thanks for a nice read.

-Emm ^_^

Author's Response: Hiya Emm, thanks for leaving my first ever review!

The amount of stories with house-elfs as central characters does seem low, and I was somewhat nervous to tackle this, but given such great source material, it turned out to be fun.

I'm writing this for the Adaptation challenge, so "Fowl Art" and the other stories that'll soon follow are based somewhat on actual works by P.G. Wodehouse. In those, it's a man and his valet, and their relationship is endearing and humorous, so I tried to translate it into the relationship between Jinx and Ariel. Basically I'm just trying to keep the spirit of Wodehouse alive here, and I don't know if I'll even be the slightest bit successful 'cause the man was so darn brilliant and funny. T-T

I'm also writing this for NaNoWriMo and literally posting the stories as soon as I finish them, so I don't know if this one seemed a little rough or rushed in some places like it does to me now, but I'll polish things up at a later date.

The use of OCs allowed me the freedom to make them fit within the mold of the original story, but I also used them because I couldn't imagine any of the established characters in a '20s setting.

Yeah, Aunt Clara's pretty snobbish, but I hope to explore her character more in following stories.

I DON'T KNOW WHY IT OCCURRED TO ME TO HAVE AUNT CLARA WITH A SKELETON?? I had the mental image of her posing with one for the portrait, Nathaniel and Ariel looking on in horror, and it made me crack up, so I'm absolutely pleased as punch that you cracked up as well!

Again, thanks for the review, and I hope to see you around again!

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