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Review #1, by XOdannieXO A Puzzle Of Sorts

29th June 2015:
Interesting... Interesting to say the least. The first sentences didn't really capture my attention but I kept on reading anyway. Glad that I did, though. What I would work on is to decribe a lot more; like feelings, thoughts, atmosphere, surroundings etc. Your work is a little rushed. Listing the different days and James' thoughts was unlike anything I have seen; it's a great idea + the puzzle/search thing for Stellar, as well. But you could have written so much more for the different days. I don't know, if you're going to go into a little more detail... It's a suggestion and it would make things more interesting and lively. Other than that, I cannot wait to find out where this is going!

Author's Response: Thank you for that information. It probably was a little rushed, but that is because I wanted to do the first chapter so that I could crank out some of the good stuff. I'm pretty much having a fangirl attack (mix between panic attack and fangirling) because I'm really excited. Description is a pretty rough patch for me, but I'm trying. Thank you for being so nice about it. It's going to get more descriptive as we go on and as we discover that Stellar has a very intriguing, funny, but also heart breaking past.

Because I am getting some good vibes from you right now, I'm gonna give you an opportunity that few others will get:

Stellar has a little sister. If possible, could you create her little sister. I wil give you full credit and everything. I promise.

Keep Reading, It Gets Better-


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