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7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by cherry_pop94 the young and the clueless

17th December 2015:
Hello!

I'm here for the Ravenclaw gift tag!

This is such a fun story! I love fluffy Jily and this was such a creative one! Haha, I loved Marlene and Dorcas. 'Brightest witch of our age my foot'! Haha, I have to agree with here. Lily was a bit clueless when it came to dating, I suppose.

I'm glad she told him at the end. And in such a cute way! They really are the sweetest couple!

Thanks for sharing and I hope you have a lovely holiday season!

Stefanie

Author's Response: Sorry for taking so long to respond to your review!

I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed the story! Fluffy Jily is one of my favourite things to write and it always makes me so happy to know that others enjoyed the story as much as I enjoyed writing it.

Thank you so much for leaving a review!


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Review #2, by Mrs. Claus the young and the clueless

31st July 2015:
Mrs. Claus here, giving out some last minute Christmas in July reviews before heading back to the pole. Well, if my ride decides to listen to me. Seems to be going a bit slow lately. Comet is a sweety, but he can be a bit stubborn at times...

Well, Lily could have used some, um, pointing out before, I'd think. They really were a lovely pair, despite all the fights they used to get into, but she never really had the greatest, um... what's it called? Track record, she never had the best track record when it came to picking up on boy's feelings.

Sirius and the others, I feel, would be getting more than a little aspirated by now, so I suspect they're happy they finally got together as well. Lets them have some sleep.

Anyway, I'd love to stay and chat, but I must be off. There's many stories left to see and only a hour left to find them!

Author's Response: Lily definitely could've used some pointers when it came to James's feelings for her. But I think a lot of people are like that to be honest, no one really notices when someone is romantically interested in them but they notice when it happens to someone else. But at least she caught on pretty quick you know and fixed the mistake.

I don't know if Sirius would be getting much sleep to be honest with you, I mean, now James has material to use to go on about how great Lily is and the different things he likes about her.

Thank you for reviewing!


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Review #3, by Beeezie the young and the clueless

30th July 2015:
Hey, here for the BvB review fest!

Wow. It's interesting to go straight from Bad Blood to this, because it's such a different tone. I loved this, too, though - it was such a cute take on Lily and James. Lily-as-oblivious-but-interested and James as interested-and-confused is a wonderful take on the beginning of their relationship - it captures a lot of the awkwardness that I think was probably there, but it makes it incredibly endearing rather than actively uncomfortable.

And there were a lot of details that just made this one-shot. I loved the way Peter snapped at them - I can totally understand the "... yeah, this is all very nice, but I'm trying to sleep here!" Sirius's advice was spot on - but I can totally sympathize with Lily, here, even moreso than James.

Because I've totally been that girl. Super embarrassing story here - when I was in college, I told an old friend from HS that I had a crush on him - and then totally brushed off his IMing me whenever I was online for awhile to chat and say, "Hey, do you want to do something?" as him just trying to stop me from feeling awkward about it all. In retrospect... um.

So I can totally see where Lily's coming from, and I can also see Dorcas's response being "Oh my god, shoe-meet-head please, what is wrong with you?" At least Lily made it right pretty quickly after that - I feel like if she'd given herself enough time to process what happened, she might have been overwhelmed with embarrassment!

I did notice a couple typos - the "James" after "You think that'll work?" should have been capitalized, but it wasn't. You also switched to present tense a couple times - e.g., Now she finds out she could've...

Those are minor, though, and this was adorable.

Author's Response: SO SORRY FOR TAKING SO LONG WITH YOUR RESPONSE TO THIS I'VE BEEN AWAY FOR A WHILE BUT I'M BACK AGAIN!

Yeah, this and Bad Blood are kind of complete opposites of each other so it can be a little surprising if you go directly from one to the other.

I love for Lily and James, I cannot count the amount of nights that I've spent hours just reading fic on them and I've wanted to write something portraying James as dorky and nervous for a while so I'm so happy to hear that I pulled it off.

I didn't want to forget Peter, he gets forgotten a lot so I made an active effort to include him as much as I could. I would've been the same as you in the situation, it's easy to spot when someone likes someone else but I'm completely oblivious if it's ever directed at me.

If I remember, I'll definitely go back and fix those typos, thank you for pointing it out and thanks for leaving a review!


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Review #4, by pottered  the young and the clueless

22nd July 2015:
awww this was so cute and so different, usually it's the same plot of lily hating james but this was so different and adorable. and lily was sooo cute.

P.S. i think my vocab has also shrunk to only cute and adorable lol but really this was really cute
xx

Author's Response: I used to be a sucker for the Lily hating James cliche but now I've become fluffy trash so I can no longer do this to them. I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it and thank you for reviewing!

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Review #5, by Fonzzx the young and the clueless

13th July 2015:
Yes! I adore this. I love how clueless Lily is! I have been known to be exactly the same!

Author's Response: I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed the one-shot, thank you for reviewing!

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Review #6, by navyfail the young and the clueless

7th July 2015:
I can never resist a good Jily one-shot and this one was really cute. I like how you put a twist to their story by not making her hate him. And I find it funny that she kept trying to set him up with her friends. And Dorcas with her shoe was amusing. And your Sirius was very much canon. I keep saying 'and', don't I? Sorry about that. Really cute, heartwarming story! It's adorable how she gets on her knees at the end. There were a few grammatical errors I noticed, but other than that wonderful job!

~Sama

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing and I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Dorcas was my favourite to write in this one-shot simply because she was just so done with Lily's cluelessness so I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed her character. I'll get right to fixing those grammatical errors as soon as I have the time and thank you for reviewing!

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Review #7, by kenpo the young and the clueless

7th July 2015:
Hey!

Okay, so the title of the story made me choke on my drink. (Thanks. You'll be getting a hospital bill later). It totally piqued by interest and I had to read it!

I loved this! It was short and sweet and to the point, and reminded me of high school dating (oh, how I don't miss it. At all.)

I think my favorite part was the way the two groups of friends reacted, and talked about the same thing. Dorcas, I'd like to read more about (you got any Dorcas stories I could read? If not, you should write one)

Poor poor James! I felt so bad for him. I thought for sure Lily would know what he was trying to say, but sometimes even the smartest people can be dumb.

This was a nice little oneshot!

-Georgia

Author's Response: Wow it's taken me really long to answer this but let me start by saying thank you for leaving a review!

This may sound weird but I'm glad that the title made you choke because I snorted really hard when I came up with it (yes, I was really proud of myself for thinking it up, sue me).

I'm so glad to hear that you loved it! I was actually wondering how long this one-shot was going to end up being to be honest with you, they haven't been going over 2000 words, which I'm not really sure why.

I, unfortunately do not have any Dorcas stories for you to read but if I dig through all of my story ideas that I've got written down, I'm sure that I could find one. Or I might just come up with a new one based off of the Dorcas in this story.

Thank you so much for reviewing!


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