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5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MrsJaydeMalfoy My First Date(s)

19th July 2016:
I KNEW IT! I knew Katie liked Alicia all along, and that's why she was being so picky! :P

I was talking to Renee and told her I was leaving you some hot seat reviews, so she suggested this story and I'm very glad she did! This is cute and sweet and fluffy and just wonderful!

I think you had great transitions between all of the episodes, and I loved how each episode happened on their special couch, it's so sweet that they had a secret spot even before they were a couple!

Your descriptions of the dates were amazing and really I can't think of much else to say about this except that I loved it, it's so cute I just want to squish it!!

Well done, lovely, and thank you again for donating to HPFF! ♥

Author's Response: Hehe, I love it when people root for Katie and Alicia from the beginning!

I'm glad Renee suggested this story! It's really fun and sweet, which I think is a great way to leave off, especially after reading some of my heavier stories.

I'm incorporating this ship into my Polyverse, and have a few other stories planned for them, also including Oliver, Percy, and Audrey. At the moment I have a one shot kind of as a promo for that up on ao3, though I'm not sure if you read over there.

Thank you again for all the reviews! I hope you're doing well ♥


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Review #2, by MuggleMaybe My First Date(s)

30th March 2016:
SAM! ♥ ♥ ♥

I don't have to pretend I was crying to make a point, because this story is wonderfully happy and fluffy.

But also, not? There is something so real about Katie's experience of trying and trying, and time and time again coming up empty handed. You capture the frustration of that, but in an optimistic way.

I think Katie is an underutilized character in fic. I was excited when I saw you'd used her as the MC! Even though this story is mostly dialogue, you managed to show us that Katie is a multilayered person.

But of course, the main thing is the relationship between Katie and Alicia. Alicia is a wonderful friend, always there to listen when Katie needs her (*cough*) and right from the start I had an inkling that their friendship was more important than simply to serve as a framing device. The way you start out with Katie feeling ignored and bring Alicia into that moment gives her a lot of power right away in Katie's life. It's true she gets almost too zealous about Katie's love life, but I can't stay mad at her when her intentions were so good.

You did a brilliant job of not revealing your hand too soon. I had the feeling earlier on in the story, "oh, I hope they end up together" - but I really didn't know if it was going to happen or not. And then the way you did end it, holding us in suspense until the last possible moment, was perfection.

A few details -

the mention of how Alicia reads Katie's physicality is a nice foreshadow, because it could be simply a friend thing, but it demonstrates that more tangible connection between them.

I adore the humor and frankness in this line:
-- “Mostly just sat there and thought about how pretty she was,” I admit.

and this, one, so perfect!
-- I nod immediately. “It’s like I’m learning…” I stumble over my words as they fall out of my mouth, “what I want.”

and something about this line made me positively grin.
-- “You’re killing me here, Bell.”

I really loved this so much! Thank you for the wonderful recommendation! :wub: I agree with what you said about CH 1 of WIGOWY, except more broadly - there is something bright and liquid about the way you put words together that is overwhelmingly pleasant.

I got really sleepy part way through this review, so hopefully it makes some kind of sense :P

lots of love!

Author's Response: Agh, I love you so much!

I'm glad I recommended this for you, and that you liked it as much as I hoped you would. And thank you for leaving such a lovely, thought out long review, regardless of the sleepies.

Optimistic frustration is actually something that is very me.

I am glad that you both didn't cry or pretend to ;) I actually cried at the end when I reread it tonight because, ya know, it is my feelings

I'm happy that you wanted Katie and Alicia to get together, and that you liked the way it played out.

Not going to lie, the first date story was more autobiographical than fiction, as was that first line you said you liked.
Also, I didn't remember until I reread this that Daphne is in it, characterized the same as my Daphne/Gabriella one-shot. Those two kind of accidentally became headcanon and I decided that even though they don't tie into any other Polyverse stories yet, they will if the opportunity to. Which makes this story part of Polyverse! Totally making this up as I go.

Anyway, I love that you love my words!

(also you)


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Review #3, by SunshineDaisies My First Date(s)

1st November 2015:
Ten years later, I am FINALLY here for your requested review! I'm so, so sorry it took me so long to get here. I'm not very good at adulting.

Anyway, this was so lovely! Super enjoyable and very fun to read.

Your characterization was perfect. Katie as someone who is new to the dating scene is so well done. I loved reading about all the struggles that come along when you first start dating people and you're trying to figure out what works and what doesn't. As someone who is also not very experienced in the dating world, I totally related.

Also it was super adorable to read about her thoughts on the girls she was going out with, especially beforehand. It was super cute to see her thoughts about how cute they were.

AND ALICIA. I loved Alicia so much. I AM Alicia, honestly. I am that friend who will sit you down and force you to tell me all about the date you went on and the kissing and then giggle with you about it. It was so great to read about that. :D Everyone should have one of those friends, honestly.

I know you were a little concerned about balance, but I think the longer first section works perfectly. It's necessary to set up the rest of story, and it makes perfect sense for it to be a bit longer than the other sections.

Flow was fabulous. The structure of the story worked so well! I really loved how you had Katie recap the dates to Alicia rather than showing the dates themselves. Of course the story isn't really about the dates, but Katie's perception of them, so it makes perfect sense.

AND THE END. SAM. OH MY GOD. I was so pleased. I had my fingers crossed from at least half way through AND THAT WAS SUCH A SATISFACTORY ENDING. I was so afraid Alicia would be like "uh, no, not a lesiban sorry bye" and I would have just been devastated for Katie but then it worked out AND IT WAS WONDERFUL.

Ugh, this is so fantastic. Then again, ALL of your stuff is fantastic. Thank you so much for requesting it and I'm so sorry it was so late!

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Review #4, by Shadowkat My First Date(s)

20th September 2015:
YES! TOTALLY CALLED IT!!! Sorry for the all caps, but that ending made me happy. Anyway, here for the promised review. XD

I really loved this one, it was so sweet! I was hoping Katie and Alicia would get together from the start. I figured Verity wouldn't work, most things like that don't when you just know them by looks, thought there'd be a interest or personality pitfall there.

I got to admit, didn't expect that from Greengrass, normally she's portrayed as the "Ice Queen of Slytherin". You managed to do something new, even if Katie didn't fully feel like going for it at the end. Katie was pretty picky with Sally-Anne, and Pats. The more she went through the more I was sure I was right, and I was. Still so happy about that.

I didn't see any major problems, and everything flowed. This was a solid oneshot. Nice job, 9/10, because I'm stingy. ;)

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much!

I am so glad to hear that you were rooting for Katie and Alicia - I had hoped that would be the case.

Daphne's characterization is connected to a one-shot I wrote called At The Lake. I don't typically write my stories in the same universe, but as I write more and more lgbt+ pairings that are quickly becoming headcanon for me, it's hard to resist.

If you read closely, kissing Daphne was kind of the moment when Katie figures out who she'd there be with, but it takes her a while to be able to admit it, hence the pickiness.

Thanks for your review!


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Review #5, by rover_bond007 My First Date(s)

19th September 2015:
Short but sweet - great story and left me with a big smile on my face... I hoped it would be Alicia at the end :)

Author's Response: Hello, thanks for the review!

I'm really glad that you liked this and it made you smile! I wasn't sure if people would be leaning towards Katie and Alicia, but I'm glad you did!

And haha, this is actually long for a one shot for me XD

Thanks so much for the review!


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