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Review #1, by MuggleMaybe Breaking The Cycle

3rd December 2015:
Hello! I'm here with your review for the Microfiction Challenge. :)

The feels!! I feel so sad for Seamus and Dean that they had to suffer the way they did, but so happy that they were able to be happy together in the end. The thought of Seamus being at the Hog's Head all the time at age 17 or 18 is tragic. And then Dean's depression and eventual attempt - so sad!

I think my favorite section is Submarine. It's a very apt analogy, and I appreciate how you show the difficulty in finding happiness again after experiencing such terrible things.

Thank you so much for entering the challenge! I really enjoyed your entry.
xx Renee

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked this chapter.
Dean and Seamus, along with the majority of HP characters, went through so much that year, and it must have traumatized all of them to some extent. I wanted to include some optimism in this chapter since life is all about balance.
Submarine was...well, I won't say it was my favorite section to write, but it holds a special place in my heart.

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Review #2, by Owlpost68 Breaking The Cycle

25th September 2015:
This was really interesting. Honestly, I kind of forgot how people really would have PTSD symptoms after the war. Also, you made their relationship more realistic to me. They were so close and then Seamus was without him for a year and vice versa. It was different than any story I've read so far with how many page breaks there were, but I understand why. I would suggest maybe making them into short scenes instead of just a narrative. It would make it longer, but it would delve deeper into the characters and show just how much you know and care about them.

I'm glad I tried something different and read this :) Good luck!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I wrote this for the Microfiction Challenge, which is the only reason why I wrote the fic in this format, but I've fallen in with their relationship in Mosaic, so I will one day expand on their relationship.

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