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Review #1, by HogwartsGirl618 The Parish

2nd December 2017:
Hi Emily! It's been forever, but I came back to the HPFF forums a week ago and saw that you started work on a new story. I'm so excited to read it. Hope you're doing well!

First, the premise is so creative. I've never read any of the vampire stories on HPFF, either so you're my first foray into that crossover. How you make the magical and non-magical words collide is even more fascinating. The detail of Filch leading is intriguing.

It makes sense that people with close relationships are asked to join this team, since it's very secret and will consume a lot of their work and lives. You set up that premise really well without seeming at all heavy-handed. I imagine that will increase the emotional stakes, too, of any conflict or betrayal, as I am sure there will have to be. (Or maybe I'm too eager for bloodsport.)

What command over language you demonstrate in your prose. I also loved the hyper-specific introduction of Hermione's meeting at 8:30 in 3B. It felt really true to the Ministry as a place: it's a sprawling, banal, complex bureaucracy and ultimately, it's not fully knowable. That leads to so many questions: what is the point (i.e. fighting professional boredom), whom can we trust, what are other deparatments doing, who do we really work for? The meeting detail also rang very true for Hermione, whose ability to deal with complexity might just land her in a place with a lot of complexity but little passion or obvious purpose (here, the government). But it sounds like she's about to get her sense of purpose back.


Author's Response: Hi there!

I'm so happy that you're back around HPFF! I've been on HPFT a lot lately, so it's always good to come back here and see who all is around! This story hasn't gone as far as I wanted it to, but I really want to come back to it, especially after such a great review!

I'm so glad that you liked this opening chapter and the premise of this story! I really love the show, The Strain, so it was cool to get to do a crossover with it. Now that you've got me thinking about this again, I hope I can write more soon! This review was so wonderful, and I really appreciate all the feedback on the language and description (which I feel like I'm never certain about!).

Thank you again!


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Review #2, by Fierce The Parish

2nd September 2015:
Yeah no, theres no way a Death Eater with a violent history, including being involved in a group that tried to overthrow the government, would be allowed to take part. Its childish and illogical.

Additionally Hermione simply wouldn't allow it, she's by the far the vindictive and canon shows us she holds a grudge longer than anyone in books. She's maimed and imprisoned people who have committed acts far less vile and evil that Draco has done. Its so illogical and unbelievable it smells of Dramione but I double checked for that tag.

Author's Response: Hello,

Thank you for reading and for giving me your opinion on this story. This will not have any Dramione tones at all, but I find it very interesting that you latched only onto Draco's presence in the story. There are many other elements here, as well as twelve other characters, but you felt it necessary to fixate on Draco. Interesting. You need not read on if the mere mention of a former Death Eater irks you so badly. However, I do encourage you to reread J.K. Rowling's novels to search for instances of Hermione acting vindictively in anything less than high-emotion moments. Do feel free to tell me if you find them. And if you have a free second, you can assess any number of dystopian novels and search for a team of "good guys" which does not include at least one formerly reprehensible person. If you don't have time for these things, that too is fine. Again, I thank you for your time and the effort it took you to write your thoughts here.

Have a good day.

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Review #3, by Avanell 2 Day One

23rd August 2015:
Interesting and intriguing story thus far!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I'm so glad you like the story so far!

Thanks again!

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Review #4, by RavenclawFTW Day One

20th August 2015:
Heya Emily! Back for chapter two and BvB! (And finished with my binging now...)

So I loved this chapter and getting to know more about the team and what they're up against! I feel like I'm really starting to get to know the team a lot better now, which is wonderful. I'm enjoying all of the different dynamics and tensions that are starting to reveal themselves! (Des is going to need to get over her attitude problems if they're going to all work as well as they need to together!) I really enjoyed how Billie had heard of Hermione's work and admired her for it-- last chapter it seemed like Hermione was feeling a little out of place but I hope she can soon realize her place in it all!

I'm just going to put this out there now (especially cause the convo in the cafeteria reinforced it to me): I have such a feeling that somebody in the Parish is going to die. Like...there's no way they're all making it. And I feel like it's going to be somebody I really care about and I'm not prepared for that. Even at chapter two. I'm not made for dark/angsty stories, I tell you!

Alternatively it's going to be somebody I didn't like as much who does something stupidly heroic for somebody else (after all, they're all already in pairs naturally...). Ugh. I'm not looking forward to that.

I'm continuing to love your characterization of Hermione in this story. I can totally see her behaving like this, and I especially enjoyed the conversation she had with Ron at the beginning of the chapter. The way this whole business is weighing on her seemed really in character and I liked the contrast with how it's affecting Ron so far, which also felt very in character. I thought that conversation was a great way to show not only their reactions to these events but also a little insight to their relationship, given the fairly intimate setting. I also really enjoyed the comparison to Harry and Hermione's reaction to that-- that's definitely not something that would just go away after the books ended, and this was a great tie in to that imo.

It also just really amuses me that what you're changing about this story from canon (at least so far) is Harry's kids' names! That seems like such a small thing haha.

One thing that stuck out to me a little bit in this chapter was the passage of time in the meeting. It seemed like Filch had spent a little time talking about how to identify the shoals and then when they took a break Hermione had been seated for two hours! I dunno. It didn't seem like the dialogue would take that much time to go through, but I didn't notice any summarizing sections (like "Hermione listened as Filch continued to elaborate on the subtle differences" or something). So that time shift just kinda jumped out at me.

Anyway, really solid chapter two! Can't wait for chapter three! :)


Author's Response: HI J! :D :D

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! You make me so happy when you tell me what you think of this story! I feel like I'm writing it alongside you since we do so many races, and I'm so glad you're reading. :) I'm really happy you feel that you're starting to get to know the team. There will absolutely be angst and drama once they have to fight the shoul. So we'll see how that goes. ;)

I am SO happy that you continue to love Hermione's characterization. I really love writing her, so I'm happy that she comes across so well. I don't write Romione (ever), but I'm glad you seem to like that too. And lastly: I hate Harry's children's names, haha. So I needed to change those, given the opportunity. ;) Thank you again for reading and reviewing! I appreciate it so much!


P.S. - I agree about the time thing. I actually thought about that while I was writing, but I didn't go back and change it. I'll do that soon. ;) Thanks again!

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Review #5, by RavenclawFTW The Parish

14th August 2015:
Hiya Emily! So I was really curious to check out this story from your comments in the races, and I was not disappointed! (And thank you for the shout out! You're too kind!)

This is really different from what I normally read and I'm really intrigued from this start. I love how you've written Hermione and the voice you're using. It feels really in-character, especially her concerns about continuing in Magical Law Enforcement when she has so many other talents. That really rang true to me. And I like the easiness of her relationship with Ron so far. They seem happy and comfortable, which is always nice to read about. (Please don't make it angsty...dark is enough!!)

I'm intrigued to see where the Draco/Astoria and Ron/Hermione thing is going. It seems like Hermione is friends with Astoria but made few mentions of Draco, and we didn't hear about Ron's reactions to him, so there still may be tension there. How will they work together? I'm excited to find out!

So I see now why you were naming 8 OCs! Yowza! You did a really, really great job at including a lot of diversity in this chapter, and wrote it very well. So kudos! I also thought your descriptions were really well mixed-in with everything else going on and I already have such a feel for all the different characters. I'm really excited to get to know them better and learn more about them! Also, I really enjoyed the inclusion of several Muggles on the team-- that seems like a great touch, and they'll help out in different ways. (And I love the Branwen shout out! I can tell she's going to be awesome.)

I thought it was really funny to imagine Filch fighting off all these vampire spawn things on his own! That could almost be a humorous crack fic but you managed to write his character with a great mix of suspicion and helpfulness, and I'm intrigued to see where he's going.

Overall, this was a great first chapter! I can't wait to find out what else is going to happen. I'll have to race you some more to get chapter two up soon! :D


Author's Response: Hi J!

Thank you so, so much for coming over to read and review! I'm so happy that you liked this first chapter! Our rat races are the only reason I've been able to get this first chapter finished so quickly, so thank you!

I'm really glad you liked Hermione's characterization! She's pretty much my favorite character to write for, so I really have fun with that. :) As for Draco and Astoria in this story -- I like to imagine that Hermione and Astoria are close from working together, and everyone else has kind of let go of what happened in the past. Maybe they aren't friendly, exactly, but I feel like ten years would dull some of the animosity. ;) We'll see how I end up writing that!

The team! Oh my gosh. So many OCs. I have no idea how I'm going to manage with them all. I really wanted an opportunity to write a diverse, large cast, and this was it. I haven't really juggled this many characters before, though, so we're gonna have to see how it goes. ;)

Thank you for all of your compliments! I'm glad you liked this chapter (and the Branwen shout out, haha)! We'll race again soon, and I'll write more. :)

Thanks for all your help so far!

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Review #6, by MadiMalfoy The Parish

14th August 2015:
Hi! :) I saw you posted about this in the Ravenclaw Story Updates thread so I decided to pop over and see what this was all about!

While I don't watch "The Strain" on FX I have heard of it so I really like your tie-in to it! I'm very excited to see how you use Filch's character here as well considering he's not usually touched upon very often in fanfiction. The idea for this must have struck you like lightning or something because this is so different from the usual fics that deal with having to kill something bad and brand-new. I like it a lot!

Your characterization of Hermione so far is spectacular as well! Her growing restlessness in working in the Department of Magical Law seems very true to character for me as well because she is so talented and would want to spread that talent around. I'm also very excited to see how you develop all of these other characters you've created as well.

Branwen does deserve to have a character named after her because she is just such a wonderful person! :) This website is one of the reasons I continue to write fan fiction because of it's amazingly friendly and welcoming atmosphere. A really great start to what I'm sure is going to be a phenomenal novel!! Adding it to my reading list for sure, even though I'm not a huge fan of Romione. :) ♥
~MadiMalfoy x

Author's Response: Hi Madi!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm so happy that you liked the first chapter of this! You're totally right to say that the idea hit me like lightning. My sister watches "The Strain," so she's gotten me into it. When someone challenged me to write a dark Romione, my brain just clicked, and this story was born! I'm also not a fan of Romione (at all!), haha! I'm a huge Dramione shipper, but since Laura (tangledconstellations) wanted to challenge me to write a Romione, I couldn't shy away from that! So we'll see if I do that couple any justice.

I'm really glad you liked the story's premise, as well as Hermione's characterization. I love writing for her so much, so that part at least will be a lot of fun. Also, I'm so happy that you liked that I named a character after Branwen, haha! She's so fabulous, so I couldn't resist.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the rest of the novel as I write it!


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