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Reading Reviews for The Fallen
  
3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by AlexFan Herpeton

21st December 2015:
Iím so sorry for taking so long with this review, I started reading this story a few weeks ago and I just never got to the end so I couldnít give you a proper review and I had to restart. That being said, I feel as if I need to get back into my Harry Potter knowledge here because there has been so much canon information coming forward and I havenít been caught up on any of it so this was quite the surprise for me.

Iíve never read a fanfiction like this before, focusing on the afterlife so it was really interesting to see what you did with it. I liked how in depth you went into the story and the different parts of the afterlife and how it all worked. I thought it would be perfectly realistic, I donít think I would picture the afterlife any less complicated than what you came up with in the story.

I thought the story flowed really well, despite the fact that the point of view changed quite a bit throughout the story. Iíve never really liked the whole point of view switching in a story before but Iíll admit that it worked really well with this. It showed two sides to the same story, but each point of view felt like a different story (if that makes sense). Both Cedric and Fred were telling the same story, and yet they both felt very different.

I personally had a little trouble keeping up with everything being mentioned, there was so much going on all at the same time that it felt like my mind was trying to go in multiple directions trying to keep track of everything, but again that was just me.

But anyway, I think you have a really interesting story here and I enjoyed reading it.

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Review #2, by MuggleMaybe Herpeton

3rd December 2015:
Hello! I'm here to review your entry for the Microfiction Challenge. :)

This is one of the most original and creative stories I've ever read. I never would have dreamed to use these characters and all the super cool HP mythology you've incorporated. Amazing!

It's really interesting to me that you've paired Fred and Credric. I don't think I've seen that before. And, of course, it's doubly interesting that you've done so after their deaths.

Your style of writing works really well for this piece - especially the poem. Holy WOW! :D

I admit that I found this a little confusing in some parts, but it was really interesting to get the different perspectives you've shown.

Thank you so much for your entry! If you hadn't entered, I might never have read this super interesting and one of a kind story.

xx Renee

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Review #3, by princesslily_36 Herpeton

16th November 2015:
Jen!

More and more I think you should have been in Gryffindor. Not only for the reasons we discussed in the PM, but the fact that you're taking on so many challenges. Microfiction challenge! That's got to be tough!

I love how you can write angst and horror. Your words just transport me to the scene there. I end up feeling that chilly feeling, like I did when I read Nihil. The whole afterlife theme was a touch of genius. It all felt so surreal, but I could picture them as I read, you know.

I love how you have used characters from HP Wiki (I feel like I just met my soul sister when I read you A/N)

OMG, You write poetry as well. That was brilliance. You can't see me, but I'm giving you the standing ovation ones. That poen was amazing, the language, the words. It was just brilliance. I'm still reeling from how awesome it was. I could never write like that. You should write more. And more. I'm here to review and encourage all you want!

At one part though, you switched between the past and the present tense. That confused me a little. I don't know if that was by design or mistake. I thought you might want to look into that if it was a mistake.

Apart from that, it is an amazing fic. There were parts where I struggled to follow but when i read it a couple of times it made sense to me.

Good luck with your challenge, I really hope you win!

Love,
Ysh

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