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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Dirigible_Plums Adjective: Separate, Apart, or Isolated from Others

1st April 2017:
Hello!

Part-time Jailbreaker, part-time dirigible plum over here for the CTF event!

The first thing that came to mind for me was just... "wow". This was beautiful and I mean it. The way you write flows so fluidly and so well, penned well enough to keep me hooked. You really managed to suck me in and keep hold of me by truly presenting Sirius' struggles. I could honestly feel his distress and uncertainty with every word. You did brilliantly.

I loved that Sirius was distressed and uncertain. Don't get me wrong, cocky Sirius is a great Sirius. But reading about his self-doubt was more than welcome because it reinforced the fact that this reckless, somewhat overdramatic boy is, in fact, just a boy. He ran away from a toxic home at the age of sixteen and it's not all been sunshine and rainbows.

One way this is shown, of course, is through his regrets that he left Regulus. I really like how you put a focus on his old relationship with his brother. It's actually heartbreaking to think of it. The two were once so close but now... now they're not even speaking. And we all know what happens next. Honestly gut-wrenching.

The scene at the platform was similarly so. Poor Sirius having to see his parents dote on Regulus and never extend the same love to him. Though they might be horrible people, they're still his parents at the end of the day. You always want a little love from your parents.

I'm glad it ended on a hopeful note, though. Because as we know, despite whatever happened in the end, the Marauders were family to each other. And nothing can replace that.

Plums xo
♡♡♡

Author's Response: Hi Plums!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I almost never check HPFF since the forums went away (I SO need to be active on HPFT!), but I just happened to think of it today, and I'm so happy I did! This review was amazing to come back to!

I'm so happy that you liked the story! Regulus's story to me is one of the biggest tragedies in canon, so I've often considered how it would have affected those who knew him, particularly Sirius. I'm so glad you picked up on what I felt was important in this story--Sirius really is just a kid. I haven't been 16 for a long time, but I remember that you don't really have everything figured out at that age. And what he went through would be heart-wrenching even for the toughest person! So I'm really happy you enjoyed it!

This review made my night! Thanks again!
Emily


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Review #2, by ANightingaleInAGoldenCage Adjective: Separate, Apart, or Isolated from Others

1st April 2017:
Hi!

I am here for CTR and boy am I glad to have picked this story. I swear, I can not find a faulty thing about it and this is rare. Really rare. I don't even know how I am going to fill 1000 characters here but I am going to try.

Because seriously. The writing and flowing of the sentences is beautiful. It works so well and it shows so much of the characters and how they are, but nothing is too much, really. I loved how you said that James told his parents' his favorite colors. How helpful and a gem Lily is despite what she has been going through herself, despite the fact that they aren't even close. It really shows their personalities well, and I can't imagine anything different from James' parents either.

The dream and how it influenced the rest of your story is simply amazing too. The underlying doubt, how the bustle is somehow worse than the quietness of the dream. It just works perfectly, and I can imagine that even if you leave and are fed up yourself, you'd feel alone anyway thanks to all the underlying doubt. Really, amazingly done and I could not have been happier to have come across this story. Thank you!

Author's Response: Hi there!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I almost never check HPFF since the forums went away (I SO need to be active on HPFT!), but I just happened to think of it today, and I'm so happy I did! This review was amazing to come back to! I'm really happy that you liked the story and that you felt the characters were believeable! I'm so unsure about my Marauders-characterization, so I'm really pleased you enjoyed everyone!

Thanks again!
Emily


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Review #3, by Musing Adjective: Separate, Apart, or Isolated from Others

25th October 2015:
Hello!

This review is for the BvB Review Fest.

First thing first, I really liked the story title and the related chapter title. The idea for providing the phonetics and the definition rather than simply saying 'Alone' is a pretty innovative idea. :)

You made me really feel for Sirius right from the beginning. It's not easy to understand the feeling of being alone in a crowd and probably, this is the worst that could happen to anybody.

The comparison between Sirius' house and James' home is beautifully drawn. I loved the way you portrayed James' parents. I liked the way they displayed their affections towards Sirius. Sirius' parents are just too cruel on the other hand. Poor Sirius... His parents turned up with his younger brother but never gave such importance to him.

“ill love you furever, even when mummy and dad are mad that your in griffindoor.” I can't explain how much this line affected me. I wish Sirius and Regulus had shared their feelings with each other just as freely when they were adults. RAB would not have been the unsung martyr then!

It's great that Sirius realized that he has his friends with him.

"He let Lily walk him back to his compartment (and pretended not to notice when she spoke only to James)" Being a big Jily fan, I couldn't miss this, could I? ;)

This was a lovely read :D

-Emm ^_^

Author's Response: Hi Emm!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm so happy that you liked the story! I'm really glad that you think the phonetic title worked (I was worried it would be confusing)! Secondly, I'm really glad you liked Sirius. I definitely don't write Marauders stories often, so I'm glad that you think this was good. And I have such a soft spot for Regulus! I wish I could write him more often, but alas...my fear of Marauders, haha. All-in-all, thank you so much for your review. I appreciate all your comments and compliments so much. Take care!

Emily


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Review #4, by Freda_and_Georgina Adjective: Separate, Apart, or Isolated from Others

28th August 2015:
Hello! This is Georgina with your prize review from our challenge!

This was a very feelsy story. The moment when you describe Regulus as a young man nearly reduced me to tears. I really like how you have James' parents and...really all the characters here.

I just really liked this. I'm very sorry I can't give you a better review because I'm kind of brain-dead. All in all, I really liked this story. It gives a fresh perspective on an event that's just mentioned in the books.

Author's Response: Hi Georgina!

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate your kind words, and I'm so happy that you liked the story! Thank you for all of your compliments, and have a great day!

Emily


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Review #5, by Flower n Prongs Adjective: Separate, Apart, or Isolated from Others

18th August 2015:
Hello, Rhaenyra here from the forums. I actually saw this in the update thread and clicked on it before realizing that it was written for my challenge, so that made me extra excited to see what you had come up with.

As you may have noticed, I have a soft spot for Marauder era stories so I was excited to see that you had used Sirius as your main character for the dream cliche. I have high expectations for his characterization and you did a great job at writing him! You managed to show him as a well rounded individual, not as a playboy or happy-go-lucky goofball. You did a very good job at portraying his low self-worth.

In relation to that, I also have to say that you managed to convey a lot about Sirius's relationships with his parents and brother in very few words. Although the three other Blacks hardly appeared "on screen" there was a depth to their relationship that felt real. Sirius's dejectedness and poor self-esteem were conveyed in his reactions to them without you needing to say it bluntly. Showing the change in his relationship with Regulus in a few brief moments - them as kids, Regulus's secret, typo-ridden letter to his brother, to them not interacting at all on the platform helped to drive the point that Sirius was the black sheep of the Black family (no pun intended) home.

The ending to this story was very powerful, with Sirius overcoming his fears and realizing that his subconscious was lying to him in his dream. His statement that blood does not make family ties in to his later actions and book Sirius very well.

I really enjoyed reading this. If anything, I would suggest expanding it so there was more to read since you did such a great job getting into Sirius's head.

Thank you for taking the time to enter my challenge and making a cliche your own! I will post challenge winners on my blog and in the Hall of Fame in the challenge section when I am done reading & reviewing everybody's stories, so keep an eye out for that. =)

- Rhaenyra

Author's Response: Hi Rhaenyra!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm so, so, SO happy that you liked the way I wrote Sirius! This is only the second time I've ever written for him, and the first time was six and a half years ago. So I was very intimidated by the idea of writing for him. My first try ("Sirius Black: Matchmaker Extraordinaire," if you're interested ;) ) was goofy-Sirius, so I really wanted to try something more serious (no pun intended). We know that he left his family willingly, but I had to think that that still would have been hard. It's not easy to make such a huge change in your life. So I wanted to explore that. I'm glad you liked the "interaction" between Sirius and his family and the way he thinks of Regulus. I always like to imagine that they were close at one point...it makes it so much more depressing how they ended up. :( But I'm glad you liked that element! And the ending! And all the compliments you gave me. It really means so much, and I'm so happy you enjoyed this story. I eagerly await the challenge results. :)

Thank you for issuing the challenge that helped inspire this, and thank you for reviewing!

Emily


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Review #6, by EnigmaticEyes16 Adjective: Separate, Apart, or Isolated from Others

16th August 2015:
Hi! I don't really know what to say.

I thought this was wonderfully written and I loved how to chose to touch on this particular subject, of Sirius suffering after leaving his parents to live with James and the Potters. I can understand why he'd have a dream like that, and how he must feel alone because he's the only one he knows who doesn't have a family anymore. And how heartbreaking it must be to have a brother who acts like you don't even exist anymore when he used to worship you and you used to protect him from the world like a big brother should.

I love how sweet and caring the Potters are to him though and how Mrs. Potter treats him like her own son, even her "better" son since someone has to receive the blame when something goes wrong, it's obviously not Sirius, lol.

I like how you also included Lily and that, even though they may not be friends and she may not approve of all his pranks and such, she could still see he was hurting and still wanted to offer her help and support for someone in need. It really emphasizes what we learn of Lily from Sirius and Remus, that she really was the most caring and kindest person. I wonder what happened to her own parents though. I suppose, even though the situations are quite different, if anyone could understand what he was going through, she could, being without her parents as well.

This was such a great story! I'm so glad I decided to read it!

xxNix

Author's Response: Hi Nix!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! This is such a positive review, and I was so unsure of this story. Your words have really helped make me more confident about this. :) Thank you! I'm really happy you liked the premise. I was trying to consider how Sirius would have immediately coped with leaving his family--something like that is bound to be difficult, even if you know you did the right thing for yourself. I'm also glad you liked the Potters and Lily in this. I wasn't sure what role I wanted Lily to play, but I'm glad you liked how she showed up. I guess I should throw a line in about Lily's parents--I always imagined that they died of some Muggle disease (like cancer) or in a car accident or something. We know that they're no longer alive when Harry is born, so I had to think of how they'd died and how Lily had coped with it. All-in-all, your review was so lovely. Thank you again for everything!

Emily


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