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Review #1, by Frankie05 A Posse Ad Esse

28th September 2015:
Hey there,

I'm here reviewing for your challenge! This was a really sweet moment to experience. I love that you went with the moment of Dobby asking for a job at Hogwarts. I liked how genuine Dumbledore is and how accommodating he is. I think you got that part of his personality down!

I did think the conversation seemed a bit forced, it didn't flow as freely. But that comes with time :) So keep working at that! And I would have loved to see more descriptions during the conversation. More than just dialouge. Writing about body language or anything going through a character's head would be nice to get more into the story!

All in all this story was so sweet and so cute. I loved it! Good luck :)

Also I've noticed you are pumping out stories for challenges! Great job!

Frankie

Author's Response: Thank you for your review!
I've been avoiding writing Dumbledore much into any of my fics since he's a character that's difficult to accurately in fanfic, so I'm glad to see that you think my interpretation of him is semi-canon. Thank you for the polite constructive criticism as well.


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