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Review #1, by looneylizzie Prince of Persuasia

5th February 2016:
Hiya Spencer!

So, Iím finally getting around to reading and reviewing the entries for The Name that Fandom Challenge! So sorry for taking forever and a half to read this!

Anyway, onto your story ó I really enjoyed this! Scorpius is SO delightfully awkward with Albus and itís absolutely hysterical! There were some moments where I was torn between laughing and feeling embarrassed for himÖ the poor thing. I do hope he gets better at it when heís older.

I really like that it didnít work out for him and Albus in the end - it does an excellent job of setting up for a sequel and it also feels more realistic. Because letís be honest, most 14 year olds that are THAT awkward donít usually get the guy/girl easily. Iíd imagine it would take Scorpius quite a while to finally manage to convince Albus to go out with him while managing to not creep him out at the same time. :)

As for the references - I didnít even realize the quotes youíd used were actually quotes until the very end! They flowed so well within the story that they didnít stick out at all - other than being quite amusing. I quite like the Asthma one. That definitely made me giggle.

This is a fantastic story, Spencer, and thanks so much for entering in my challenge!
Keep writing!

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Review #2, by pinkpanther16 Prince of Persuasia

11th October 2015:
This was so good! I love your writing! I also like how they didn't end up together in the end. Its so common for the issue to resolve itself, its nice to have something different for a change. And the Bob's Burger references and Scorpious acting like an idiot were A+. The whole one shot was so great and fun to read. I'm glad you're planning a sequel! Can't wait to read it! :D

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I was a bit nervous about Prince of Persuasia since it's somewhat out of my comfort zone. Prince of Persuasia is poking fun at my younger self since I was almost as awkward as Scorpius with crushes. I'm glad you liked it! I've started planning the sequel, which will be called the King of Persuasia.

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