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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Chocolate Frog Cards Time Ticks Away

15th March 2016:
Oh Merlin. This is what I get for deciding to sleep in this morning instead of going for an early morning fly before practice! You almost giving me a heart attack until I remembered that this didn't actually happen to our Rose.

I can see her getting herself into trouble with Scorpius (I hope she doesn't see this, she still thinks I'm the cool aunt) like this. As if her mum's stories about the time turner didn't teach her anything - maybe this one will make her listen!

You had such great language throughout the entire piece, and the turn was so unexpected and original. It was really well done. Rose should be expecting a letter from me soon, just to make sure that she's safe and okay while she's at school.

Ah well, look at the time! Best be off before I'm late - again. Thank you for a lovely (though dark) distraction!


Author's Response: Oh no, Ginny! Sorry to give you such a fright.
Thankfully this isn't your Rose! Hopefully she's not so silly as to play around with time turners!

Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to leave a review!


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Review #2, by Marshal Time Ticks Away

11th December 2015:
Hi, I'm here giving you a review for the hot seat!

Oh wow! So interesting and a unique take on how time turner's work. I really liked reading this. It was an interesting story! I liked the read, and I liked how I had to pause and think about what I was reading.

There is so much potential for more story in some ways that makes me wish you wrote more but at the same time what you have written is brilliant and very much a conclusive end.

Great work overall!

Author's Response: Thank you, Marshal!

I'm glad you like it.

I always knew this was how it was going to end. As being completely isolated is one of my biggest fears, I wanted to express that for this challenge.

But, I do see what you mean also! There could be so much more to Rose's story, she could've happened upon a whole new world o.o
So many possibilities other than completely depressing nothingness :/

Anyway, thank you so much for the review!!


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Review #3, by wolfgirl17 Time Ticks Away

16th October 2015:
Hey Rosie,
Oh my gosh this one got Dark! I loved it! Seriously, this was brilliant!

I can't think of anything worse then being stuck in a time loop over and over again, reliving the same scene with more and more versions of myself appearing and making things infinitely more complicated.

At the end there, was that madness? Did she go mad?

I really loved the way this started out so innocently and progressed to such darkness. Huge Kudos on that. This was such an exciting turn of events for the prompt I gave you. I'm seriously so impressed right now. You rock.

Also, huge applause on the cohesiveness of your writing, it was truly a treasure to read. Thanks so much for entering my challenge and I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to get around to reading, reviewing and judging all the entries.


Author's Response: Hi Ellie! Thanks for the review!

I'm so glad you liked it. I haven't ever written anything this dark or twisted before so it was quite an experience. I really enjoyed it though, I had a lot of fun writing it and taking part in your challenge!

She did go a bit crazy... or the world literally stopped existing. It's a bit open to interpretation :)

I am really so happy that you enjoyed it!
Thank you for the challenge and the lovely review!


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Review #4, by Slytherin Eagle Time Ticks Away

12th October 2015:
Hello, I'm Lea and I'm here for the review exchange on the forums.

Wow, this was such an interesting concept!
I definitely haven't really thought about what would happen if time went out of control like that, so it was very interesting to see what ideas were out there.

This wasn't how I was expecting the story to turn out when I started it. The whole last scene was absolutely amazing and played sort of a psychological game with the reader. Would Rose ever escape, or was she doomed? She was a well written character too, so that made her plight even more believable.

I don't think the challenge results have been posted yet so good luck and best wishes, I think this is a very strong entry.

Lea xx

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for the review!

It was very interesting to write, I'm glad you liked the ending! It really did get a bit twisted! Even more so than I originally anticipated!
Hmmm... well, it's a bit darker of a twist if she's stuck there for all eternity, but you can be optimistic if you wish :D

Thank you!

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Review #5, by moonbaby11 Time Ticks Away

3rd September 2015:
I've been reading a lot of the entries to the Dark Turn Challenge because stories like that are right up my alley and I honestly have to say that this 100% the most terrifying one that I've read. I suppose that's all personal opinion, but this story seems to play on one of my biggest fears (solitude, eternity, all that fun stuff).

It starts off so innocently and I had no idea this was the path I was going to be lead down. At the beginning I figured the 'dark turn' would have something to do with the boggart or perhaps even some sort of dark object from Scorpius' grandfather's time as a Death Eater. I never once thought that it would involve a time turner and, even when the object was introduced, I never thought it would end as darkly as it does.

I assumed that one of the Roses was just going to kill one of the others causing a whole big mess but it went even darker than that. I loved the imagery of Rose standing alone in the vast whiteness of her world and just screaming onto deaf ears. Honestly, the thought gave me chills. Those last two lines also managed to cause chills to run down my spine.

I think this was absolutely fantastic -- it's unlike anything I've ever seen (or thought of) before. I think you took a really original spin on the idea here and, as I've said multiple times, it was incredibly dark (and pretty terrifying). Phenomenal job! Good luck in the challenge and keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this wonderful review! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

As this was for the Dark Turn challenge, I did make it about one of my own biggest fears. Being completely alone forever and totally stuck... *shivers*

I'm glad I kept you guessing! I'm not really sure where I got the time turner idea from. I just knew that they had to play truth or dare (as per the challenge prompt), and that I knew what the end scene would be! So, basically I put the pieces together as to how and why she would be in that situation (the darkest/most twisted way possible), and hopefully it worked out. I do think it went a bit darker than I was intending though!

Thank you so much!

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Review #6, by nott theodore Time Ticks Away

31st August 2015:
(I just typed out a whole review for this story and lost it because the window decided to refresh, so sorry if this review is a little shorter than my normal ones!)

Um... wow.

That was my first thought when I read this story, and I've gone back and read it through again to check that I've grasped as much of it as I can. There was so much packed into this and I'm really, really impressed with it - the writing and the story that you've chosen to tell. It's definitely not what I was expecting when I clicked on this story from the recently added pages, but I'm so glad because it was even better!

The way that you started this story was so much lighter than the rest of it - it was kind of humorous, and I was expecting to read something fluffy and fun, where maybe a prank goes wrong or something. You really succeeded in lulling the reader into a false sense of security with that opening, because I had absolutely no idea what was coming next, and the twist here and the change in tone was so well done!

Just before I go any further, I did notice one typo - a couple of times you write passed when you should have written past. Obviously it's a tiny detail but I thought you might want to know so you can edit :)

The game of truth and dare that they started playing helped reinforce my idea that it was going to be a story about teenagers messing around or something. But it got so much darker than that so quickly. At the same time, the game was completely innocent - Rose and Al were just teasing each other and messing around, and then everything went wrong in a way that none of them could have predicted. I only started to have an inkling as to what might happen when Rose mentioned the necklace looking like something her mum would wear, and then the hourglass - but still, I didn't expect it to be so dark and scary!

Rose was such an interesting character to choose for this - you captured her voice really well, I think, and it came through very strongly from the start of the story and because of that I was rooting for her from the beginning and felt like I was with her when she was struggling through all of the different scenes with time travel. I liked Albus and Scorpius, too, and I think they were a great choice for the story - I liked the way that you also repeated their presence in the story later on, so there were three central characters whose reactions and attitudes changed over time and you were able to emphasise how much difference that makes to the story.

The time travel sections were so well written. I've read a couple of stories that deal with time travel and its dangers, but I don't think I've seen a fic that does it like this, and emphasises those dangers so well in just one story. This was really great - the fact that it kept happening again and again, every time Rose tried to escape from herself, and it just got more and more complicated and scary. I felt like I was Rose, her voice was that strong, and I was just as desperate as her that she'd find a way out of it and go back to normality at the Malfoy Manor with Albus and Scorpius in the time she's actually from. Instead, it just kept getting worse and worse and it was so worrying!

Then the ending... wow. I was really, really hoping that she'd finally find a way back to Malfoy Manor and rejoin the boys and be safe again, even if she had to try and explain what nightmare had happened and try and fix it. But instead things went completely the opposite way and she was forced to go backwards, back and back until there was nothing. Your writing at the end was so powerful and evocative, and you did a great job of capturing the sheer terror of that idea.

This was a really great story - I loved reading this!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Especially for re-writing it after you lost the first one- That means so much to me. I was actually really unsure about this story, so to hear some positive feedback is amazing.

I'm glad you liked the big twist in tone and story. I was trying to make a huge contrast with the two parts of the story and make it a bit of a surprise!

Thank you for picking up on that typo, I will definitely edit it soon. I did read through it several times, but I never seem to be able to get everything!

The choice of the three main characters actually came from the challenge prompt I was given. "Rose, Albus and Scorpius play Truth or Dare," was the prompt I got, and then had to put a dark spin on it. I think it even turned out a bit darker than I initially thought it would, as I wrote it just kept getting worse and worse!

I'm so glad you connected with Rose. I really wanted people to root for her and hope she finds her way back... which just makes the ending even more cruel... but it was the challenge's fault, I had to! :P

Thank you so much for reading this story and leaving an amazing review!

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