179 Reviews Found

Review #1, by EmmyBacon Higher Ranks

13th January 2018:
Some serious foreshadowing of things to come here!
Good chapter writing about the darker side of the building war. It showcases the greed and insistence of big old Voldy beautifully.
Looking forward to seeing more
Em x

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Review #2, by Kristi 3rd Year - Game Plan

4th January 2018:
Ahhh I started reading this way back when you first posted it! And then because I have no idea how to work notifications in this site, stopped. But then found you on fanfic and was so sad it was so far behind! But yay for finding you again on here!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for seeking me out! I can't tell you how much that means to me. Glad you're enjoying the story, and hope you do further as well.

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Review #3, by Tid-bit Year 3 ~ Winding up third year

25th October 2017:
I'm enjoying your story please keep writing

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Will do :)

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Review #4, by insertcreativeusername Year 3 ~ Winding up third year

22nd October 2017:
Oh goodness! Thank you for updating! I thought you had abandoned this story, and i was so disheartened! The characters in this are phenomenal and I can see the drama's just starting. Can't wait for the next chapter, you're an exceptional writer!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, that means a lot to me! I haven't abandoned it for sure, just bust with real life work. I will try to post more frequently!

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Review #5, by Shubha Year 3 ~ Exams and Other Things

5th July 2017:
Really nice fanfic!! I love how you have characterized James and Lily's awkward friendship cum hatred. Please upload the next chapter soon!

Author's Response: Thank you Shubha! Please hold on for more!

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Review #6, by JilyFever 3rd Year - Game Plan

15th June 2017:
I absolutly love Adhara! She is the sweetest and the strongest and I really hope nothing bad happens to her.
As for the Lily and James development I found it quite sweet, although in my head Lily would never like James this soon in their Hogwarts years I liked it how he feels pleased with the idea of her liking her :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I did want to byepass the cliche of Lily-hates-James-until-he-changes-for-her.

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Review #7, by brittny and harley 3rd Year - Game Plan

30th May 2017:
I feel like Rigel is going to kill Adhara. I am really worried about her. Keep up the great work! I want to continue reading your work and see where it goes!😊

Author's Response: Rigel does seem that kind, doesn't he? He's one of the characters I hate most in this series! I'm glad you want more of it, and I promise to update soon!

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Review #8, by brittny and harley Lily and Happenings

30th May 2017:
still following, dont stop!

Author's Response: I'm glad you're still with the gang!

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Review #9, by brittny and harley 2nd Year - Quidditch and Queer Things

29th May 2017:
I love this! Too cute, keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Thanks brittny and harley!!

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Review #10, by CANDRA 3rd Year - Game Plan

26th May 2017:

Author's Response: Thanks much Candra! I'm glad you're liking it!

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Review #11, by xopurelyinnocentxo Lily and Happenings

24th April 2017:
Hello! I just recently began reading your series, and I'm really enjoyig it. It's refreshing to see how you imagine that they all grew up together, and I'm excited to see what they'll do next.

I hope your move went well!

Author's Response: Hello PI!

Thank you so much for your kind review, I'm so happy you enjoyed it. I would love for you to stick with it through this series :-)

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Review #12, by JilyFever Lily and Happenings

25th March 2017:
I can't believe this fic is back! I've been waiting for sooo long!
I love the chapter and especially the ending! Can't wait for more ^^

Author's Response: Thank you so muchfor following the story despite the delay! I'll try updating sooner!

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Review #13, by Jeff Colwin Lily and Happenings

18th March 2017:
Right, now that I've got that very Peter-like admiration out of my system, I'll move on to the actual review.
I read the entire thing in close to an hour and I'm just so addicted already, it's not even funny. There's so many things remarkable about this story, both glaringly obvious, and so easy to take for granted, so I'm going to list them out one by one.
First, and perhaps the most blindingly obvious, is how gorgeous your characterization is. You've portrayed nearly every character so flawlessly that I can barely contain the flood of praise I'm about to dole out. I'm not so sure about how convincing Marlene is as such an airhead, especially after how selfless she came off in first year, but it seems like just a phase, and you're doing it realistically enough. Another thing which struck me as a bit off was that incident when James told Lily that there was no point in fighting a losing battle, because that doesn't sound like James AT ALL. James is the kind of guy who never gives up and never backs down, something which came across really strongly in his pursuit of Lily in Hogwarts.
But apart from that. Oh, sweet Merlin.
I wish I could list out all the moments where I just went, "That sounds EXACTLY like her/him!" Everything about each character's lives affected them so realistically. James with his incredible upbringing, and his goofiness and lightness and idealism and grit. Sirius with his abusive background, and his strong walls of recklessness and courage hiding his wounds and incredible empathy. Remus with his innate goodness and desire to let no one hurt like he did, and his instinct to comfort and nurture. Peter, with his complexity of thought, his indecision, his hero-worshipping and his desire to belong. Lily, with her fierce sense of right and wrong and her equally fierce loyalty, two things which constantly grapple with each other during her friendship with Snape. (At this point I'd also like to commend how you didn't just make her a goody two-shoes, but a far more complex individual with the exact kind of flaws which only James would truly understand, but the kind of qualities that would make both him and Snape fall in love with her. I especially loved the moment in the hospital wing when James sees right through her guilt and tells her to make sure her decisions are worth it.) Snape is especially gorgeously written, with his jealously, and unquenchable curiosity, and his bitterness and indecision coming through very clearly.
The support characters are amazing too, and really well fleshed out- Mary with her Muggleborn background, Dorcas and her dead father and newly discovered brother, and Marlene with her sincerity and enthusiasm. And did I mention Adhara? God, I LOVE Adhara. She's absolutely, heartbreakingly, incredibly written. I can't even express how well I've connected to her and what a great job you've done of making me fall in love with her character. When she took that Bludger for James, when she followed Dorcas to the Flumes' house, when she rescued Sirius at the party and kissed him, when she got cursed by her brother- every moment of hers in this story is just perfectly written. It's breathtaking.
It's not just the characters either. It's their interactions as well. You've got their dynamics down so well- the Marauders and their fierce protectiveness and loyalty and sense of adventure, Remus and Lily's mutual respect and kindness, Snape and Lily's fluctuating friendship, James and Lily's erratic relationship, the observant and supportive group dynamic among the girls, and the rivalry and hatred between the Marauders and Snape- all of it comes across so well it feels like I'm right there with them.
Something not so obviously fantastic, about this story, however, is the pace. You've gone through nearly three years in 20 chapters, covering the major events but not making it seem too detailed, not getting caught up in immediate aftermaths but somehow portraying the consequences in subsequent events so effectively, its really very commendable. I've tried to write stories like these before, and always got so caught up in mundane details and effects of minor parts of the storyline that I never make any progress, or touched upon every event so lightly that I never had any meat left in my story anymore and the ending made no sense. You're maintaining an incredible pace with your story, but doing a really great job of getting everything across at the same time, and I really hope you can keep it up.
Lastly, I really love that you're sticking so close to the original version of events as far as possible. Everything is so chock-full of references, and you've incorporated so many details that most people would have forgotten, and its really nice for super-fans like me to see them included in the story.
Wow, this has been a really long review. I hope you appreciate the feedback, and update soon! But I'd also like you to know that I'd rather you update later and give it your best than update sooner and give it half of what you could have. Take all the time you need, and I'll still be your fan :)

Author's Response: Jeff! your review made my day, week, month, Year!!! I can't believe the amazing feedback, and honestly, I was feeling a bit out of touch with this story but your review kind of brought back my passion! I'm halfway done with the next chapter, it's getting done slowly but steadily (grad school is no fun, I'll tell you that!)

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Review #14, by Jeff Colwin Lily and Happenings

18th March 2017:
Argh why have I never found this story before?
I hereby declare myself to be evermore your disciple and forsake all worldly pleasures for the noble purpose of being your humble student and protegee. Please o' literary venerate, accept my lowly pleas and allow me to enter your tutelage.
Yours devotedly,

Author's Response: You have given me back my lost passion!

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Review #15, by Dobbyandginn Lily and Happenings

9th March 2017:
I have just read all 20 chapters and I am loving it so far. I hope Lily and Marlene and the rest off the girls will forgive each other. I am looking forward to the next chapter because I am really interested.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Your feedback is encouraging and Ilove that you're following the gang through these chapters. I hope you follow through (despite the long delays between chapters!)

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Review #16, by elsa Lily and Happenings

8th March 2017:
it is amazing am desperately waiting for the next chap

Author's Response: Thank you elsa! I am honored and hope I'll get the next chapter up before you decide to think I've abandoned this and forget about this story!

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Review #17, by Felpata Lupin Lily and Happenings

6th March 2017:
I thought I might leave you a review, while I'm at it! ;)

This was such a great chapter (I'm sure I already told you on Google docs, and anyway all your chapters are, but I guess you don't mind the repetition, do you?)

I especially loved your interpretation of Peter (I'm obsessed, yeah, and not even sorry). He was honestly perfect, the way he didn't know how to deal with Lily's mood changes (really, boys have the emotional range of a teaspoon... ahahah!), the way he wished someone else to be there in his place, the way his every action was lead by what the Others would have done. And above all, the way he felt guilty "betraying" Lily, but did it anyway because it would make him look good in his friends' eyes. That's so Peter. Don't you ever say you can't write him again, you write him wonderfully! ;)

Poor Lily, how hard must it be to feel so alone, to have everyone angry at you... I know it will be solved soon, but right now I feel so bad for her... And talking about how perfect your characterization of everyone is... this paragraph:
"Unanswered questions were never something Lily had been able to handle, the need to know burning in her head until it took over her every waking thought. The only way she knew she was going to get some sleep that night was to get herself some answers." This is just so Lily! I love it!

The opening scene with Severus and the closing scene in the Hospital Wing with James were both so perfect as well. Loved, loved, loved it all!

I need a new chapter... soon... hurry up and start writing, okay? :P

Love you so much, my little betee!
Snowball hug,

Author's Response: Chii!

I am so sorry for responding super late to your review. I appreciate the time and thought that went into this.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter. You know how nervous I get when you have to read a Peter centric chapter of mine! You're the Peter expert here, and I'm just super joyed that you approve! I did imagine him to be awkward around people, and girls in particular because he was kind of a loner growing up as you saw.

I do feel bad for Lily, but it's kind of her fault here you know. I wanted to bring out that she's not as perfect as people make her out to be, and her actions while justified to her did tip off her friends. And Curious!Lily, always my headcanon. I kind of always figured Harry got his curiosity from Lily rather than James, you know.

This was a Lily-centric chapter, and I am glad that it all tied well together. Thank you so much for all the love on this one, and yes, you'll have the next chapter pretty soon!

Loads of love, snowball hugs and penguin kisses!!!

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Review #18, by 5th_Marauder The Big Row

3rd October 2016:
Update please. Ive been waiting for like 5 months now. Lol

Author's Response: Hello! I hope you did come back to check out the new chapters!

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Review #19, by YES The Big Row

15th August 2016:
Ahh I love this, please update it!

Author's Response: Thank you!

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Review #20, by James Hamro 2nd Year - Quidditch and Queer Things

17th July 2016:
AWESOME. Loving your knowledge and tactfulness

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

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Review #21, by True Author 2nd Year - Snowballs And Showdown

2nd July 2016:
Another great chapter!

The first scene was highly significant. The way you highlighted the difference between Snape's behavior was amazing. I could totally feel his confusion and how he was trying to please both the Slytherins and Lily. Also, Lily using the word "Always" was such a great detail. :D It made me feel so bad!

The friendship of Lily and Severus is highly complicated because there is nothing that bonds them except the moments they have shared back at home when they were kids. Things are slowly changing here as they know more and more about the differences between them and you are capturing that in a realistic way. I always liked to think that Lily didn't abruptly break her long friendship with Snape only because he called her a mudblood. The end of their friendship was more of a process. That particular insult was the moment when Lily had had enough and decided to stop being friends with him. And as always, I loved how you used dialogue to do so.

The Marauder scenes were as lovely as usual. :D Your ability to write natural yet witty dialogue really enhances this story as friendship seems to be the core idea. Friendship deals with communication so writing about the Marauders works wonderfully for you. Well done!

I've started to like Adhara a lot. She is a relatable and complex character which is a great combination. I can't wait to read more about what happens in her life!

Great job overall! Keep writing! I'll be back for more soon. :)


Author's Response: Hello Ashwini!

I am so sorry for the delay in my response to your review.

Snape is always a challenge to write because he's so complex and grey. I am glad you noticed what I was trying to bring out about him.

It is kind of sad that a lot of childhood friendships just fade out because they just grow into different people, and grow out of the friendship. I want to show the rift between Lily and Severus, but also make sure that the readers know she was really attached to him despite how cold she must have sounded post-mudblood incident. I'm glad the dialogues are working, they're my boggest worry since I'm not a native English speaker. I'm sure you can relate!

Marauders on the contrary are so much fun to write. I hang around a group of boys and I like to observe their dynamics and incorporate certain aspects of that in my story. I am finding a challenge to give some attention to Peter though, because I don't really want to ignore him like other fics do, but I'm not particularly inspired to write about him also, if you get my drift! Sometimes I wonder if I should have stuck to a single PoV story.

Adhara is an enigma, even to me. She rebels even when I write her. I have a scene planned for her and she just refuses to cooperate and tells me who she is rather than me telling her!

I'm so glad you like it so far, and I'm sorry for the late response!!


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Review #22, by True Author 2nd Year - Quidditch and Queer Things

28th June 2016:
Hi Ysh! It's me again!

Before I dive into this chapter, I would like you to know that I just revised chapter five of Through the Darkest and now it's in the queue. So it'd be great if you would read it once it gets validated tomorrow or the day after. :)

Now on the review!

Wow, this chapter really gave me the chills. This marks as the start of the war which makes me kind of sad yet curious to know what's going to happen and how they are going to be involved in it. It would be pretty interesting to know about Peter and his thoughts about Voldemort and his allies at school age. I hope you have touched the subject somewhere!

Btw I LOVE the way you write dialogue. It's always well written yet seems natural. Aargh, how do you do that? I'm going to have to take lessons from you! ;)

The scene with Adhara and Sirius has made me even more curious about Adhara's role in this story. She somehow seems like a character who is supposedly unimportant and suddenly becomes vital for the plot. I may be completely wrong, but that's what she seems like to me at the moment. You have a character with great potential. :)

Oh, poor Remus! He's really bad at covering things up isn't he? You've captured his state of mind perfectly. I can't wait to know how he is going to deal with his friends finding out about his furry little problem. (A sudden thought-Remus being a werewolf would have been the biggest plot twist ever only if we didn't know about it already. Just saying.)

The last scene was so amazing! Why can't we have friends like that? :P

Great chapter as always! I'll be back for more tomorrow!


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Review #23, by True Author 2nd Year - Hogwarts Express, Take Two

26th June 2016:
Ooh so many exciting things going on! Regulus coming to Hogwarts, Snape sitting with the rest of the (future) Death Eaters... Aah, the feels...!

Severus is a complicated character and how he happened to join Voldemort is merely a consequence of how he was treated by everyone else. I felt really bad for him here. Marlene not paying him much attention and James making fun of him along with Sirius... It was terrible! :( Great job with creating sympathy for him...! I can totally see why he loved Lily so much. She was probably the only human being who treated him right and believed in him apart from maybe Dumbledore. I was thinking of writing some Snape centric fic and this is definitely going to help me. :D

The tension between Regulus and Sirius was well written. I liked how you used dialogue between James and Sirius to convey the issues between the brothers. You did not dump the information but merged it in a brilliant way. :)

Adhara looks like an interesting character. Now I'm curious about what part she has to play in this whole drama..!

Amazing chapter as always! I miss talking to you so much...! :( Make sure you read my review response.

Please excuse any typos, I'm on my phone.


Author's Response: Ashwini! I miss talking to you too :( Whatsapp would be a good mode, but I don't want to share m number here that's why asked you to find me on Twitter! Have you joined HPFT?

Oohh a Snape centric fic... I wonder what it's going to be about. Snape is actually the toughest character for me to write about since I don't really like him you know, so any praise you send along his way really makes my day.

Haha, Adhara remains an enigma, but not for long though. I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter as well, and looking forward to reading more of yours as well.


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Review #24, by Storiesbooksandnovels The Big Row

21st June 2016:
Please don't leave me hanging here!

Author's Response: The next chapter will be up soon!

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Review #25, by Storiesbooksandnovels 3rd Year - Unos Pro Omnibus

21st June 2016:
No. Always is said just enough that you get that it's they're special word.

Author's Response: Yeah, it's just so sadly poetic, isn't it?

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