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8 Reviews Found

Review #1, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Little Black Crosses

2nd December 2015:
Theo and Blaise and love, angst and sadness. These are a few of my favorite things.

Oh, my God. It was just heartbreaking. But in a good way. Like, I just had all the feels, reading one of my favorite characters so damaged by... his own family. That's just all kinds of messed up. But then it takes away his trust in Theo - and Theo is just love and hearts and sunshine (yes, yes he is) - and it's all just so sad.

I'm imagining my own little epilogue, in the future, with a happy ending for them. Where he's far, far away from his mother and her husbands. Because that's what he needs - the start of what he needs, but a good start.

I loved this very much. I shall be back for more of your stories.

Connor.

Author's Response: Naw Connor!

You're so sweet! I'd love to read that epilogue if you're struck by enough plunnies to want to write it.

I can't wait to see which of my other fics strike your fancy. If you like Wolfstar you should check out "Losing You", "Feed Me Chocolate" and "Misappropriated".

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. You're wonderful!

xx-Ellie


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Review #2, by TreacleTart Little Black Crosses

8th August 2015:
Hey Ellie!

I'm here to review your story for my After Affects Challenge. I'll be breaking this review down by categories so you can see exactly how I'm judging it.

Spelling/Grammar/Typos - For the most part this was pretty good. The spelling and grammar is pretty consistent throughout, but I did find a handful of typos.

having a son llike you. like

push the food around you plate your

He has your fear, though he has no yet earned it. not yet

All you know was that they come is that

only saying such horrible things to because you wanter her to her because you wanted

Plot Flow - I thought this flowed quite well. The transition between Blaise's nightmares of his home life to him being in his bed at school are very smooth. It's easy to distinguish where he is and what's happening in each section and the story builds very nicely.

Characterization - I'm with you on your version of Blaise. As you know, I wrote an abused Blaise as well, although I think in your version the abuse is quite a bit more severe. Either way, I like how you've characterized him. I think it fits with what we know of him from cannon. He's quiet and icy and he hardly ever interacts with anyone else. This would be a very logical explanation as to why.

Accurately portrays subject matter - I thought you handled the prompt quite well. You really do show us Blaise suffering the affects of trauma and you do it in gut wrenching detail. If I'm being honest, there were moments of this that were really hard for me to read just because they were so in depth about something so awful.

Accurately portrays subject matter - This category is tricky because it can be a bit subjective. Each person's experience with PTSD is unique and there are many symptoms within the disease. You've covered nightmares, fear, avoidance and panic attacks. I thought you handled all of that well. The only question that I had was about the idea of touch causing seizures. I could definitely understand touch causing him panic attacks and anxiety, but unless he's epileptic the odds of stress causing him seizures strikes me strangely. Otherwise, I thought you nailed the symptoms.

Anything Else - This piece really was brutal from the get go. The fact that you included such poetic descriptions with in the brutality really got to me. I don't know quite how to explain it, but just know it's a good thing.

Good work and thanks for entering.

~Kaitlin

Author's Response: Hey bud,

I'll pop in and amend those typos. I'm pleased you liked the entry. I had such trouble getting published and it was originally very different to this.

xx-Ellie


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Review #3, by Mrs. Claus Little Black Crosses

31st July 2015:
Mrs, Claus here, come down from the pole to give some last minute Christmas in July gift giving!

This was so haunting, and it's hard to believe someone could do that to their own child, even though it does happen far too often. Blase is in so much pain, and he's so scared to let someone in to help him, it...oh my, I wish that I could do something. Poor boy, he should never have to go through something so horrible. :(

Theo really is a friend, and I feel like he's showing a much different side than what is shown from the Slytherin house at other times. Now if only Blaze would let him in.


A lovely story, but I must be off. There's much to do before my time is up!

Author's Response: Naw, Thanks Mrs Claus.

I'm pleased you enjoyed this take on the inner workings of a Slytherin mind. Safe travels.

xx-Ellie


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Review #4, by Lilly Flower Forever Little Black Crosses

29th July 2015:
awww poor blaise! i feel soo sorry for him now!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

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Review #5, by guest Little Black Crosses

29th July 2015:
Are you seriously starting a new one now, when you already have so many WIPs?!
Anyway, as usual, really liked the story and please update as and when you can! Thanks! :**

Author's Response: Don't worry, It's only a one-shot. Glad you liked it

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Review #6, by guest Little Black Crosses

29th July 2015:
Wow! Shit, that's powerful - especially considering it's written in second person. Looking forward to how this one will pan out

;]

Author's Response: Thanks so much. It's only a one-shot, so this is the whole thing, but I'm pleased you liked it.

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Review #7, by Alea Thoron Little Black Crosses

29th July 2015:
Brilliant background story. Sad but brilliant. Thank you.

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm pleased you like it

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Review #8, by Don't Trust The Silver Eyes Little Black Crosses

29th July 2015:
Oh this is so sad! You've really captured the trauma inflicted on him and how it has affected him till then. I loved the boys relationship and how caring Theo was :) you are brilliant

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. Thanks for your continued support.

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