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Reading Reviews for Enemies, at best.
  
2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Jayna Enemies, at best.

21st September 2015:
Hello! I just left a review and insisted this would be better as a one shot than a novella. I went back and realized that I had confused this piece with your other story, which is a novella. So anyway, sorry about that and please disregard everything I said about converting your one-shot to a one-shot. XD

-Jayna

Author's Response: Haha! Thank you again :)

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Review #2, by Jayna Enemies, at best.

21st September 2015:
Hi! I saw that you were new on the forums, and the sad little zero next to the titles of your stories were upsetting me, so I decided to come and fix at least one of them.

First of all, welcome to the forums! From experience I know that they are pretty intimidating at first, but I promise that everyone is super nice and supportive and you'll fall right into the swing of things in no time.

Anyway, onto the story. I really liked the starting, and it could honestly stand on it's own as a one-shot. I loved your writing style and it felt almost like poetry, so it really enhanced the supposed-to-be-enemies line you're using. I especially like the way you made the last line be the title, and it's a super strong ending for a stand-alone.

Suggestion time! While this was a great chapter overall, it does leave me wondering where exactly are you going to expand this into a novella? Once you figure that out, I think it would be a good idea to come back and add some indication of the direction of the story into this chapter and perhaps leave us on a cliffhanger?

Again, I really ADORE your style in this piece and the flow is terrific, but to me it seems more like a single piece than the beginning of a story. If you have any questions about the archives or the forums (or just want to chat), feel free to shoot me a PM!

-Jayna

Author's Response: Thank you! :) That's so nice of you to say that x

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