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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by randomwriter Amnesia

6th March 2016:
Hello Jayde! I'm here for the hpff-a-thon, and I'm surrently trying to squeeze in a review for every mod as a small way of saying thank you for all the great work you do :) I'm sorry if this short or rushed. I only managed to join in the very last hour.

Anyway, onto the story. This was absolutely... haunting? Painful? I don't even know what to say. I didn't expect it to hit me like this, but from the first sentence to the last, the pain was palpable. As I was reading the story, I almost felt like I could actually, physically feel his pain, and that's definitely a huge compliment to your writing here.

The description here definitely makes me jealous. Not only have you managed to paint so vivid an image for your reader that they can feel every emotion themselves, but you've also managed to do this in under a thousand words, and brevity is a skill I'm yet to learn.

This piece also flows really nicely. I find that I'm not always attracted to second person stories as they don't always flow this well. But this wasn't choppy or awkward to read at all.

I'm not entirely sure, but were you talking about Lupin here? As a werewolf? And Peter in the end? If you were, lovely characterisation. And I'm sorry if I got it entirely wrong.

Loved, loved, loved this, and I'm sorry to be rushing off like this, but I want to see if I can get another couple done before the deadline! Enjoyed this one :)

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you SO much for stopping by to read and review this, and for reviewing all the Mods! That's so very sweet of you! Also, thank you for contributing to the review-a-thon! ♥

Even though this will probably sound bad, I'm actually really glad that you thought this was haunting and painful, as that's definitely what I was going for there. :P Of course I don't want you in any pain or anything, but I'm pleased that you could feel his emotions here - thank you SO much for that wonderful compliment! *hug*

Aww! That's so sweet! But hey, my writing is nothing to be jealous of! But I am SO flattered that you think I did well with the emotions and description. And honestly, brevity is really hard for me, too. :P

Eeek! Thank you! I'm happy that the second person POV thing didn't throw you off! If I remember correctly (lol) this is the first time I've written something in second person, so I'm so thrilled that it came across and flowed well!

Hahah! I actually DID have Peter and Remus in mind in this, but I didn't want to actually come out and SAY that, I wanted to leave it more ambiguous so you could draw your own conclusions, and so that this description could fit several different people/magical beings. But yes, your conclusions are correct! :P

Thank you SO much, and there's no need to apologize! This is an amazing, squee-worthy review - THANK YOU! ♥



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Review #2, by marauderfan Amnesia

21st December 2015:
Wowww. This was so different from the story I just read earlier today, and I'm really amazed at your versatility as an author. And this may be my favorite thing of yours I've ever read (so far)! I just LOVE it, and I was so captivated the whole way through by the vivid-ness (... it's a word now!) of your descriptions, and most of all the second person point of view.

I love second person for so many reasons, mostly that it's this weird mix of very personal and also a bit distant, and that combination was utterly perfect for this story and the narrator, who doesn't even know who they are, so how could they narrate a story as "I"? And yet they remain anonymous without any name pronouns. I just think the POV choice was stellar.

And the story itself! The first chapter hints that the person is a werewolf, and that's actually what I was picturing, but I was still surprised when their arm came out and it was furry and they actually realize it's their own arm - what a powerful moment. This is such an incredible story because it seems like the most awful thing happening, a person being tortured and then forgetting who they are - but isn't that what any werewolf goes through whenever they transform, once every month? I think in canon Lupin mentions that he becomes less human, but doesn't really go into the details, and here, the idea that every transformation the werewolf literally forgets their identity, that's so powerful. Most of all what I love about this is that it makes me think. Does a werewolf, after changing back into a human, remember much about being a wolf? Do they remember that they couldn't remember their human identity? After all, they kind of have two lives, the human life (with a human brain) and the wolf life (with the wolf brain) and how much carries over? Ahh this was just so amazing because I love it when stories make me think this much.

I do wonder who the person was at the end, who said "it's me". A friend, I think, but given the narrator's very biased narration during this period, it's hard to say!

Absolutely wonderful work on this, Jayde! ♥

Author's Response: YOU HAVE COMPLETELY SPOILED ME WITH YOUR AMAZING REVIEWS KRISTIN OMG!

:O *Gasps* Your favorite so far? And you think I'm versatile and my descriptions were vivid? *sobs* Oh, thank you SO MUCH for those amazing comments! I just don't even know what to do with them! I always struggle with description so it's always nice to hear that I've done it well! And honestly, I was just trying to write something creepy for the Halloween challenge, I never thought anyone would like it so much! ;(

I have seriously been wanting to try 2nd person POV ever since I read a 2nd person story on here a few years back, and this was really the first chance I had to do that! I had a lot of fun doing it and trying to keep it as anonymous as possible, and I'm glad you think that was an excellent choice!

EEEk OH my gosh, you think I wrote a powerful moment?! *Squees* And honestly, your questions have filled ME with some questions, and it really makes me want to try to answer those through fic! :P So if a 2nd chapter of this pops up, you'll know you were the inspiration! :D

I did have a particular set of people in mind for this, but I don't want to give too much away. I WILL say that it IS a friend, though! :D

Thank you SO MUCH for another wonderful, squee-worthy review! ♥


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Review #3, by adluvshp Amnesia

10th December 2015:
Hey love! I have been wanting to check out your AP for ages but time constraints have stopped me. but I'm glad the Advent Calendar's Day Nine finally pushed me here! You've been on this site for 5 years which is an amazing time and you have so many lovely stories up, and you're such a wonderful writer, I can't believe I haven't read your work before!

Anyway, on to the review, I LOVED THIS! You write second person so well. You're my new role model in terms of writing xD I could literally feel this person's emotions and pain and confusion throughout. And your descriptions, my goodness, what perfection is that. The imagery is just tragically beautiful. The narrative flowed so smoothly and I was totally engrossed in this while reading.

I loved how you never once mentioned that this is about a werewolf yet your descriptions were brilliant enough to convey that point. The excruciating pain at the beginning describes the painful transformation very very well. This indeed totally creeped me out and now I'm thinking it wasn't a great idea to read this at 1 AM because I'm going to have werewolves haunting my dreams tonight xP

All in all, what a powerful one-shot. It was short but very much on point and I'm worshipping your writing right now. Great job!

Love,
Angie
(Lost Muse)

Author's Response: :O *Gasps* ANGIE! ♥

Thank you SO MUCH for stopping by, and reading and reviewing this! I didn't even realize I had any new reviews until I went to the Advent Calendar thread on the forums and saw you had posted a link to this review there, so this was such a pleasant surprise and just TOTALLY made my day!

And EEEK your compliments!! *sobs* Thank you SO MUCH, I'm so flattered! This was actually my first attempt at second person so I'm so pleased that you liked it! And :O I'm your role model? *sobs more* You are SO sweet! But really, you are SUCH an amazing author yourself, dear! I really admire your work!! EEEk Stahp it Angie! *Flails* Description is something I have ALWAYS struggled with, so your compliment really means the world to me! I'm so happy that you could feel the emotions, and that you thought it flowed smoothly! ♥

I'm so glad that you were able to deduce from the description that this was a werewolf! I wanted to give it a bit of ambiguity, but I also wanted it to be clear, at least by the end, what was happening, so I'm so thrilled that it worked! And Oh no!! I hope you don't have any nightmares about this! I'm sorry! *hugs*

GAH!! Angie I just can't right now! You're so sweet, thank you SO MUCH!! ♥ *squishes* THANK YOU!


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Review #4, by alicia and anne Amnesia

23rd November 2015:
Oh no! This is a scary beginning! I'm on edge feeling sorry for the pain that this person is going through. I want to help them through it :(

I'm scared about where they are, and I hope that they don't get hurt too badly and that they get free! This is scary! He's lost complete control of himself and that's just terrifying! I love that you've made this from a Werewolfs pov, this makes so much sense of how they would feel after going through the transformation.

This was utterly brilliant! Just such wonderful descriptions! I love this so much! Such brilliant writing!

Author's Response: I'm sorry for scaring you and making you feel sorry for the person at the beginning.. but it WAS for your Halloween challenge so I'm also pleased I could convey those emotions!

Eek! This was the darkest/scariest thing I've ever attempted to write, and I'm SO happy that you thought it was terrifying! I didn't know if I'd be able to pull it off! :D

EEk! Thank you So much for your amazing compliments! I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed this, and I'm so flattered! Thank you!!


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Review #5, by Peeves the Poltergeist Amnesia

24th October 2015:
Hello all! In the spirit of Halloween, I am doing something EXTRA special! If you are reading this, you are now a part of the Poltergeist chain! If you don't review TWO other people using the anonymous review name Peeves the Poltergeist within in TWENTY-FOUR (24) hours, I will drop chairs on your head until All Hallows Eve! You must copy the line and the portion above it and paste it into the beginning of each of your TWO reviews. Please try to review someone who hasn't already been reviewed by Peeves. Repeats are allowed, but discouraged. Happy Halloween!

Peevesy doesn't know much about werewolves but I don't think transforming into one would be any fun! No no no no no! I think you wrote that not-funness very well. No we all know that it would be no fun. NO FUN, NO FUN, LALALALALALA. I liked that we didn't know who was talking because that made it a mystery and I like mysteries! Like the mystery of who put gum in the keyhole (it was me! HAHAHAHAHA!). Mysteries are lots and lots of fun!

I lurved this story. Lurve, lurve, lurve! It was almost scary enough to be scarier than Peevesy! And almost more mysterious than me too! And it was nice and short, which is good because I don't have a very good attention span. Speaking of, I need to fly off and torture some ickle firsties! Maybe I'll tell them this story -- that'll scare them! Tell them all about how scary it is to become a werewolf and then BOO! HAHAHAHAHA, won't that be fun?

Author's Response: *Gasps* PEEVES! What a surprise!

Thank you so much for tagging me in this - and I kept the chain going, I promise! :D

I agree, I don't think transforming into a werewolf would be fun, either! I'm glad you think I wrote the not-funness very well! I'm glad you liked the mystery as well, I wanted to leave it open to interpretation a bit! And hahaha - well now the gum in the keyhole isn't a mystery anymore! :P

I'm so happy that you loved this story! Haha, I'm not sure if it's quite as scary as you, though! :P Thank you SO much for stopping by, and take it easy on the ickle firsties! :P

(Also, I'm not sure who you are, but you've got Peeves' personality down to an art!) :D Thank you!


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Review #6, by The Basilisk Amnesia

8th October 2015:
Ssssalutations!

I bet you didn't know that Halloween is the Basilisk's favorite time of year, did you? Well, it is, indeed.

Since this is second person, I've enjoyed how the story flows. You've used it to show the reader intense feelings and thoughts without dialogue or directly telling us what's going on. The scene at the beginning was especially gruesome -- and I can't help but reminisce about the old days when I used to torture Muggle-borns. Oh, nostalgia. But that was the past. I don't do that kind of thing any longer.

Speaking of not coming right out and saying what's going on, my best estimates point me toward a werewolf transformation. I do believe I am correct: the painful, tortured experience in the beginning, the confusion in the middle (being locked in a room, angry, unsure), and then the certainty that "you" were once human (or were you)?

The Basilisk thinksss you have done and exc(sss)ellent job on this! Thanks for the super Halloween-y read!

-The Basilisk

Author's Response: *Gasps* Mr. Basilisk! You're back! ♥

No, I didn't know Halloween was your favorite time of year!

Thank you so much for your compliments about the story's flow and the feelings conveyed. I really wanted the actual experience itself to remain a mystery as much as possible, so I'm glad I was able to pull that off!

And Aww! I'm so pleased to hear that you're turning over a new leaf! *hugs*

Yes, it was a werewolf transformation - you got it! :D I really wanted to leave it up to interpretation, but I also wanted to drop enough clues to let you know that I really was thinking of a werewolf when I wrote it, if that makes any sense .

Thank you SO much for this amazing review!


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