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Reading Reviews for Secrets
2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Hdenizzz Prologue

17th September 2015:
Liked it! Waitıng for longer chapter. When will you put?

Author's Response: I'm not sure. I just put an edit in to re-write my first chapter so be sure to re-read it.

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Review #2, by XOdannieXO Prologue

16th September 2015:
I love the story summary, and it is quite something I have never seen before - it did spark my interest.

The idea behind this sounds great and I am sure that you will be able to write amazing chapters in the future. Yet the only thing I would improve on, is the way your telling/expressing the plot and your thoughts. It, overall, seems rushed. You write little passages, that give one interestig aspect and right after that, you make a cut. Now, that way of doing it, is definitely not wrong - it is rather interesting. But still unlike anything that I have seen.

Leah, for example. Maybe it is just me but I would have kept her (name and all) a secret. Just mention the name and leave it at that. This way, your readers will wonder who Leah is. In further chapters, you could have introduced her, hinting at that her father went to school with her mother and how she came to be.

I hope you don't understand this the wrong way. Your work is truly amazing, but my overall impression is -rushed/fast! Take your time, in explaining and describing. The good thing about writing is that no one is rushing you.

Take my advice, take your time and go into detail. Apart from that, everything's just fine. Well done.


ps. I think I have read your story before. It does sound familiar.

Author's Response: I wrote a story kinda similar to this one before. Then I left for a bit just because of school, work, and sports. So I decided to delete all my past stories and start all over again

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